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The changes of the gallery betw2005 and now2005

The changes of the gallery betw2005 and now2005 5kYMN
The map illustrates how the gallery has changed over 16 year periods. There have been several changes. It is evident that the number of stairs to the upper floor has declined, constructing a lift and exhibition room 4 which made into two separate areas. In 2005, to the west of the gallery, there was a cafe and a shop replaced by a gallery shop. The stairs to the upper floor have been reduced to build a lift. Demolishing gallery office, some vending machines were constructed. The width of the steps adjacent to the entrance was diminished to construct a ramp for wheelchair users. Exhibition room 4 has been converted into two different places, temporary exhibitions, and children's area. The location of the reception desk and entrance hall were replaced. All places observed a change except exhibition rooms 1, 2, 3.
The map illustrates how the
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16 year
periods. There have been several
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changes
. It is evident that the number of stairs to the upper floor has declined, constructing a lift and exhibition room 4 which made into two separate areas.

In 2005, to the west of the
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gallery
, there was a
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cafe
and a shop replaced by a
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gallery
shop. The stairs to the upper floor have been
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reduced
to build a lift. Demolishing
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gallery
office,
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some
vending machines
were constructed
. The width of the steps adjacent to the entrance
was diminished
to construct a ramp for wheelchair users.

Exhibition room 4 has
been converted
into two
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different
places, temporary exhibitions, and children's area. The location of the reception desk and entrance hall
were replaced
. All places observed a
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change
except exhibition rooms 1, 2, 3.
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IELTS academic The changes of the gallery betw2005 and now2005

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
140 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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