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Describe an interesting advertisement you watched on TV. v.1

Describe an interesting advertisement you watched on TV. v. 1
Describe an interesting advertisement you watched on TV. You should say: what the advertisement was when you watched it what it was advertising and explain why it was so interesting. Model Answer 1: I find most of the advertisements to be either a “waste of time”, or simply “distasteful” because of their rather naked attempts to impose their products on us. But then, I do watch advertisements, especially if it delivers a good message or make us laugh, from time to time because they are unique and creative. Today, I would like to talk about one such “creative” ad that I watched about a few years ago. The advert initially showed a guy, probably in his early 30’s, walking past a building, built with glass. Then the guy suddenly looks at the glass and finds a “baby” (a 2 years old baby that is) version of him. Then, obviously, the guy gets “amused” by looking at the little “baby” in him on the glass and starts making different kinds of dance moves. A few other people, who were passing by at the same time, saw this rather “unusual” incident and came forward to check what was really going on, but they also found the same “baby” versions, both boys and girls, of them, in the glass who were dancing happily, nonstop. The dancing kept on going for about 30 seconds or so and, at the end of the advertisement’s stipulated running time, came the moving image of a certain kind of “bottled water” (Evian water) on the TV screen, apparently in an effort to convince people to drink the bottled water for the purpose of getting “refreshed” after a certain workout and remain “young” for that matter. Anyway, I found the advertising really interesting primarily because it had a great concept, both “catchy” and “creative” at the same time, which used the suspense by allowing what was being advertised to be what comes last, a bottled water product that is, in order to target its audience with a “precise” message. Besides, the advertisement very cleverly showed that each and every person has a “child” in him or her no matter how old he/she becomes. Finally, I found the ad to be fascinating because it used “technology” in a very effective way to create some great “animation” effects.   Model Answer 2: We watch many advertisements on TV every now and then. Some of them are entertaining and creative while others are simply a waste of time and not-so-attractive. One such 'interesting and unique' advertisement of "Cello Pen" caught my attention a few months ago which I still find amusing. The advert was about a pen brand and it was presented in a rather creative manner. I watched this advertisement a few months ago on a TV channel while I was watching a live sports competition. I still remember it because it was a bit unique and touchy. The advertisement starts with a boy who was in a school and then studied in a college and finally in a university and in the meantime it shows some of the successes he achieved and was congratulated. Thus he became a successful journalist and finally won an international prize for his honesty and bravery in his profession. His parents, mentors, teachers, friends and others were highlighted at the end of the advertisement and as a flashback, the Cello pen was shown. The advertisement revealed that the pen has contributed from the beginning to the end of his success and was never congratulated. Yet this is a silent partner of the man’s success. It was a commercial advert of a company who manufactures and sells pens. Thus the ads revealed how important pens are in our lives and how pens help people to become who they are! I guess this was a creative ad and was made with care as it has been a good ad to watch. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a creative advertisement you have seen. Describe an advertisement you did not like. Describe an advertisement you recently watched for the first time.
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Describe
an interesting
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advertisement
you
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watched
on TV. You should say: what the
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advertisement
was when you
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watched
it what it was advertising and
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explain
why it was
so
interesting. Model Answer 1:

I find most of the
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advertisements
to be either a “waste of
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time”
, or
simply
“distasteful”
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because
of their
rather
naked attempts to impose their products on us.
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But
then, I do
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watch
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advertisements
,
especially
if it delivers a
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good
message or
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make
us laugh, from
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time
to
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time
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because
they are unique and
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creative
.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such
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“creative”
ad that I
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watched
about a few years ago.

The advert
initially
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showed
a guy,
probably
in his early
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30’s
, walking past a building, built with
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glass
. Then the guy
suddenly
looks at the
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glass
and finds a “baby” (a 2 years
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old
baby
that is
) version of him. Then,
obviously
, the guy
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gets
“amused” by looking at the
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little
“baby” in him on the
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glass
and
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starts
making
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different
kinds of dance
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moves
. A few other
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people
,
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who
were passing by at the same
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time
,
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saw
this
rather
“unusual” incident and came forward to
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check
what was
really
going on,
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but
they
also
found the same “baby” versions, both boys and girls, of them, in the
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glass
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who
were dancing
happily
, nonstop. The dancing
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kept
on going for about 30 seconds or
so
and, at the
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end
of the
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advertisement’s
stipulated running
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time
, came the moving image of a certain kind of “bottled
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water”
(Evian
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water)
on the TV screen,
apparently
in an effort to convince
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people
to drink the bottled
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water
for the purpose of getting “refreshed” after a certain workout and remain “young” for that matter.

Anyway
, I found the advertising
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really interesting
primarily
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because
it had a great concept, both “catchy” and
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“creative”
at the same
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time
, which
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used
the suspense by allowing what was
being advertised
to be what
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comes
last, a bottled
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water
product
that is
, in order to target its audience with a “precise” message.
Besides
, the
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advertisement
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very
cleverly
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showed
that each and every person has a “child” in him or her no matter how
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old
he/she becomes.
Finally
, I found the ad to be fascinating
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because
it
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used
“technology” in a
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very
effective way to create
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some
great “animation” effects.
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Model Answer 2:

We
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watch
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many
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advertisements
on TV every
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now
and then.
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Some
of them are entertaining and
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creative
while others are
simply
a waste of
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time
and not-
so
-attractive. One such 'interesting and unique'
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advertisement of
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"
Cello Pen
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"
caught my attention a few months ago which I
still
find amusing.

The advert was about a
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pen
brand and it
was presented
in a
rather
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creative
manner. I
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watched
this
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advertisement
a few months ago on a TV channel while I was watching a
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live
sports competition. I
still
remember it
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because
it was a bit unique and touchy.

The
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advertisement
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starts
with a boy
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who
was in a school and then studied in a college and
finally
in a university and in the meantime it
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shows
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some of the
successes he achieved and
was congratulated
.
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Thus
he became a successful journalist and
finally
won an international prize for his honesty and bravery in his profession. His parents, mentors, teachers, friends
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and others
were highlighted
at the
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end
of the
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advertisement
and as a flashback, the Cello
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pen
was shown
. The
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advertisement
revealed that the
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pen
has contributed from the beginning to the
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end
of his success and was never congratulated.
Yet
this is a silent partner of the
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man
’s success.

It was a commercial advert of a
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company
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who
manufactures and sells
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pens
.
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Thus
the ads revealed how
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important
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pens
are in our
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lives
and how
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pens
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help
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people
to become
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who
they are!
I guess
this was a
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creative
ad and
was made
with care as it has been a
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good
ad to
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watch
. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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creative
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advertisement
you have
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seen
.
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Describe
an
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advertisement
you did not like.
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Describe
an
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advertisement
you recently
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watched
for the
first
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time
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an interesting advertisement you watched on TV. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
705 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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