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Describe an important piece of news that you received via text message. v.1

Describe an important piece of news that you received via text message. v. 1
Describe an important piece of news that you received via text message. You should say: who shared the message with you what the news was about how was it written and explain why the news was important to you. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I have never really been much of a fan of reading any text message on my mobile phone, mainly because more than 99% of the text messages seem to be delivered, on my mobile, at least, for advertising purpose. But, today, I would like to talk about an important text message, which I received about a couple of years ago when I was away from my home. As I have just mentioned above, when I received the message, I was away from my home, enjoying my vacation in a different city. So, I wasn’t expecting any message from my work, at least. In fact, I wasn’t expecting any kinds of messages from anybody whether they were important or not. But, when I got the message from my boss – I mean my Managing Director – I wasn’t exactly very thrilled about it, to say in the least. But, after all, that was a message from my boss, and I just couldn’t ignore it, no matter how much I disliked it. So, I decided to read the message. But, after reading it, I couldn’t really make much of the message since all it said was “a surprise is waiting for you”. So, I decided to call my boss and sought some clarification about the text message. In response, my boss sounded very happy on the other end and told me that I was getting transferred to another department after getting a promotion. Initially, after hearing the news, I thought that my boss was joking with me since he had a habit of cracking jokes at his subordinates from time to time, but that time, he made it clear that he wasn’t making any joke. Anyway, the message was really important for me because the promotion was long overdue. In fact, I was even thinking about quitting from the company if I didn’t get the promotion after working at the same company really hard for more than 6 years. Besides, the message was important to me also because it showed that my boss indeed cared for my career future by transferring me to a department where I had always wanted to be.
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Describe
an
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important
piece of
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news
that you received via
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text
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message
. You should say: who shared the
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message
with you what the
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news
was about how was it written and
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explain
why the
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news
was
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important
to you. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer:

I have never
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really
been much of a fan of reading any
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text
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message
on my mobile phone,
mainly
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because
more than 99% of the
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text
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messages
seem to
be delivered
, on my mobile, at least, for advertising purpose.
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But
,
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today
, I would like to talk about an
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important
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text
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message
, which I received about a couple of years ago when I was away from my home.

As I have
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just
mentioned above, when I received the
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message
, I was away from my home, enjoying my vacation in a
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different
city.
So
, I wasn’t expecting any
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message
from my work, at least. In fact, I wasn’t expecting any kinds of
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messages
from anybody whether they were
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important
or not.
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But
, when I
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got
the
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message
from my boss
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–
I mean
my Managing Director
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–
I wasn’t exactly
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very
thrilled about it, to say in the least.
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But
,
after all
, that was a
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message
from my boss, and I
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just
couldn’t
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ignore
it, no matter how much I disliked it.

So
, I decided to read the
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message
.
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But
, after reading it, I couldn’t
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really
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make
much of the
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message
since all it said was “a surprise is waiting for you”.
So
, I decided to call my boss and sought
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some
clarification about the
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text
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message
. In response, my boss sounded
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very
happy on the other
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end
and
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told
me that I was getting transferred to another department after getting a promotion.

Initially
, after hearing the
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news
, I
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thought
that my boss was joking with me since he had a habit of cracking jokes at his subordinates from time to time,
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but
that time, he made it
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clear
that he wasn’t making any joke.

Anyway
, the
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message
was
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really
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important
for me
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because
the promotion was long overdue. In fact, I was even thinking about quitting from the
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company
if I didn’t
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get
the promotion after working at the same
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company
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really
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hard
for more than 6 years.
Besides
, the
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message
was
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important
to me
also
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because
it
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showed
that my boss
indeed
cared for my career future by transferring me to a department where I had always wanted to be.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an important piece of news that you received via text message. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
440 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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