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Describe something important you have learned recently. v.1

Describe something important you have learned recently. v. 1
Describe something important you have learned recently. You should say: what you have learned where you learned it from how important the lesson was and explain what impact this has on your mind. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: We, as human, constantly learn and this knowledge and our life experiences shape who we become or choose to become. Pretty recently, I have learned about something called "minimalism" from a documentary on TV and it was entertaining and thought-provoking. I would like to thank you for the opportunity to let me talk about it. "Minimalism" is not about becoming a hermit in a jungle or giving away everything we have. Rather it's a concept that allows us to focus on more important aspects of life by breaking the chain of gaining and owing more and more. Statistically speaking, we are living in a rich era of affluence and prosperity and yet we are slaves to our desire of material gain and success that seems unattainable due to our changing goals and social pressure. We are living lives defined by capitalism and the corporate world and have little time to focus on what is truly important in our life like our family and friends, neighbours, relationship, peace and happiness. "Minimalism" thus tells us to get rid of things we do not need like three smartphones, 30 pairs of shoes and closet full of designers clothes and focus on what makes us happy. I learned it from a TV documentary that I watched a few weeks ago and it was a top-class production. The way it was presented, the speakers who talked about it and the way it was made are simply outstanding. It was not just another TV shows or movies that we often forget about just after watching it. It was deep and it covered an unpopular topics that people usually tend to avoid thinking about. The impact of the concept that it has had on me is tremendous. I no longer feel bad because I don't own the latest car or don't earn a six-figure salary. I have been thinking about the messages this documentary tried to gave us and it was astounding. I have started focusing on being happier and spending quality time with people I care and people who care about me rather than feeling bad about all the things I don't have. Minimalism teaches about being happier with less because it's alway quality that counts, not the quantity.
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recently. You should say: what you have
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where you
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it from how
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important
the lesson was and
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what impact this has on your mind. [You will
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talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
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notes to
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Model Answer:

We, as human,
constantly
learn and this knowledge and our life experiences shape who we become or choose to become. Pretty recently, I have
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learned
about something called
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minimalism
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from a documentary on TV and it was entertaining and
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thought
-provoking. I would like to thank you for the opportunity to
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let
me talk about it.

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Minimalism
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is not about becoming a hermit in a jungle or giving away everything we have.
Rather
it's a concept that
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allows
us to focus on more
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important
aspects of life by breaking the chain of gaining and owing more and more.
Statistically
speaking, we are living in a rich era of affluence and
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prosperity and
yet
we are slaves to our desire of material gain and success that seems unattainable due to our changing goals and social pressure. We are living
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lives
defined by capitalism and the corporate world and have
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little
time to focus on what is
truly
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important
in our life like our family and friends,
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neighbours
, relationship, peace and happiness.
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Minimalism
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thus
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tells
us to
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get
rid of things we do not need
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like
three smartphones, 30 pairs of shoes and closet full of designers clothes and focus on what
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makes
us happy.

I
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learned
it from a TV documentary that I
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watched
a few weeks ago and it was a top-
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class
production. The way it
was presented
, the speakers who talked about it and the way it
was made
are
simply
outstanding. It was not
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just
another TV
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shows
or movies that we
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often
forget about
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just
after watching it. It was deep and it covered an unpopular
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topics
that
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people
usually
tend to avoid thinking about.

The impact of the concept that it has had on me is tremendous. I no longer feel
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bad
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because
I don't
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own
the latest car or don't earn a six-figure salary. I have been thinking about the messages this documentary tried to
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gave
us and it was astounding.
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I
have
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started
focusing on being happier and spending quality time with
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people
I care and
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people
who care about me
rather
than feeling
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bad
about all the things I don't have. Minimalism teaches about being happier with less
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because
it's
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alway
quality that counts, not the quantity.
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IELTS speaking Describe something important you have learned recently. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
447 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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