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Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interesting. v.2

Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interesting. v. 2
Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interesting. Please say: what the documentary was about why you decided to watch it what you learnt during the documentary and explain why the TV documentary was particularly interesting. Sample Answer 1: A plate of yummy food can remove the tiredness of the day. In fact, we eat, we live and this is true for all living being. But recently I had seen a documentary about food and their processing that shocked me heavily and it was one of the most interesting TV documentaries I have ever seen. People take food for several reasons, and the most prominent of them is their craving for the food or they want a comfort for their hunger. But my idea of taking food for comfort has been changed after watching the Food Inc. , a documentary on the food habits, food processing and how the large corporations cheating on innocent people. Actually, the documentary unfolded some blind parts of the food industry across the world. Food habits and tastes have been changed with the course of time and to meet the growing needs, the food producing corporations are following numerous irrational ways and having their profits. Generally, before watching any movie or documentary, I like to do some homework on them such as I analyse rating, read reviews etc. to know if they are worth watching. Accordingly, I found that Food, Inc. , a documentary by Robert Kenner, has been nominated for some prestigious awards in the USA. Moreover, the teaser of the documentary also attracted me. So, I started watching this documentary and came to know about a large number of confidential issues regarding food business. In fact, staying healthy is not enough today, we should be also careful about our food selection. The food items that we take from the superstores and chain shops are entirely unhealthy for us. At the same time, the food producers are damaging the environment. Such issues were highly confidential until Mr Kenner unveiled them on screen through his documentary. Watching the documentary film was a nice experience for me. Food, Inc. taught me a wide number of things and I try to follow them in my own lifestyle. Basically, the documentary is an analysis of the existing food markets - how these food items are grown, how the corporations are abusing the environment, food, animals and people engaged in the food processing, how they are cheating the consumers and more other intriguing issues. The advertisements of different food products show that the foods items are handpicked directly from the farms. But in reality, they are not, the foods are ‘manufactured’ in factories. Has anyone ever thought how the seasonal vegetables are available all around the year or how they are found in plenty during off-season? No, we do not think about such issues. We are not allowed to! The food industry owners do not want us to know these secrets lest they fail in the business. Moreover, the filmmaker had to remain careful about legal issues against him, the production company and channel that would broadcast it while making this documentary. Food, Inc. has taught me some good and valuable lessons. I think it is good to be healthy but at the same time, we should be careful about foods we eat. There are three segments of the documentary and each of the parts revealed some highly sought information for the audiences that the food producers never wanted to expose in public. The entire productions process, especially in the case of meat, it is inhumane and disastrous to the environment. Besides, the large-scale productions of grains, green vegetables and fruits are also not sustainable. The majority of the vegetables and fruits are preserved with toxic chemicals harmful to human health. The advertisements create an appealing impression of the food and grains are gathered from a large ranch filled with green plants. But the inner scenario is completely different and there are no links at all to the large farms or greeneries. I loved the documentary for its bold expression of unethical activities from the food industry owners.
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Describe
a TV
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documentary
you
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watched
that was
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particularly interesting
.
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Please
say: what the
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documentary
was about why you decided to
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watch
it what you
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learnt
during the
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documentary
and
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explain
why the TV
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documentary
was
The extreme adjective for interesting is "fascinating", or "exciting".
particularly interesting
. Sample Answer 1:

A plate of yummy
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food
can remove the tiredness of the day. In fact, we eat, we
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live
and this is true for all living being.
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But
recently I had
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seen
a
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documentary
about
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food
and their processing that shocked me
heavily
and it was one of the most interesting TV
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documentaries
I have ever
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seen
.

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People
take
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food
for several reasons, and the most prominent of them is their craving for the
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food or
they want a comfort for their hunger.
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But
my
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idea
of taking
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food
for comfort has been
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changed
after watching the
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Food
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Inc
.
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,
a
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documentary
on the
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food
habits,
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food
processing and how the
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large
corporations cheating on innocent
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people
.
Actually
, the
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documentary
unfolded
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some
blind parts of the
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food
industry across the world.
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Food
habits and tastes have been
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changed
with the course of time and to
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meet
the growing needs, the
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food
producing corporations are following numerous irrational ways and having their profits.

Generally
,
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before
watching any movie or
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documentary
, I like to do
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some
homework on them such as I
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analyse
rating, read reviews etc. to know if they are worth watching.
Accordingly
, I found that
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Food
,
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Inc
.
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,
a
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documentary
by Robert
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Kenner
, has
been nominated
for
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some
prestigious awards in the USA.
Moreover
, the teaser of the
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documentary
also
attracted me.
So
, I
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started
watching this
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documentary
and came to know about a
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large
number of confidential
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issues
regarding
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food
business. In fact, staying healthy is not
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enough
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today
, we should be
also
careful about our
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food
selection. The
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food
items that we take from the superstores and chain shops are
entirely
unhealthy for us. At the same time, the
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food
producers are damaging the environment. Such
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issues
were
highly
confidential until Mr
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Kenner
unveiled them on screen through his
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documentary
. Watching the
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documentary
film was a nice experience for me.

Food,
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Inc
. taught me a wide number of things and I try to follow them in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
lifestyle.
Basically
, the
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documentary
is an analysis of the existing
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food
markets
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-
how these
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food
items
are grown
, how the corporations are abusing the environment,
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food
, animals and
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people
engaged in the
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food
processing, how they are cheating the consumers and more other intriguing
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issues
. The advertisements of
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different
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food
products
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show
that the
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foods
items
are handpicked
directly
from the farms.
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But
in reality, they are not, the
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foods
are ‘manufactured’ in factories. Has anyone ever
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thought
how the seasonal vegetables are available all around the year or how they
are found
in
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plenty
during off-season? No, we do not
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think
about such
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issues
. We are not
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allowed
to! The
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food
industry owners do not want us to know these secrets lest they fail in the business.
Moreover
, the filmmaker had to remain careful about legal
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issues
against him, the production
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company
and channel that would broadcast it while making this documentary.

Food,
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Inc
. has taught me
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some
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good
and valuable lessons. I
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think
it is
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good
to be healthy
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but
at the same time, we should be careful about
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foods
we eat. There are three segments of the
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documentary
and each of the parts revealed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
highly
sought information for the audiences that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
producers never wanted to expose in public. The entire productions process,
especially
in the case of meat, it is inhumane and disastrous to the environment.
Besides
, the large-scale productions of grains, green vegetables and fruits are
also
not sustainable. The majority of the vegetables and fruits
are preserved
with toxic chemicals harmful to human health. The advertisements create an appealing impression of the
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food
and grains
are gathered
from a
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large
ranch filled with green plants.
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But
the inner scenario is completely
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different
and there are no links at all to the
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large
farms or
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greeneries
. I
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loved
the
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documentary
for its bold expression of unethical activities from the
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food
industry owners.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a TV documentary you watched that was particularly interesting. v. 2

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
691 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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