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Describe a group or a club you have ever joined. v.1

Describe a group or a club you have ever joined. v. 1
Describe a group or a club you have ever joined. You should say:  what the group/club is/was  when you joined the group  where the group met and explain why you enjoyed being part of the group. Model Answer 1: From my childhood, especially from my early high school days, I had a habit of getting involved with different clubs or organizations, such as sports clubs, debate club and social activities clubs. However, while I liked joining any kinds of clubs, that allowed me to remain physically and mentally active, I preferred the “social activity” club a bit more than others. Anyway, I joined the social activity club when I was in high school about 15 years ago. Initially, when I joined the club, there weren’t too many members with us, but as time progressed, more and more students showed their interests in joining our club after watching our activities. By the way, it was me who actually took the initiative to form the club and took permission from my school authority to use an unused room to run the activities of our club, and we used to sit there almost every day to discuss and plan our activities, which included collecting data and information about the elderly citizens of our neighbourhoods, keeping the ponds and lakes as clean as possible and visiting different hospitals and clinics to know if any patients needed any medicine or blood. We also used to collect old clothing items and shoes in advance in order to provide them to the poor and needy during extreme cold. On top of that, we also used to organize picnics in our respective areas and invite people from the less privileged segment of our society so that they could also enjoy some good food every once in a while. Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed being part of this social activity club, primarily because it allowed me to spend some quality time with my friends. Besides, joining the club also allowed me to learn different kinds of things by communicating different kinds of people from all walks of life, professions and backgrounds. Finally, I just loved joining this club because it helped me remain physically and mentally active while giving my much-needed confidence in getting things done in an effective and professional manner. All in all, I am glad that I formed and joined the club. Sample Answer 2: A  few years ago, I joined a group, whose members share a common interest very passionately - reading books. This group has encouraged us to read books by famous authors of different eras. The name of the group was ‘Let's Enlighten’ and it was a non-profit organisation that had a good collection of books from around the world. It also encouraged us to read and share our own books. I joined the group when I lived in my hometown and was a student at the college. I was around 16 years old then. There were more than 100 members in this group and we used to meet at the group’s library complex. There were several rooms and a large library and we used to gather there once in a week in the evening. I enjoyed being a member of this group because of the opportunity to meet people who loved to read books and liked to share their experience regarding different books and authors. Because of my membership, I had been able to take books home from their library. I also met many people there who later became my friends. The members used to share their interest in books and recommend many books worth reading. Sometimes the senior members explained the writing style of famous writers and the central themes of their books which encouraged me to read many famous books. I still feel that I was lucky to be a part of this group.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a social group or club you know about. Describe a club you have visited. Describe something you like to do. Describe a place where you often go to. Describe a club where you were a member once.
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Describe
a
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group
or a
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club
you have ever
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joined
. You should say:
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what the group/club is/was
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when you
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joined
the
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group
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where the
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group
met and
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explain
why you enjoyed being part of the group.

Model Answer 1:

From my childhood,
especially
from my early high school days, I had a habit of getting involved with
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different
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clubs
or organizations, such as sports
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clubs
, debate
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club
and
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social
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activities
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clubs
.
However
, while I liked
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joining
any kinds of
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clubs
, that
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allowed
me to remain
physically
and mentally active, I preferred the
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“social
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activity”
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club
a bit more than others.

Anyway
, I
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joined
the
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social
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activity
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club
when I was in high school about 15 years ago.
Initially
, when I
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joined
the
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club
, there weren’t
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too
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many
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members
with us,
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but
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as time progressed
, more and more students
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showed
their interests in
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joining
our
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club
after watching our
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activities
. By the way, it was me who
actually
took the initiative to form the
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club
and took permission from my school authority to
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use
an unused room to run the
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activities
of our
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club
, and we
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used
to sit there almost every day to discuss and plan our
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activities
, which included collecting data and information about the elderly citizens of our
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neighbourhoods
, keeping the ponds and lakes as clean as possible and visiting
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different
hospitals and clinics to know if any patients needed any medicine or blood.

We
also
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used
to collect
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old
clothing items and shoes in advance in order to provide them to the poor and needy during extreme
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cold
.
On top of that
, we
also
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used
to organize picnics in our respective areas and invite
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people
from the less privileged segment of our society
so
that they could
also
enjoy
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some
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good
food every once in a while.

Anyway
, I
thoroughly
enjoyed being part of this
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social
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activity
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club
,
primarily
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because
it
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allowed
me to spend
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some
quality time with my friends.
Besides
,
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joining
the
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club
also
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allowed
me to learn
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different
kinds of things by communicating
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different
kinds of
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people
from all walks of life, professions and backgrounds.
Finally
, I
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just
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loved
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joining
this
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club
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because
it
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helped
me remain
physically
and mentally active while giving my much-needed confidence in getting things done in an effective and professional manner. All in all, I am glad that I formed and
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joined
the club.

Sample Answer 2:

A
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few years ago, I
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joined
a
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group
, whose
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members
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share
a common interest
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very
passionately
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-
reading
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books
. This
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group
has encouraged us to
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read
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books
by
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famous
authors of
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different
eras. The name of the
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group
was ‘
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Let
's Enlighten’ and it was a non-profit
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organisation
that had a
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good
collection of
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books
from around the world. It
also
encouraged us to
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read
and
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share
our
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own
books.

I
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joined
the
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group
when I
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lived
in my hometown and was a student at the college. I was around 16 years
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old
then. There were more than 100
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members
in this
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group and
we
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used
to
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meet
at the
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group’s
library complex. There were several rooms and a large
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library and
we
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used
to gather there once in a week in the evening.

I enjoyed being a
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member
of this
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group
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because
of the opportunity to
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meet
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people
who
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loved
to
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read
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books
and liked to
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share
their experience regarding
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different
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books
and authors.
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Because
of my membership, I had been able to take
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books
home from their library. I
also
met
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many
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people
there who later became my friends. The
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members
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used
to
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share
their interest in
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books
and recommend
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many
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books
worth reading.
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Sometimes
the senior
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members
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explained
the writing style of
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famous
writers and the central themes of their
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books
which encouraged me to
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read
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many
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famous
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books
. I
still
feel that I was lucky to be a part of this
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group
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a
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social
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group
or
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club
you know
about.
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Describe
a
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club
you have visited.
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Describe
something you like to do.
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Describe
a place where you
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often
go to.
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Describe
a
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club
where you were a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
member
once.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
94Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a group or a club you have ever joined. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
10 paragraphs
707 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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