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If you had the power to change one thing about your past, what would it be and why?

If you had the power to change one thing about your past, what would it be and why? ob7p3
I always wish to have a super power to change things or to go back in time to change a serious decision u did, to live a happy memory again, to see a person is not with us now. After the high school, my family and me sat together to decision which college I would choose, I was very good at languages so my father suggest going the ALSON College (a college for studying languages such as English – French-Spanish). , rather than my mother she wanted me to go for business, but obviously I do not like math too much so it was difficult. I loved Biology so much I hope I could go to medicine school. But at the end when the score appeared, I was disappointed because my score didn’t make reach to medicine school and the ALSON school as well. Therefore, I have to choose between tourism guidance and Business I argue with mom about this issue and she insisted to go for business as it had brilliant future may be I could work in bank or had my own business, which is a good profit. As I hate Math so no way, to choose business school so I go for tourism guidance I learn beautiful things but when I have finished, I realize that I did not have plenty of opportunities. I worked a part of my field, I have never work as tour guide. I worked in teaching, I never thought one day I will be a teacher and I am happy with my career now. Therefore, I wish I could change this bad decision and choose teaching school instead.
I always wish to have a super power to
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things or to go back in time to
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change
a serious decision u did, to
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live
a happy memory again, to
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see
a person is not with us
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now
.

After the high
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school
, my family and me sat together to decision which college I would
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choose
, I was
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very
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good
at languages
so
my father suggest going the
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ALSON
College (a college for studying languages such as English
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–
French-Spanish).
Loose punctuation mark.
,
rather
than my mother she wanted me to go for
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business
,
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but
obviously
I do not like math too much
so
it was difficult.

I
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loved
Biology
so
much I hope I could go to medicine
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school
.
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But
at the
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end
when the score appeared, I
was disappointed
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because
my score didn’t
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make
reach to medicine
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school
and the
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ALSON
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school
as
well
.

Therefore
, I
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have to
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choose
between tourism guidance and
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Business
I argue with mom about this
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issue and
she
The usual collocation for "insisted" is "on" not "to". Did you mean "insisted on going"?
insisted to go
for
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business
as it had brilliant future
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may be
I could work in bank or had my
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own
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business
, which is a
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good
profit.

As I hate Math
so
no way, to
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choose
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business
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school
so
I go for tourism guidance I learn
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beautiful
things
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but
when I have finished, I realize that I did not have
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plenty
of opportunities.

I worked a part of my field, I have never work as tour guide.

I worked in teaching, I never
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thought
one day I will be a
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teacher and
I am happy with my career
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now
.

Therefore
, I wish I could
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change
this
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bad
decision and
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choose
If 'choose' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to teach".
teaching
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school
instead
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IELTS speaking If you had the power to change one thing about your past, what would it be and why?

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