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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections in 2050

The pie charts illustrate the data of people's ages in two countries namely: Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and 2050 projections. Overall it is obviously show that ages 15-59 years occupied the vast majority in both country and both years. It is noticeable that in year 2000 in Yemen youngsters like 0-14 years of age compromise the 50. 1% of the total population. Moreover the senior citizens which in the ages 60 plus years old both gain around 3-5 % in both years. However the middle age which is 15-59 years old in the year 2000 shows less than 50% with compare to year 2050 with a slight increased to 57. 3%. The country of Italy in year 2000 accumulate 3/4 of the total populations in ages 15-59% years old. While 1/4 and 1/8 % remain to youngsters and old people. In year 2050 perspective the number of teenager and middle ages dropped to 46. 2% in total almost 1/2 of the overall number of citizens in the said country. In addition, the senior citizens double in numbers from 24. 1% to 42. 3% in the future year. While youngsters remain stable in projection year.
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2000
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