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Describe an adventurous thing you did when you were a child. v.1

Describe an adventurous thing you did when you were a child. v. 1
Describe an adventurous thing you did when you were a child. You should say: what you did and how old you were then why you did it how people reacted to it and explain how you feel about this now.   Model Answer 1: As a child, I never really shied away from taking up on any challenge whether climbing up a big tree or jumping into a river from a dangerous height. So, when some of my friends challenged me to cross a lake, which was more than half a kilometre from one end to the other, in just 10 minutes, I immediately decided to do it. Of course, it was not the first time that I crossed the lake. In fact, I had crossed the lake a number of times prior to that occasion but the only difference was that this time I would have to do it within a stipulated period of time of 10 minutes. By the way, since my childhood from the age of 10/11, I just loved swimming whether I was doing on a rainy day or just a hot summer day. In fact, during the hot summer day, I would enjoy swimming more than playing with my friends or eat some of my favourite snacks with them. So, anyway, even though, I knew that it was going to be a huge challenge to cross that lake within 10 minutes, I still started to swim to prove a point or two. Initially, I was swimming at a moderate speed, by trying not to swing my hands and feet too quickly, as I didn’t want to get tired too quickly. Then, after a while, I realized that at that speed I would never be able to reach the other end of the lake. So, I started to speed up gradually while breathing slowly and easily. Finally, I did manage to cross the lake within just 10 minutes! Anyway, after crossing the lake, I felt so happy and excited that I actually forgot about all my tiredness. On the other hand, friends and people around me started to call me “daredevil”, which I actually enjoyed a lot at that time. Finally, after managing to cross the lake all by myself, I learned a very important lesson which was that slow and steady pace wins the race, just like I won on that occasion.   Sample Answer 2: I had a very amazing and magical childhood and I spent most of my childhood days in my hometown which was a beautiful place and offered lots of adventures and pleasures to me. There are many adventurous things I can remember from my childhood and among those, I would like to talk about my first attempt to climb a big tree to find the nest of a bird. I was around 7 years old at that time. With two or three other kids, one day I went to play near a big garden where we often used to play. Suddenly I notice that a few birds were chattering at the top of a tree and we assumed that the bird's nest must have some eggs. We got curious about the bird’s egg and I decided to climb the tree and reach the top to see it myself. The tree was really big and it was dangerous for me to climb on top of it. But I was so excited and mesmerised that I forgot the danger and started climbing the tree. I was not a good climber but I that did not restrain me from fulfilling what I targeted. After some effort, I was able to climb at the top of the tree and then I found that the harder part is still was unfinished. The nest was at the edge of a very thin branch of the tree and I won’t be able to reach there to see the bird’s eggs. Then I started approaching there very slowly and found that my fellow playmates were already worried about it. I forgot everything around me and found the idea of reaching near the nest is the only target I have to fulfil. After I managed to reach near the nest, I found four-five very beautiful small birds with red lips and they were playing with their mother bird. The mother bird started getting worried about my presence and then I decided not to interrupt them. The mother bird somehow reminded me of my mother who takes care of her children the same way! Finally, I started to climb down from the tree. That was a very adventurous thing to do for me in my childhood and I did it out of inquisitiveness that a child usually feels for new thins. I felt a great attraction in finding what there might be and that’s why I did it. Luckily, grown-up people were not there and after a few months when I told my mother about what I did on that day, she became very anxious and rebuked me for that. She told me never to do anything like this ever again. Whenever I think about that particular event of my childhood, I feel great joy. It reminds me of the greener and fairy-tale like childhood I had. I remember this event with great joy and ecstasy.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a childhood memory. Describe a memorable event in your life. Describe something unusual or interesting you did. Describe a brave thing you did. Describe an adventurous tour you have had.
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Describe
an
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adventurous
thing you did when you were a child. You should say: what you did and how
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old
you were then why you did it how
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people
reacted to it and
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explain
how you feel about this
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now
.
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Model Answer 1:

As a child, I never
really
shied away from taking up on any challenge whether climbing up a
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big
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tree
or jumping into a river from a
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dangerous
height.
So
, when
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some
of my friends challenged me to cross a
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lake
, which was more than half a
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kilometre
from one
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end
to the
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other
, in
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just
10 minutes, I immediately decided to do it.

Of course
, it was not the
first
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time
that I crossed the
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lake
. In fact, I had crossed the
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lake
a number of
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times
prior to that occasion
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but
the
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only
difference was that this
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time
I would
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have to
do it within a stipulated period of
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time
of 10 minutes. By the way, since my childhood from the age of 10/11, I
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just
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loved
swimming whether I was doing on a rainy day or
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just
a hot summer day. In fact, during the hot summer day, I would enjoy swimming more than playing with my friends or eat
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some
of my
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favourite
snacks with them.
So
,
anyway
,
even though
, I knew that it was going to be a huge challenge to cross that
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lake
within 10 minutes, I
still
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started
to swim to prove a point or two.

Initially
, I was swimming at a moderate speed, by trying not to swing my hands and feet too
quickly
, as I didn’t want to
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get
tired too
quickly
. Then, after a while, I realized that at that speed I would never be able to
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reach
the
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other
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end
of the
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lake
.
So
, I
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started
to
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speed up
gradually
while breathing
slowly
and
easily
.
Finally
, I did manage to cross the
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lake
within
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just
10 minutes!

Anyway
, after crossing the
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lake
, I felt
so
happy and excited that I
actually
forgot about all my tiredness. On the
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other
hand, friends and
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people
around me
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started
to call me “daredevil”, which I
actually
enjoyed a lot at that
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time
.
Finally
, after managing to cross the
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lake
all by myself, I learned a
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very
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important
lesson which was that slow and steady pace wins the race,
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just
like I won on that occasion.
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Sample Answer 2:

I had a
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very
amazing and magical childhood and I spent most of my childhood days in my hometown which was a
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beautiful
place and offered lots of adventures and pleasures to me. There are
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many
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adventurous
things I can remember from my childhood and among those, I would like to talk about my
first
attempt to
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climb
a
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big
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tree
to find the
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nest
of a bird.

I was around 7 years
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old
at that
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time
. With two or three
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other
kids, one day I went to play near a
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big
garden where we
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often
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used
to play.
Suddenly
I notice that a few
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birds
were chattering at the
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top
of a
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tree and
we assumed that the bird's
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nest
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must
have
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some
eggs. We
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got
curious about the
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bird’s
egg and I decided to
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climb
the
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tree
and
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reach
the
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top
to
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see
it myself. The
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tree
was
really
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big
and it was
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dangerous
for me to
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climb
on
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top
of it.
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But
I was
so
excited and
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mesmerised
that I forgot the
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danger
and
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started
climbing the
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tree
. I was not a
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good
climber
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but
I that did not restrain me from fulfilling what I targeted. After
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some
effort, I was able to
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climb
at the
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top
of the
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tree
and then I
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found
that the harder part is
still
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was
unfinished. The
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nest
was at the edge of a
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very
thin branch of the
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tree
and I won’t be able to
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reach
there to
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see
the
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bird’s
eggs. Then I
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started
approaching there
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very
slowly
and
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found
that my fellow playmates were already worried about it. I forgot everything around me and
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found
the
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idea
of reaching near the
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nest
is the
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only
target I
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have to
fulfil. After I managed to
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reach
near the
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nest
, I
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found
four-five
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very
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beautiful
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small
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birds
with red
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lips and
they were playing with their
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mother
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bird
. The
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mother
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bird
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started
getting worried about my presence and then I decided not to interrupt them. The
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mother
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bird
somehow reminded me of my
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mother
who takes care of her children the same way!
Finally
, I
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started
to
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climb
down from the tree.

That was a
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very
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adventurous
thing to do for me in my childhood and I did it out of inquisitiveness that a child
usually
feels for new thins. I felt a great attraction in finding what there might be and that’s why I did it. Luckily, grown-up
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people
were not there and after a few months when I
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told
my
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mother
about what I did on that day, she became
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very
anxious and rebuked me for that. She
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told
me never to do anything like this ever again. Whenever I
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think
about that particular
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event
of my childhood, I feel great joy. It reminds me of the greener and fairy-tale like childhood I had. I remember this
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event
with great joy and ecstasy.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a childhood memory.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your life.
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Describe
something unusual or interesting you did.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a brave thing you did.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
an
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adventurous
tour you have had.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
81Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an adventurous thing you did when you were a child. v. 1

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  American English
8 paragraphs
942 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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