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A lack of female leaders is a serious problem in Japan

A lack of female leaders is a serious problem in Japan J3DeD
I agree with the idea that disproportionately low woman in politics creates a serious problem. There are some reasons to cement my opinion. From my experience, everyone has a kind of biased, if not discrimination, thought based on each situation, leading us to pass a lopsided law, like supporting the budget related to geriatric society, with taking away feelings of the young. This problem has caused numerous obstacles which will have tormented youngsters, such as shortage of birth rates, the bond swelling up to the point where the government can’t pay Although people have noticed the incompetence of politicians, we have never changed it because of the system which protects a politician. That’s why we all younger people had better change the corrupted rule and the first step is reshaping the rates of male to female leaders.
I
agree
with the
idea
that
disproportionately
low woman in politics creates a serious problem.

There are
some
reasons to cement my opinion.

From my experience, everyone has a kind of biased, if not discrimination,
thought
based on each situation, leading us to pass a lopsided law, like supporting the budget related to geriatric society, with taking away feelings of the young. This problem has caused numerous obstacles which will have tormented youngsters, such as shortage of birth rates, the bond swelling up to the point where the
government
can’t
pay


Although
people
have noticed the incompetence of politicians, we have never
changed
it
because
of the system which protects a politician. That’s why we all younger
people
had better
change
the corrupted
rule
and the
first
step is reshaping the rates of male to female leaders.
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IELTS academic A lack of female leaders is a serious problem in Japan

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
137 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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