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Describe a situation that made you feel uncomfortable. v.1

Describe a situation that made you feel uncomfortable. v. 1
Describe a situation that made you feel uncomfortable. You should say: when it was what made you feel uncomfortable what you did then and explain how you felt about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: The experience of an uncomfortable situation is something we all try to forget most of the time, and at times we regret about the whole situation. One such event that I can still recall happened a few years ago when I was travelling to (say a country name which is not yours). I will share my experience with you. I planned a holiday tour to (say the country name again) with two of my classmates, and we thought the holiday and its excitements would refresh us from a long and tiring semester. As planned, we took our flight and reached the destination airport safely. However, the immigration checkpoint queue was unusually long and at least 50 people were ahead of us in the line. We had to wait for more than an hour before I could proceed to the counter. To my dismay, just after I handed over him my passport, the officer in charge asked me to go to the immigration clearance room located on a different floor! After I informed him that I was travelling with two of my friends, he got angry and asked me to leave the counter! That was pretty harsh and unexpected from someone taking care of such a delicate matter like immigration clearance. I had to yield to his whimsical decision and talk to another immigration officer who for more than 20 minutes asked me different questions and literally tried to grill me in an embarrassing situation. Some of these questions were pretty reasonable and valid but a few of them were disgusting and completely out of the context. I felt as if I was being punished for something I never did, and at a point, I felt like saying to the immigration personnel that "thank you for your service but I no longer wish to travel to your country". I was that mad and frustrated. But in the end, he cleared all of us and apologized to us sarcastically (I am saying sarcastically because I felt he did not mean it). We, at last, entered the country and despite an initial shock, the whole experience was pretty awesome. We had an excellent and reinvigorating holiday. I just wished the frustrating experience at the immigration checkpoint did not occur.
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Describe
a
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situation
that made you feel uncomfortable. You should say: when it was what made you feel uncomfortable what you did then and
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explain
how you
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felt
about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

The
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experience
of an uncomfortable
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situation
is something we all try to forget most of the time, and at times we regret about the whole
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situation
. One such
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event
that I can
still
recall happened a few years ago when I was travelling to (say a
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country
name which is not yours). I will share my
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experience
with you.

I planned a holiday tour to (say the
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country
name again) with two of my classmates, and we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
the holiday and its excitements would refresh us from a long and tiring semester. As planned, we took our flight and reached the destination airport
safely
.
However
, the
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immigration
checkpoint queue was
unusually
long and at least 50
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people
were ahead of us in the line. We had to wait for more than an hour
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before
I could proceed to the counter. To my dismay,
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just
after I handed over him my passport, the officer in charge asked me to go to the
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immigration
clearance room located on a
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different
floor! After I informed him that I was travelling with two of my friends, he
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got
angry and asked me to
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leave
the counter! That was pretty harsh and unexpected from someone taking care of such a delicate matter like
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immigration
clearance.

I had to yield to his whimsical decision and talk to another
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immigration
officer who for more than 20 minutes asked me
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different
questions and
literally
tried to grill me in an embarrassing
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situation
.
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Some
of these questions were pretty reasonable and valid
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but
a few of them were disgusting and completely out of the context.

I
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felt
as if I was
being punished
for something I never did, and at a point, I
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felt
like saying to the
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immigration
personnel that
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"
thank you for your service
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but
I no longer wish to travel to your country
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"
. I was that mad and frustrated.
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But
in the
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end
, he cleared all of us and apologized to us
sarcastically
(I am saying
sarcastically
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because
I
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felt
he did not mean it).

We, at last, entered the
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country
and despite an initial shock, the whole
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experience
was pretty awesome. We had an excellent and reinvigorating holiday. I
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just
wished the frustrating
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experience
at the
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immigration
checkpoint did not occur.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a situation that made you feel uncomfortable. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
447 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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