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Describe a time when you received some positive feedback. v.1

Describe a time when you received some positive feedback. v. 1
Describe a time when you received some positive feedback. You should say: when it was what the feedback was related to who gave you the feedback and explain how you felt about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I have been lucky to receive many positive feedbacks on many occasions, although I must admit, I don’t think all of them were well-deserved. In fact, I feel like many of those positive feedbacks were thrown at me just to be nice to me. But, I can remember at least one feedback, which I received about 7 years ago as a university student, as a genuine one. To tell the story, when I was a university student, I used to do some home tutoring for high school students, teaching mostly the subjects of general science which included physics, chemistry, biology and mathematics. By the way, I liked to do this home tutoring thing because it allowed me to remain in the mood of studying since I was also studying science as a university student. Besides, it also helped me a little with my pocket money. Anyway, while all of my students, taking home lessons from me, were reasonably smart and talented, at least one of them was a bit weak in understanding the science subjects, especially, the mathematics. So I decided to inform his parents about his weakness while also asking the student to spend extra time with me every week to get proper math lessons. Needless to say, his parents agreed, and I started my mission to help him understand math as best I could. If I remember correctly, I gave him home tutoring for only about 3 months, but his improvement and performance was stunning which showed on his next final examination. In fact, in his next math test, he got 80% mark while his average score was only around 45 in the previous years. After seeing such a huge improvement in the result of their son, the parents of that student gave me very nice feedback. Anyway, after receiving that huge note of appreciation, I felt really good and proud of my achievement. In fact, I took it as a challenge. Besides, in this way, I also achieved a higher level of confidence in my own studies and professional goal. All in all, it was a great experience.
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Describe
a time when you received
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some
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positive
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feedback
. You should say: when it was what the
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feedback
was related
to who gave you the
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feedback
and
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explain
how you felt about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

I have been lucky to receive
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many
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positive
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feedbacks
on
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many
occasions, although I
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must
admit, I don’t
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think
all of them were
well
-deserved. In fact, I feel like
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many
of those
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positive
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feedbacks
were thrown
at me
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just
to be nice to me.
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But
, I can remember at least one
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feedback
, which I received about 7 years ago as a university
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student
, as a genuine one.

To
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tell
the story, when I was a university
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student
, I
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used
to do
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some
home tutoring for high school
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students
, teaching
mostly
the subjects of general science which included physics, chemistry, biology and mathematics. By the way, I liked to do this home tutoring thing
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because
it
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allowed
me to remain in the mood of studying since I was
also
studying science as a university
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student
.
Besides
, it
also
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helped
me a
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little
with my pocket money.

Anyway
, while all of my
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students
, taking home lessons from me, were
reasonably
smart and talented, at least one of them was a bit weak in understanding the science subjects,
especially
, the mathematics.
So
I decided to inform his parents about his weakness while
also
asking the
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student
to spend extra time with me every week to
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get
proper math lessons.
Needless to say
, his parents
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agreed
, and I
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started
my mission to
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help
him understand math as best I could.

If I remember
correctly
, I gave him home tutoring for
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only
about 3 months,
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but
his improvement and performance was stunning which
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showed
on his
next
final examination. In fact, in his
next
math
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test
, he
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got
80% mark while his average score was
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only
around 45 in the previous years. After seeing such a huge improvement in the result of their son, the parents of that
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student
gave me
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very
nice feedback.

Anyway
, after receiving that huge note of appreciation, I felt
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and proud of my achievement. In fact, I took it as a challenge.
Besides
, in this way, I
also
achieved a higher level of confidence in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
studies and professional goal. All in all, it was a great experience.
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IELTS speaking Describe a time when you received some positive feedback. v. 1

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  American English
6 paragraphs
425 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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