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A map diagram in IELTS Writing Task 1 is likely to be a before/after street plan that requires you to compare past and present. In this case, however, it’s present and future that you need to compare. The diagram shows proposed changes to Foster Road. Write a 150-word report describing the proposed changes for a local committee.

A map diagram in IELTS Writing Task 1 is likely to be a before/after street plan that requires you to compare past and present. In this case, however, it’s present and future that you need to compare. The diagram shows proposed changes to Foster Road. Write a 150-word report describing the proposed changes for a local committee. 85LYm
The diagram shows suggested changes of Foster Road between SE 84th and 85th Avenue from being an insecure street for local residents to making it an attractive avenue that is safer for people. First of all, the scheduler proposes to install wider sidewalks and bicycle lanes meanwhile shrink the number of lanes for the cars. Also. there will be set up pedestrian crossing at the end of the street with a pedestrian island where will be safer for the dwellers to stop. And also the plan of the designer includes planting trees on both sides of the sidewalk to make the avenue look more lively and beautiful while ensuring the safety of residents. The trees will not only give a wonderful view but also refresh the air, which will be beneficial for the townspeople. Summing up, according to these proposed modifications, Foster Road will become a safer and more comfortable street for local residents.
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of Foster Road between SE 84th and 85th Avenue from being an insecure street for local residents to making it an attractive avenue
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there
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up pedestrian crossing at the
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of the street with a pedestrian island where will be safer for the dwellers to
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stop
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And
also
the plan of the designer includes planting trees on both sides of the sidewalk to
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make
the avenue look more lively and
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beautiful
while ensuring the safety of residents. The trees will not
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only
give a wonderful view
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but
also
refresh the air, which will be beneficial for the townspeople. Summing up, according to these proposed modifications, Foster Road will become a safer and more comfortable street for local residents.
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IELTS academic A map diagram in IELTS Writing Task 1 is likely to be a before/after street plan that requires you to compare past and present. In this case, however, it’s present and future that you need to compare. The diagram shows proposed changes to Foster Road. Write a 150-word report describing the proposed changes for a local committee.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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