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Describe something you can make by yourself. v.1

Describe something you can make by yourself. v. 1
Describe something you can make by yourself. You should say: what it is how you make it whether you like to make it and explain how you feel about making it yourself. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I am not exactly known to be a very “resourceful” person even on my best days. Besides, it is not like I have practised any art or craft a lot. However, when I was growing up as a child, I had a habit of playing with lumbers (wooden pieces), and that’s when I learned to make some wooden frames and toys. Surprisingly, I even made a few nice toys back then, and I would just like to share that story here. Now, please don’t think that I made a lot of toys as a child or when I was growing up, but it was just a little secret hobby of mine, which I used to enjoy from time to time in my solitude. Anyway, one doesn’t really have to have the intellect or smartness of a rocket scientist to make some toys because all one would need is some solid wood pieces, a good knife, some perfect size nails and some screws. We could also use a “mini saw” and a screwdriver, if needed, but I would suggest you to be a bit more careful when using a “saw”. Of course, we also need to know how much wood and what kind of hardware are needed to do a certain type of toy. Once we know, what kind of toys we want to make, we start crafting the perfect size templates by either cutting the wood pieces or connecting them with each other by using the nails and screws. Now, as for trimming the wood pieces, you could do it either before completing your toys or after it. But, as for me, I trim all the wood pieces before using them to make my toys.   This toy-making thing can take a while, but I like it. Anyway, I feel really great about making it myself. In fact, it is very fulfilling and confidence-boosting to see the results of your own works. Besides, I also like the fact that I can actually relax and forget about my worries when doing these little things all by myself by becoming a bit creative.
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something you can
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make
by yourself. You should say: what it is how you
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make
it whether you like to
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make
it and
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explain
how you feel about making it yourself. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer: I am not exactly known to be a
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very
“resourceful” person even on my best days.
Besides
, it is not like I have
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practised
any art or craft a lot.
However
, when I was growing up as a child, I had a habit of playing with lumbers (wooden
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pieces)
, and that’s when I learned to
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make
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some
wooden frames and
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toys
.
Surprisingly
, I even made a few nice
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toys
back then, and I would
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just
like to share that story here.

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Now
,
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please
don’t
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think
that I made
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a lot of
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toys
as a child or when I was growing up,
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but
it was
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just
a
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little
secret hobby of mine, which I
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used
to enjoy from time to time in my solitude.
Anyway
, one doesn’t
really
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have to
have the intellect or smartness of a rocket scientist to
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make
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some
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toys
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because
all one would need is
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some
solid
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wood
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pieces
, a
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good
knife,
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some
perfect size nails and
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some
screws. We could
also
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use
a “mini
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saw
” and a screwdriver, if needed,
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but
I would suggest you to be a bit more careful when using a “
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saw
”.

Of course
, we
also
need to know how much
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wood
and what kind of hardware
are needed
to do a certain type of
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toy
. Once we know
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, what
kind of
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toys
we want to
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make
, we
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start
crafting the perfect size templates by either cutting the
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wood
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pieces
or connecting them with each other by using the nails and screws.
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Now
, as for trimming the
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wood
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pieces
, you could do it either
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before
completing your
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toys
or after it.
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But
, as for me, I trim all the
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wood
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pieces
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before
using them to
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make
my
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toys
.
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This toy-making thing can take a while,
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but
I like it.

Anyway
, I feel
really
great about making it myself. In fact, it is
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very
fulfilling and confidence-boosting to
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see
the results of your
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own
works.
Besides
, I
also
like the fact that I can
actually
relax and forget about my worries when doing these
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little
things all by myself by becoming a bit creative.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe something you can make by yourself. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
424 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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