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Describe an important letter that you have ever received. v.1

Describe an important letter that you have ever received. v. 1
Describe an important letter that you have ever received. You should say: who wrote it to you what the letter was about how you felt about the letter and explain why the letter was important to you. Follow-up Questions: What are the differences between emails and handwritten letters? Will the hand-written letters become obsolete in the future? Why? Why should we write letters to friends and relatives? What are the important qualities of a good letter?   Model Answer 1: My eldest uncle (from my father’s side) didn’t really have a habit to poke his nose in anybody’s matter unless there was a very valid reason to do so. So, when I received a letter from him about a few years ago after my graduation from university, I knew that it had to be “important”. Anyway, after my graduation, I was struggling to make a concrete decision on whether to start working on getting a PhD degree (my dream for a long time) or starting a job at a good company. I discussed this issue with my parents, but, as usual, they told me that they would discuss the subject with my eldest uncle (since he was considered to be the wisest of all in our family) and after that only, they could offer me any advice. So, the waiting period started, but luckily I didn’t exactly have to wait very long as I received the decision in a letter soon after talking to my parents. It was a long letter and contained many important pieces of advice on how to approach life after graduation, but he didn’t forget to suggest me to get a good job because that would allow me to understand where I stood as far as my qualifications, skills and credentials were concerned. He also told me in the letter that I could do my PhD degree at a later time of my convenience. The letter was really important to me because I felt absolutely relieved of my confusion and indecision about my future as an adult. Besides, the letter made me feel that no matter how smart and intelligent we really are, it is always better to seek advice from the elderly of our families because they would never let us down even though our own experience and wisdom might betray us sometimes. Finally, the letter was also important to me because it allowed me to learn to fit into the real “working world” around me in a meaningful way.
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Describe
an
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important
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letter
that you have ever received. You should say: who wrote it to you what the
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letter
was about how you felt about the
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letter
and
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explain
why the
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letter
was
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important
to you. Follow-up Questions: What are the differences between emails and handwritten
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letters
? Will the hand-written
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letters
become obsolete in the future? Why? Why should we write
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letters
to friends and relatives? What are the
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important
qualities of a
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good
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letter
?
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Model Answer 1:

My eldest uncle (from my father’s side) didn’t
really
have a habit to poke his nose in anybody’s matter unless there was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
valid reason to do
so
.
So
, when I received a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
letter
from him about a few years ago after my graduation from university, I knew that it had to be “
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
”.

Anyway
, after my graduation, I was struggling to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a concrete decision on whether to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
working on getting a PhD degree (my dream for a long time) or starting a job at a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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company
. I discussed this issue with my parents,
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but
, as usual, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me that they would discuss the subject with my eldest uncle (since he
was considered
to be the wisest of all in our family) and after that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
, they could offer me any advice.
So
, the waiting period
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started
,
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but
luckily I didn’t exactly
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have to
wait
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very
long as I received the decision in a
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letter
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soon
after talking to my parents.

It was a long
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letter
and contained
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many
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important
pieces of advice on how to approach life after graduation,
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but
he didn’t forget to suggest me to
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get
a
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good
job
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because
that would
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allow
me to understand where I stood as far as my qualifications,
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skills
and credentials
were concerned
. He
also
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told
me in the
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letter
that I could do my PhD degree at a later time of my convenience.

The
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letter
was
really
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important
to me
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because
I felt
absolutely
relieved of my confusion and indecision about my future as an adult.
Besides
, the
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letter
made me feel that no matter how smart and intelligent we
really
are, it is always better to seek advice from the elderly of our families
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because
they would never
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let
us down
even though
our
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own
experience and wisdom might betray us
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sometimes
.
Finally
, the
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letter
was
also
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important
to me
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because
it
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allowed
me to learn to fit into the real “working world” around me
Consider replacing "in a meaningful way" with the adverb for "meaningful"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a meaningful way
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an important letter that you have ever received. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
415 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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