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Describe an important email that you have received lately. v.1

Describe an important email that you have received lately. v. 1
Describe an important email that you have received lately. You should say: who sent you the email when you received it whether you were expecting it and explain how important this email was to you. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: The email or electronic mail is a fabulous gift of the technology that has revolutionized the way we contact people. It has such a profound impact on our life that if it no longer exists, our life would be in a chaotic situation. I would like to thank you for this great topic and here I will talk about an important email that I've recently received. The email was from the Malaysian airlines that reached my inbox at the beginning of last July, more specifically on 4th July. A few days before that, I travelled to Kuala Lumpur on an official trip and unfortunately, during my return flight, one of my luggage was lost at the (mention the name of the airport in your country) airport. I waited for more than 3 hours and talked to several airport officials as well as two persons from the aviation authority but my luggage was nowhere. I was so frustrated about the event that I sat at the corner of the airport for half an hour blaming myself for the incident though I knew that I had nothing to do about it. The lost luggage, tragically, had some important documents and my laptop in it, including some gift items I have purchased for my family and a couple of colleagues. After several attempts throughout the whole week from my side after the incident, I lost all hope and stopped contacting with the airport authority. But on 4th July, almost two weeks later, I received an email from the airport authority that my luggage was found and I could go and claim my luggage any weekday during the office hours. It could have been just another email sitting innocently on my inbox, but it was not. It carried a piece of great news and I was utterly relieved to receive the email. It was one of the most important emails I have ever received because it was unexpected, literally came at a moment when I was least expecting it. Next morning I went to the airport and received my luggage which was exactly the way I checked in at the Malaysian airport and had everything I packed inside.
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Describe
an
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important
email that you have
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received
lately. You should say: who
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sent
you the email when you
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received
it whether you were expecting it and
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explain
how
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important
this email was to you. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer:

The email or electronic mail is a fabulous gift of the technology that has revolutionized the way we contact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. It has such a profound impact on our life that if it no longer exists, our life would be in a chaotic situation. I would like to thank you for this great topic and here I will talk about an
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important
email that I've recently received.

The email was from the Malaysian airlines that reached my inbox at the beginning of last July, more
specifically
on 4th July. A few days
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
that, I travelled to Kuala Lumpur on an official trip and unfortunately, during my return flight, one of my
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luggage
was lost
at the (mention the name of the
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airport
in your country)
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airport
. I waited for more than 3 hours and talked to several
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airport
officials as
well
as two persons from the aviation authority
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but
my
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luggage
was nowhere. I was
so
frustrated about the
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event
that I sat at the corner of the
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airport
for half an hour blaming myself for the incident though I knew that I had nothing to do about it.

The lost
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luggage
,
tragically
, had
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some
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important
documents and my laptop in it, including
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some
gift items I have
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purchased
for my family and a couple of colleagues.

After several attempts throughout the whole week from my side after the incident, I lost all hope and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
contacting with the
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airport
authority.
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But
on 4th July, almost two weeks later, I
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received
an email from the
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airport
authority that my
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luggage
was found
and I could go and claim my
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luggage
any weekday during the office hours.

It could have been
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just
another email sitting
innocently
on my inbox,
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but
it was not. It carried a piece of great
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
news and
I was
utterly
relieved to receive the email.
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It
was one of the most
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important
emails I have ever
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received
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because
it
was unexpected
,
literally
came at a moment when I was least expecting it.
Next
morning I went to the
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airport
and
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received
my
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luggage
which was exactly the way I
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checked
in at the Malaysian
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airport
and had everything I packed inside.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an important email that you have received lately. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
440 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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