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A diagram show islip town changes in 1960 and 2000

A diagram show islip town changes in 1960 and 2000 3LNYN
Ina comprehensive details is put forth in the form of a couple of diagrams with regard to the change which are expected to be done it islip town in the future. A fleeting glance at the details show there are some quiet significant differences and key similarities in both the figuresThe most striking feature of the details is firstly the town size is increased and shops will also replaced by bus station shopping centre and car park. Also one main road has changed by only pedestrian walkAlthough some houses are built near to park as well as school and house situated same place as past. Moreover, one dual carriageway also seen in the outside of town. Overall, it can be observed that some of developments are done in future also some place are divided by new style
Ina comprehensive
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details
is put
forth in the form of a couple of diagrams with regard to the
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change
which are
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expected
to
be done
it
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islip
town in the future. A fleeting glance at the
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details
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show
there are
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some
quiet significant differences and key similarities in both the
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figuresThe
most striking feature of the
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details
is
firstly
the town size
is increased
and shops will
also
replaced by bus station shopping
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centre
and car park.
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Also
one main road has
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changed
by
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only
pedestrian
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walkAlthough
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some
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houses
are built
near to park
as well
as school and
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house
situated same place as past.
Moreover
, one dual carriageway
also
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seen
The usual preposition for "outside" is "on" not "in". Revise: "on the outside".
in the outside
of town.
Overall
, it can
be observed
that
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some of developments
are done
in future
also
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some
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place
are divided
by new style

IELTS academic A diagram show islip town changes in 1960 and 2000

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
136 words
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