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Describe something you have made yourself (from wood, metal, paper or other material). v.1

Describe something you have made yourself (from wood, metal, paper or other material). v. 1
Describe something you have made yourself (from wood, metal, paper or other material). You should say: what you made why you made it how you have made it and explain how you felt about it.   Model Answer 1: I have a habit of visiting handicraft stores from time to time because I really like the cool and beautiful looking stuff there for decorating our homes. So, the other day, when I was visiting one such handicraft store, I saw a very beautiful looking wooden flower base, and I wanted to buy it for my room except, of course, it was a bit too expensive for me. Suddenly, an idea hit me, and needless to say, I liked it. I wanted to make my own flower base out of wood just like the one I saw at the store, but I just didn’t know what kind of wood or material was used to make it. But, I am assuming that it was made out of some expensive wood because it looked extraordinarily beautiful and polished. So, I decided to choose my own material – I chose bamboo. But, it wasn’t exactly easy to find the best quality bamboo in where I lived, so I travelled to a bamboo garden at a distant area in order to find a perfectly round shape bamboo which was green in colour, and it was really hard. After bringing that bamboo, I cut it into some evenly-sized thin slices. If I remember it correctly, I believe that I made about 10 slices which were about 1 foot high each. After that, I connected their edges with each other with some strong glue to give them a round shape with about a 6-inch hollow space at the centre around them. In no time, I saw that my flower vase was getting shape. So, I decided to close one pole of my newly-made flower vase after painting it with my favourite golden colour in order to hide some unwanted spots on it. Anyway, after making the flower vase, I felt surprisingly proud of my achievement because I did it with my own hands and by using my own technology. But, the best thing about it was that it didn’t actually take me much time nor did I have to spend a fortune to make my beautiful looking flower base.   Sample Answer 2: I usually made toys in my childhood and sometimes I made some electronic devices in my teenage and those were very exciting for me. I felt overwhelmed whenever I had been able to make something that I aimed for. I would like to talk about the wooden boat I created in my childhood when I was 8 or 9 years old. I saw a very nice looking boat in a toy store and had been fascinated to have it. But the price was too high for me and I did not ask my parents to buy it for me as I knew that it was very expensive. A few days later after my 5th-grade final exam, I went to visit my grandfather’s house and planned to make a boat similar to the boat I saw in the store. The original boat that I saw was made of metal and plastic but I planned to make one using the board, wood. The plan came to my mind as the woods and boards were available in my grandfather’s house. I started making the boat from my memory and found that I was making the wrong one and I won’t be able to make the boat that I planned. I made a sketch and then started building the parts. This time I was successful and I had been able to make a nice looking boat. Later I coloured it and wrote my name on it. This was a fascinating experience as it was the first time I made something from wood and board. Before that, I mostly made toys from papers and after I made the boat, I showed it to everyone. I was very excited to have it and I was proud that I had been able to make it. I had this toy with me for one year or so this was a toy that inspired me to make some other toys that I made later on.
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Describe
something you have made yourself (from
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wood
, metal, paper or
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other
material). You should say: what you made why you made it how you have made it and
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explain
how you felt about it.
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Model Answer 1:

I have a habit of visiting handicraft
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stores
from
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time
to
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time
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because
I
really
like the cool and
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beautiful
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looking
stuff there for decorating our homes.
So
, the
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other
day, when I was visiting one such handicraft
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store
, I
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saw
a
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very
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beautiful
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looking
wooden
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flower
base, and I wanted to
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buy
it for my room except,
of course
, it was a bit too expensive for me.
Suddenly
, an
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idea
hit me, and
needless to say
, I liked it.

I wanted to
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make
my
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own
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flower
base out of
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wood
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just
like the one I
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saw
at the
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store
,
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but
I
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just
didn’t know what kind of
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wood
or material was
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used
to
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make
it.
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But
, I am assuming that it
was made
out of
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some
expensive
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wood
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because
it looked
extraordinarily
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beautiful
and polished.

So
, I decided to choose my
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own
material
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–
I chose bamboo.
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But
, it wasn’t exactly easy to find the best quality bamboo in where I
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lived
,
so
I travelled to a bamboo garden at a distant area in order to find a
perfectly
round shape bamboo which was
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green in colour
, and it was
really
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hard
. After bringing that bamboo, I
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cut
it into
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some
evenly
-sized thin slices. If I remember it
correctly
, I believe that I made about 10 slices which were about 1 foot high each. After that, I connected their edges with each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
with
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some
strong glue to give them a round shape with about a 6-inch hollow space at
Consider using "the surrounding centre".
the centre around them
. In no
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time
, I
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saw
that my
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flower
vase was getting shape.
So
, I decided to close one pole of my
newly
-made
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flower
vase after painting it with my
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favourite
golden
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colour
in order to
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hide
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some
unwanted spots on it.

Anyway
, after making the
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flower
vase, I felt
surprisingly
proud of my achievement
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because
I did it with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
hands and by using my
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own
technology.
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But
, the best thing about it was that it didn’t
actually
take me much
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time
nor did I
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have to
spend a fortune to
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make
my
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beautiful
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looking
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flower
base.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
usually
made
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toys
in my childhood and
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sometimes
I made
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some
electronic devices in my teenage and those were
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very
exciting for me. I felt overwhelmed whenever I had been
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able
to
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make
something that I aimed for.
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I
would like to talk about the wooden
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boat
I created in my childhood when I was 8 or 9 years
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old
.
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I
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saw
a
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very
nice
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looking
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boat
in a
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toy
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store
and had
been fascinated
to have it.
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But
the price was too high for me and I did not ask my parents to
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buy
it for me as I knew that it was
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very
expensive. A few days later after my 5th-grade final exam, I went to visit my grandfather’s
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house
and planned to
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make
a
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boat
similar to the
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boat
I
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saw
in the
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store
. The original
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boat
that I
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saw
was made
of metal and plastic
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but
I planned to
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make
one using the board,
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wood
. The plan came to my mind as the woods and boards were available in my grandfather’s
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house
. I
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started
making the
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boat
from my memory and found that I was making the
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wrong
one and I won’t be
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able
to
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make
the
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boat
that I planned. I made a sketch and then
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started
building the parts. This
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time
I was successful and I had been
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able
to
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make
a nice
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looking
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boat
. Later I
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coloured
it and wrote my name on it. This was a fascinating experience as it was the
first
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time
I made something from
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wood
and board.
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Before
that, I
mostly
made
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toys
from papers and after I made the
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boat
, I
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showed
it to everyone. I was
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very
excited to have
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it and
I was proud that I had been
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able
to
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make
it. I had this
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toy
with me for one year or
so
this was a
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toy
that inspired me to
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make
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some
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other
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toys
that I made later on.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS speaking Describe something you have made yourself (from wood, metal, paper or other material). v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
722 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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