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[4/6, 7:35 PM] kmary8629: T.mD U..cm [4/6, 7:47 PM] kmary8629: The diagram illustrate the stages of development of a specie of fish called salmon . Overall,it can be seen that a salmon grows in three stages beginning with almond eggs and ending with adult salmon .Also that the development is completed after five years . To begin ,the adult salmon lays eggs under stones of reeds in the upper river which is slow flowing.they stay there for approximately 5_6 months before leaving the upper river as fry which is usually 3-8cm in length. From here the fry move directly to the lover river which is always fast flowing . they remain there for approximately 4years from which they develop into the smolt.The smolt measures 12-15cm in length and the is the end of the second stage. Finally,the smolt move to the open see where they stay for approximately 5years.this is where we have the adult salmon which is 70-76cm long .this adult salmon after the specified year moves to the upper river to la

[4/6, 7: 35 PM] kmary8629: T. mD U. . cm [4/6, 7: 47 PM] kmary8629: The diagram illustrate the stages of development of a specie of fish called salmon. Overall, it can be seen that a salmon grows in three stages beginning with almond eggs and ending with adult salmon. Also that the development is completed after five years. To begin, the adult salmon lays eggs under stones of reeds in the upper river which is slow flowing. they stay there for approximately 5_6 months before leaving the upper river as fry which is usually 3-8cm in length. From here the fry move directly to the lover river which is always fast flowing. they remain there for approximately 4years from which they develop into the smolt. The smolt measures 12-15cm in length and the is the end of the second stage. Finally, the smolt move to the open see where they stay for approximately 5years. this is where we have the adult salmon which is 70-76cm long. this adult salmon after the specified year moves to the upper river to la oRE7K
The diagram illustrate the stages of development of a specie of fish called salmon. Overall, it can be seen that a salmon grows in three stages beginning with almond eggs and ending with adult salmon. Also that the development is completed after five years. To begin, the adult salmon lays eggs under stones of reeds in the upper river which is slow flowing. they stay there for approximately 5_6 months before leaving the upper river as fry which is usually 3-8cm in length. From here the fry move directly to the lover river which is always fast flowing. they remain there for approximately 4years from which they develop into the smolt. The smolt measures 12-15cm in length and the is the end of the second stage. Finally, the smolt move to the open see where they stay for approximately 5years. this is where we have the adult salmon which is 70-76cm long. this adult salmon after the specified year moves to the upper river to lay their eggs and the cycle continue
The diagram
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illustrate
the stages of development of a specie of fish called salmon.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that a salmon grows in three stages beginning with almond eggs and ending with adult salmon.
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Also
that the development
is completed
after five years.

To
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begin
, the adult salmon lays eggs under stones of reeds in the upper
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river
which is slow flowing.
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they
stay there for approximately 5_6 months
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before
leaving the upper
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river
as fry which is
usually
3
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-8cm
in length.

From here the fry
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move
directly
to the lover
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river
which is always
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fast
flowing.
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they
remain there for approximately 4years from which they develop into the
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smolt
. The
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smolt
measures 12
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-15cm
in length and
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the
is the
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end
of the second stage.

Finally
, the
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smolt
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move
to the open
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see
where they stay for approximately 5years.
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this
is where we have the adult salmon which is 70
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-76cm
long.
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this
adult salmon after the specified year
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moves
to the upper
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river
to lay their eggs and the cycle
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continue
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IELTS academic [4/6, 7: 35 PM] kmary8629: T. mD U. . cm [4/6, 7: 47 PM] kmary8629: The diagram illustrate the stages of development of a specie of fish called salmon. Overall, it can be seen that a salmon grows in three stages beginning with almond eggs and ending with adult salmon. Also that the development is completed after five years. To begin, the adult salmon lays eggs under stones of reeds in the upper river which is slow flowing. they stay there for approximately 5_6 months before leaving the upper river as fry which is usually 3-8cm in length. From here the fry move directly to the lover river which is always fast flowing. they remain there for approximately 4years from which they develop into the smolt. The smolt measures 12-15cm in length and the is the end of the second stage. Finally, the smolt move to the open see where they stay for approximately 5years. this is where we have the adult salmon which is 70-76cm long. this adult salmon after the specified year moves to the upper river to la

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  • [4/6, 7:35 PM] kmary8629: T.mD U..cm [4/6, 7:47 PM] kmary8629: The diagram illustrate the stages of development of a specie of fish called salmon . Overall,it can be seen that a salmon grows in three stages beginning with almond eggs and ending with adult salmon .Also that the development is completed after five years . To begin ,the adult salmon lays eggs under stones of reeds in the upper river which is slow flowing.they stay there for approximately 5_6 months before leaving the upper river as fry which is usually 3-8cm in length. From here the fry move directly to the lover river which is always fast flowing . they remain there for approximately 4years from which they develop into the smolt.The smolt measures 12-15cm in length and the is the end of the second stage. Finally,the smolt move to the open see where they stay for approximately 5years.this is where we have the adult salmon which is 70-76cm long .this adult salmon after the specified year moves to the upper river to la