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IELTS Speaking A successful businessman ✤ Who is he ✤ How do you know him ✤ Why do you admire him?

IELTS Speaking A successful businessman ✤ Who is he ✤ How do you know him ✤ Why do you admire him? VwnWQ
• There are many successful businessmen in my country, such as Anil mbani, Mukesh Ambani, Rattan Tata, Vijay Malya and so on• But here I would like to talk about Mukesh Ambani. • He is in his late fifties and looks very handsome. • He has a degree in Chemical Engineering• He joined his father in Reliance Industries in 1981, at the age of 24. • He has a great vision and ever since he joined his company, he took it to new heights. • He set up India’s first private oil refinery at Jamnagar Gujarat. • This refinery can produce 33 million tonnes of oil per year. • He made it possible for India to compete at the global level. • He also owns the domestic cricket club of IPL known as the Mumbai Indians• In 2012, he was ranked the richest man in India and the second richest in Asia. • He is the 19th richest man in the world. • He has a net worth of 21 billion dollars. • He lives in Mumbai. • His house has 27 storeys and is worth 1 billion dollars. • He lives there with his wife, Nita Ambani, three children and a staff of 600 people. • He believes that businesses should constantly innovate otherwise they will stagnate and wither away. • He believes that the main purpose of businesses is to create jobs and wealth. • And, he has successfully done so by his various industries. • His achievements have made him known not only in India but across the globe. • In 2013, he was conferred ‘Entrepreneur of the Decade’ by All India Management Association. • So, I think Mukesh Ambani is a very successful businessman of India mainly because of the way he managed his assets in the petroleum industry.
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here I would like to talk about Mukesh
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Ambani
. • He is in his late fifties and looks
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very
handsome. • He has a degree in Chemical
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Engineering•
He
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joined
his father in Reliance Industries in 1981, at the age of 24. • He has a great vision and ever since he
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joined
his
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company
, he took it to new heights. • He set up India’s
first
private oil refinery at Jamnagar Gujarat. • This refinery can produce 33 million tonnes of oil per year. • He made it possible for India to compete at the global level. • He
also
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Indians•
In 2012, he
was ranked
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man
in India and the second richest in Asia. • He is the 19th richest
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man
in the world. • He has a net worth of 21 billion dollars. • He
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lives
in Mumbai. • His
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and is worth 1 billion dollars. • He
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lives
there with his wife, Nita
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Ambani
, three children and a staff of 600
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people
. • He believes that businesses should
constantly
innovate
otherwise
they will stagnate and wither away. • He believes that the main purpose of businesses is to create jobs and wealth. • And, he has
successfully
done
so
by his various industries. • His achievements have made him known not
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only
in India
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across the globe. • In 2013, he
was conferred
‘Entrepreneur of the Decade’ by All India Management Association. •
So
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think
Mukesh
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Ambani
is a
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very
successful businessman of India
mainly
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of the way he managed his assets in the petroleum industry.
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IELTS speaking IELTS Speaking A successful businessman ✤ Who is he ✤ How do you know him ✤ Why do you admire him?

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