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[2/28, 11:50 AM] Nurse Ifiok Obot: The pie chart above shows various reasons for flight delays in an Asian country between 2015 and 2016. On the whole, it could be deduced that the factor recorded the highest percentage is airline operation management. This is evidenced by a percentage of 40 and 46 in 2015 and 2016 respectively while the lowest factor is airport security with 4% in 2015 and 13% in 2016. Evidently, the second most obvious reason for delays in flight is bad weather. This is indicated with a percentage of 21 in 2015 and 23 in 2016. Furthermore, there's a significant reduction in air traffic control between 2015 and 2016 as indicated by a reduction in a percentage of 25 in 2015 to 12% in 2016. This applies also to military factor which recorded a decline from 10% in 2015 to 6% in 2016.

[2/28, 11: 50 AM] Nurse Ifiok Obot: The pie chart above shows various reasons for flight delays in an Asian country between 2015 and 2016. On the whole, it could be deduced that the factor recorded the highest percentage is airline operation management. This is evidenced by a percentage of 40 and 46 in 2015 and 2016 respectively while the lowest factor is airport security with 4% in 2015 and 13% in 2016. Evidently, the second most obvious reason for delays in flight is bad weather. This is indicated with a percentage of 21 in 2015 and 23 in 2016. Furthermore, there's a significant reduction in air traffic control between 2015 and 2016 as indicated by a reduction in a percentage of 25 in 2015 to 12% in 2016. This applies also to military factor which recorded a decline from 10% in 2015 to 6% in 2016. BJlnw
The pie chart above shows various reasons for flight delays in an Asian country between 2015 and 2016. On the whole, it could be deduced that the factor recorded the highest percentage is airline operation management. This is evidenced by a percentage of 40 and 46 in 2015 and 2016 respectively while the lowest factor is airport security with 4% in 2015 and 13% in 2016. Evidently, the second most obvious reason for delays in flight is bad weather. This is indicated with a percentage of 21 in 2015 and 23 in 2016. Furthermore, there's a significant reduction in air traffic control between 2015 and 2016 as indicated by a reduction in a percentage of 25 in 2015 to 12% in 2016. This applies also to military factor which recorded a decline from 10% in 2015 to 6% in 2016
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of 21 in 2015 and 23 in 2016.

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of 25 in 2015 to 12% in 2016. This applies
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to military factor which recorded a decline from 10% in 2015 to 6% in 2016
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IELTS academic [2/28, 11: 50 AM] Nurse Ifiok Obot: The pie chart above shows various reasons for flight delays in an Asian country between 2015 and 2016. On the whole, it could be deduced that the factor recorded the highest percentage is airline operation management. This is evidenced by a percentage of 40 and 46 in 2015 and 2016 respectively while the lowest factor is airport security with 4% in 2015 and 13% in 2016. Evidently, the second most obvious reason for delays in flight is bad weather. This is indicated with a percentage of 21 in 2015 and 23 in 2016. Furthermore, there's a significant reduction in air traffic control between 2015 and 2016 as indicated by a reduction in a percentage of 25 in 2015 to 12% in 2016. This applies also to military factor which recorded a decline from 10% in 2015 to 6% in 2016.

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