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Describe something you did for the first time and enjoyed. v.1

Describe something you did for the first time and enjoyed. v. 1
Describe something you did for the first time and enjoyed. You should say: what it was when it was what you did and explain why it was something you enjoyed so much. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: Something I have experienced for the first time and was fascinated about? Well, it happened to me so many times and in fact, our life is exciting and unpredictable because it keeps surprising us. Thank you very much for the opportunity to let me talk about one such experience. A few years ago, I was travelling to Spain alone and this was the third time for me to travel out of my country and the first time a solo trip to such a long distance. I am not a frequent air traveller and take-off and landing of the plane give me an uncomfortable feeling that I am yet to get accustomed to. However, during my flight to Spain, I got a window seat and the experience of flying above the cloud and seeing the whole city from almost 10 thousand feet above the ground was captivating and something quite new for me. Since I was alone and the flight was at night, I spent most of my time reading a book on my ebook reader or looked outside through the window. As usual, I was a bit nervous when the plane started its journey and went high in the sky. But I soon forget about my uncomfortable feelings when I looked outside and was thrilled to look at the distant city that I have just left. From above, it looked like a small land filled with many lights, perhaps comparable to fireflies, and the experience of looking at it was something surreal. The same feeling returned when it was almost the time to land on the Madrid Airport and I could see a range of illuminated areas which, to me, seems like some lively pictures that came to reality like the computer animation. Large buildings were nothing more than a few dots and the whole city seemed like a great work of an artist who knew how to place them! I could hear the safety announcement by a cabin crew but I was so busy perceiving and enjoying the view that hardly any word of the announcement reached my ear. I was, as if, turned in to a small baby trying to figure out how a butterfly could fly or a fish can swim. I was so overwhelmed with it that I returned to reality when people were rushing to the exit door which means the plane had safely landed and I did not worry about the uncomfortable feelings of landing even for a second.
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Describe
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something
you did for the
first
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time
and enjoyed. You should say: what it was when it was what you did and
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explain
why it was
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something
you enjoyed
so
much. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

Something I have experienced for the
first
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time
and
was fascinated
about?
Well
, it happened to me
so
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many
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times
and in fact, our life is exciting and unpredictable
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because
it
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keeps
surprising us. Thank you
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very
much for the opportunity to
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let
me talk about one such experience.

A few years ago, I was travelling to Spain alone and this was the third
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time
for me to travel out of my country and the
first
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time
a solo trip to such a long distance. I am not a frequent air
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traveller
and take-off and landing of the
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plane
give me an uncomfortable
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feeling
that I am
yet
to
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get
accustomed to.
However
, during my flight to Spain, I
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got
a window seat and the experience of flying above the cloud and seeing the whole city from almost 10 thousand feet above the ground was captivating and
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something
quite new for me.

Since I was alone and the flight was at night, I spent most of my
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time
reading a book on my
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ebook
reader or looked outside through the window. As usual, I was a bit nervous when the
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plane
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started
its journey and went high in the sky.
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But
I
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soon
forget about my uncomfortable
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feelings
when I looked outside and
was thrilled
to look at the distant city that I have
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just
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left
.

From above, it looked like a
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small
land filled with
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many
lights, perhaps comparable to fireflies, and the experience of looking at it was
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something
surreal. The same
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feeling
returned when it was almost the
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time
to land on the Madrid Airport and I could
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see
a range of illuminated areas which, to me, seems like
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some
lively pictures that came to reality like the computer animation. Large buildings were nothing more than a few dots and the whole city seemed like a great work of an artist who knew how to place them!

I could hear the safety announcement by a cabin crew
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but
I was
so
busy perceiving and enjoying the view that hardly any word of the announcement reached my ear. I was, as if, turned in to a
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small
baby trying to figure out how a butterfly could
fly
or a fish can swim.
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I
was
so
overwhelmed with it that I returned to reality when
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people
were rushing to the exit door which means the
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plane
had
safely
landed and I did not worry about the uncomfortable
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feelings
of landing even for a second.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe something you did for the first time and enjoyed. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
488 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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