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Describe an unpopular opinion you hold or have. v.1

Describe an unpopular opinion you hold or have. v. 1
Describe an unpopular opinion you hold or have. You should say: what it is for how long you have this opinion in your mind whether you have ever shared it to someone and explain why you think this is an unpopular opinion. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: Well, that's an intriguing topic and I am delighted that I have been given a chance to talk about something I feel deeply but can't discuss very often. The obvious and yet very unpopular opinion I want to talk about is how our police and special security forces have been given an autocratic power to get away with their misconducts and oftentimes serious crimes. I am not talking about one or two corrupt cops and their discrete horrendous acts, but about the whole system that helps them get away with it. Police and special forces are meant to protect ordinary people and their property and lives and maintain peace and harmony in our society by acting lawfully. They are also a part of society and they should be made responsible for any crime they commit. But, the legislative system and the existing policies make it really tough to hold them responsible and discriminate when it comes to ensuring justice. Police, in our country and many other countries, go unpunished for their crimes but ordinary citizens are convicted swiftly for the same crime. It's like a single country with dual policy and that's something I believe is totally unfair and unjust. I have been holding this unpopular opinion for more than ten years. The first time a corrupt cop killed an innocent boy in our neighbourhood over a false charge of extortion and got away with it, I started to believe that something is wrong in our system. Despite the media attention and demonstration from ordinary citizens, the same policeman is now working in a different department with the police and seems like have been promoted for his crime! I have shared my opinion with a few of my friends and their opinions are mostly against these discriminatory policies and system. My uncle is a retired policeman and when I discussed it with him, to my surprise, his opinion accords with mine. This is an unpopular opinion because people don't want to talk about it, let alone do something to break the corrupt system. They either believe that they can't do anything about it or feel that police personnel are above the law and should be granted special privileges. Their opinion is often biased because they consider it a political issue rather than a social or human right issue.
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Describe
an unpopular
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opinion
you hold or have. You should say: what it is for how long you have this
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opinion
in your mind whether you have ever shared it to someone and
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explain
why you
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think
this is an unpopular
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opinion
. [You will
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have to
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talk
about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1:

Well
, that's an intriguing
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topic and
I
am delighted
that I have been
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given
a chance to
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talk
about
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something
I feel
deeply
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but
can't discuss
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very
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often
.

The obvious and
yet
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very
unpopular
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opinion
I want to
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talk
about is how our
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police
and special security forces have been
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given
an autocratic power to
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get
away with their misconducts and oftentimes serious
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crimes
. I am not talking about one or two corrupt cops and their discrete horrendous acts,
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but
about the whole
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system
that
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helps
them
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get
away with it.

Police and special forces
are meant
to protect ordinary
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people
and their property and
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lives
and maintain peace and harmony in our society by acting
lawfully
. They are
also
a part of
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society and
they should
be made
responsible for any
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crime
they commit.
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But
, the legislative
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system
and the existing policies
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make
it
really
tough to hold them responsible and discriminate when it
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comes
to ensuring justice.
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Police
, in our country and
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many
other countries, go unpunished for their
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crimes
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but
ordinary citizens
are convicted
swiftly
for the same
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crime
. It's like a single country with dual policy and that's
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something
I believe is
totally
unfair and unjust.

I have been holding this unpopular
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opinion
for more than ten years. The
first
time a corrupt cop killed an innocent boy in our
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neighbourhood
over a false charge of extortion and
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got
away with it, I
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started
to believe that
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something
is
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wrong
in our
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system
. Despite the media attention and demonstration from ordinary citizens, the same policeman is
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now
working in a
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different
department with the
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police
and seems like have
been promoted
for his crime!

I have shared my
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opinion
with a few of my friends and their
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opinions
are
mostly
against these discriminatory policies and
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system
. My uncle is a retired policeman and when I discussed it with him, to my surprise, his
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opinion
accords with mine.

This is an unpopular
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opinion
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because
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people
don't want to
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talk
about it,
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let
alone do
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something
to break the corrupt
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system
. They either believe that they can't do anything about it or feel that
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police
personnel are above the law and should
be granted
special privileges. Their
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opinion
is
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often
biased
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because
they consider it a political issue
rather
than a social or human
right
issue.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an unpopular opinion you hold or have. v. 1

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  American English
7 paragraphs
472 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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