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just some random poem that I had came up with, so please check for me

just some random poem that I had came up with, so please check for me Nwgjb
“Five girls and one man, Go into an abandoned house. Guess what game they will play? Telling stories and molding clay, Just some kids easy games. Or it can be a mother’s aims, Lull her baby to sleep, Playing and cooking some good food, Cause good child can not weep, If mother isn’t being rude. ” aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaabbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbcccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddSouSou
“Five girls and one
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man
,

Go into an abandoned
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house
.

Guess what game they will play?

Telling stories and molding clay,

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Just
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some
kids easy games.

Or it can be a mother’s aims,

Lull her baby to sleep,

Playing and cooking
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some
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good
food,

Cause
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good
child can not weep,

“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
mother isn’t being rude. ”

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaabbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbcccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddSouSou
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IELTS speaking just some random poem that I had came up with, so please check for me

Speaking
  American English
11 paragraphs
56 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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