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Describe a situation when you had to keep silent. v.1

Describe a situation when you had to keep silent. v. 1
Describe a situation when you had to keep silent. You should say: when it was where it was why you needed to remain silent and explain how you felt about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I have read the “please keep silent” sign at many places before, but I never really took it too seriously, perhaps because keeping silent isn’t exactly my nature. But, I still needed to maintain my silence once because the situation had just demanded it. Today, I would like to break that story and tell you what the situation really was. It was about a couple of years ago when I took my little niece to take an admission test for grade-1 at an elementary school, which was a bit far away from where my niece's family lived. My niece, a 4-years-old girl, was a bit nervous about being left alone at a completely strange place. So, I decided to stay close to my niece in a separate room, next to the place where my niece was taking the test. Anyway, since the admission test would continue for one good hour, I thought that it would be better for me if I had just used my phone to inform my elder brother about how her little daughter was doing. But, as soon as I started to talk over my phone in a rather low voice, I was asked to keep silent. Understanding the situation, I then decided to pick up some newspapers from the desk and read them to pass my time. But, even that privilege was taken away from me, simply because I was making just a bit too much noise when I was turning the newspaper pages! Apparently, the school authority didn’t want to distract the little children while they were taking the admission test. So, I just kept my silence at the test venue like a “good boy” until the test was over. Anyway, initially, I felt a bit annoyed with such a strong rule about maintaining silence, but I eventually realized that so was done only to help the children to keep their maximum focus on the test. Besides, the practice also gave me an early impression that my little niece would learn the much-needed lessons on maintaining discipline in life from an early age if admitted to that school.
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a
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situation
when you had to
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keep
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silent
. You should say: when it was where it was why you needed to remain
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silent
and
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explain
how you felt about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

I have read the “
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please
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keep
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silent”
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sign
at
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many
places
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before
,
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but
I never
really
took it too
seriously
, perhaps
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because
keeping
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silent
isn’t exactly my nature.
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But
, I
still
needed to maintain my silence once
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because
the
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situation
had
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just
demanded it.
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Today
, I would like to break that story and
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tell
you what the
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situation
really
was.

It was about a couple of years ago when I took my
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little
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niece
to take an admission
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test
for grade-1 at an elementary school, which was a
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bit
far away from where my niece's family
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lived
. My
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niece
, a 4-years-
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old
girl, was a
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bit
nervous about being
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left
alone at a completely strange place.
So
, I decided to stay close to my
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niece
in a separate room,
next
to the place where my
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niece
was taking the
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test
.

Anyway
, since the admission
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test
would continue for one
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good
hour, I
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thought
that it would be better for me if I had
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just
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used
my phone to inform my elder brother about how her
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little
daughter was doing.
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But
, as
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soon
as I
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started
to talk over my phone in a
rather
low voice, I
was asked
to
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keep
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silent
. Understanding the
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situation
, I then decided to pick up
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some
newspapers from the desk and read them to pass my time.
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But
, even that privilege
was taken
away from me,
simply
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because
I was making
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just
a
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bit
too much noise when I was turning the newspaper pages!

Apparently
, the school authority didn’t want to distract the
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little
children while they were taking the admission
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test
.
So
, I
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just
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kept
my silence at the
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test
venue like a “
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good
boy” until the
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test
was over.

Anyway
,
initially
, I felt a
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bit
annoyed with such a strong
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rule
about maintaining silence,
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but
I
eventually
realized that
so
was done
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only
to
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help
the children to
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keep
their maximum focus on the
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test
.
Besides
, the practice
also
gave me an early impression that my
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little
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niece
would learn the much-needed lessons on maintaining discipline in life from an early age if admitted to that school.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a situation when you had to keep silent. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
425 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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