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Describe a time when you moved to a new school. v.1

Describe a time when you moved to a new school. v. 1
Describe a time when you moved to a new school. You should say: when it was why you moved how old you were then and explain how you felt about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: Not sure, how many of us really needed to move to new schools, when growing up as a child, but I needed to do so a few times because of my father’s profession. Today, as per the requirement of this cue card topic, I would like to talk about one of those few times when I moved to a new school. It happened about 15 years ago when I was about 14 years old and attending my 8th grade. Back then, we, together with my parents and the siblings, all moved to a nice little town because my father got promoted in his job. Initially, I wasn’t really sure whether to like the new place or not. But, after a few days, I started to tell myself that it wasn’t exactly a bad place to live. However, when it came to getting admission to my new high school, I felt really shocked because of the fact that the staffs were not exactly as helpful as my previous school. In fact, I had to go to my new high school a couple of times just to get an admission. However, when I actually started my classes, I found out that my fellow classmates were rather nice and helpful. In fact, the class captain ordered all the students to introduce themselves to me. This particular good gesture on the part of my fellow classmates actually helped me get over the initial shock of starting my new high school. Slowly after that, I started to like my new school and its environment. Even the staffs and teachers started to recognize me as I started to perform well in my class. Anyway, moving to this new high school was a bit shocking experience for me as I wasn’t exactly treated very nicely. But, I kept telling myself to be patient. I also realized that in life, things don’t always turn out to be the way we expect and that we should always remain positive in life if we really want to improvise and succeed in life.
Describe
a
time
when you
moved
to a
new
school
. You should say: when it was why you
moved
how
old
you were then and
explain
how you felt about it. [You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
 
Model Answer:

Not sure, how
many
of us
really
needed to
move
to
new
schools
, when growing up as a child,
but
I needed to do
so
a few
times
because
of my father’s profession.
Today
, as per the requirement of this cue card topic, I would like to talk about one of those few
times
when I
moved
to a
new
school.

It happened about 15 years ago when I was about 14 years
old
and attending my 8th grade. Back then, we, together with my parents and the siblings, all
moved
to a nice
little
town
because
my father
got
promoted in his job.

Initially
, I wasn’t
really
sure whether to like the
new
place or not.
But
, after a few days, I
started
to
tell
myself that it wasn’t exactly a
bad
place to
live
.
However
, when it came to getting admission to my
new
high
school
, I felt
really
shocked
because of the fact that
the staffs were not exactly as helpful as my previous
school
. In fact, I had to go to my
new
high
school
a couple of
times
just
to
get
an admission.
However
, when I
actually
started
my classes, I found out that my
fellow classmates
were
rather
nice and helpful. In fact, the
class
captain ordered all the students to introduce themselves to me. This particular
good
gesture on the part of my
fellow classmates
actually
helped
me
get
over the initial shock of starting my
new
high
school.

Slowly
after that, I
started
to like my
new
school
and its environment. Even the staffs and teachers
started
to recognize me as I
started
to perform
well
in my
class
.

Anyway
, moving to this
new
high
school
was a
bit
shocking experience for me as I wasn’t exactly treated
very
nicely
.
But
, I
kept
telling myself to be patient. I
also
realized that in life, things don’t always turn out to be the way we
expect
and that we should always remain
positive
in life if we
really
want to improvise and succeed in life.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you moved to a new school. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
414 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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