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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the steps for the production of honey. Overall there are seven continuous stages that the bees follow to elaborate the honey. Firstly bees fly out from the hive looking for flowers full of nectar, which is the principal raw material for honey. Once they found enough nectar they retrieved to the hive where they store all the load within cells inside the hive. The bees start swinging their wings pushing air throughout the cells, this step increases the heat enough to start the elimination of water. Lastly eliminating enough water in each cell produces the finished good that we call honey.
The diagram
shows
the steps for the production of honey.
Overall
there are seven continuous stages that the bees follow to elaborate the honey.
Firstly
bees
fly
out from the hive looking for flowers full of nectar, which is the principal raw material for honey.
Once
they found
enough
nectar they retrieved to the hive where they store all the load within cells inside the hive. The bees
start
swinging their wings pushing air throughout the cells, this step increases the heat
enough
to
start
the elimination of water.
Lastly
eliminating
enough
water in each cell produces the finished
good
that we call honey.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
104 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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