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Describe a person who accidentally became your friend. v.1

Describe a person who accidentally became your friend. v. 1
Describe a person who accidentally became your friend. You should say: who the person is how you met him/her what made you two become friends and explain how is your friendship now. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Follow-up Questions: Which one is better - being introvert or extrovert? What type of person are you? What important aspects do you consider to make new friends?   Model Answer 1: We meet new people every day. We tend to remember some of them while we tend to forget the others. And then, there are those who become our friends against all kinds of odds. But, that’s exactly what happened when Elliot and I accidentally became friends a few years ago or so. I met him at an intercollegiate football match competition where he was cheering for his college team, and I was cheering for mine, sitting next to each other. Being fans of two rival teams, facing off each other in the field, we didn’t exactly need to talk to each other unless, of course, we were arguing for something, and an argument it really was after a goal was scored against Elliot’s team with him arguing how a “foul” was made against his side before the goal was scored. Anyway, at the start of our argument, I was trying to “defend” my team with some “lame excuses”, but having seen him how much he really cared about his “losing” side, I decided to agree with him to his delight. And, the immediate result of such “reconciliation” was the start of an enduring “friendship” with a great gesture of sharing “peanuts” with each other until the match was over. Elliot didn’t forget to tell me where he lived, or what he studied either before leaving our college stadium (which he really liked because of its big size). After that little “encounter” at our football stadium, our friendship between me and Elliot is still great and alive, having him visit me and my family once in a while as we don’t really live very far from each other. But instead of hitting the football stadium these days, we actually talk more about our careers, future plans, and, of course, the places we would like to travel in future. In fact, if things are rolled out according to our plans, we will actually get to set up a little cafeteria at a local airport which is conveniently located between my home town and that of Elliot’s. However, the best thing about this friendship perhaps (at least, my little younger brother thinks so) is receiving farm-fresh pineapples in courier from Elliot every year. Next month, I and Elliot are planning to visit the biggest sea resort in my country which I have always dreamt of.
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Describe
a person who
accidentally
became your
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friend
. You should say: who the person is how you met him/her what made you two become
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friends
and
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explain
how is your
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friendship
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now
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Follow-up Questions: Which one is better
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-
being introvert or extrovert? What type of person are you? What
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important
aspects do you consider to
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make
new
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friends
?
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Model Answer 1: We
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meet
new
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people
every day. We tend to remember
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some
of them while we tend to forget the others. And then, there are those who become our
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friends
against all kinds of odds.
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But
, that’s exactly what happened when Elliot and I
accidentally
became
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friends
a few years ago or
so
. I met him at an intercollegiate football match competition where he was cheering for his college
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team
, and I was cheering for mine, sitting
next
to each other.

Being fans of two rival
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teams
, facing off each
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other
in the field, we didn’t exactly need to talk to each
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other
unless,
of course
, we were arguing for something, and an argument it
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really
was after a goal
was scored
against Elliot’s
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team
with him arguing how a “foul”
was made
against his side
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before
the goal
was scored
.

Anyway
, at the
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start
of our argument, I was trying to “defend” my
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team
with
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some
“lame excuses”,
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but
having
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seen
him how much he
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really
cared about his “losing” side, I decided to
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agree
with him to his delight. And, the immediate result of such “reconciliation” was the
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start
of an enduring
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“friendship”
with a great gesture of sharing “peanuts” with each
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other
until the match was over. Elliot didn’t forget to
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tell
me where he
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lived
, or what he studied either
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before
leaving our college stadium (which he
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really
liked
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because
of its
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big
size).

After that
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little
“encounter” at our football stadium, our
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friendship
between me and Elliot is
still
great and alive, having him visit me and my family once in a while as we don’t
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really
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live
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very
far from each
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other
.
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But
instead
of hitting the football stadium these days, we
actually
talk more about our careers, future plans, and,
of course
, the places we would like to travel
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
. In fact, if things
are rolled
out according to our plans, we will
actually
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get
to set up a
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little
cafeteria at a local airport which is
conveniently
located between my home town and that of Elliot’s.
However
, the best thing about this
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friendship
perhaps (at least, my
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little
younger brother
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thinks
so
) is receiving farm-fresh pineapples in courier from Elliot every year.
Next
month, I and Elliot are planning to visit the biggest sea resort in my country which I have always dreamt of.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a person who accidentally became your friend. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
493 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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