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Describe an important conversation that has brought a positive change in your life. v.1

Describe an important conversation that has brought a positive change in your life. v. 1
Describe an important conversation that has brought a positive change in your life. You should say: whom you had this conversation with how long this conversation was why you had this conversation and explain how this conversation has brought a positive change in your life. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I have a habit of having conversations and taking advice on different important issues from people around me. Needless to say, this practice has often helped me in making decisions at crunch times. Today, I would like to talk about one such conversation, that I had, after passing my junior college. It was about 10 years ago when I failed to get admission at the medical college. Actually, not being able to pass the medical college entrance examination was one of the most shocking experiences of my life. Of course, it was not an easy admission test at all because only the most brilliant students with great academic results usually take part in these tests in order to study medical science at the medical colleges of my country. However, while I don’t exactly think that I fall in the category of the most brilliant students of my country, I still thought that I would be able to pull off a miracle since I studied really hard throughout my previous years for this purpose. Anyway, after failing to secure a place at a medical college, I remained confused and clueless for a considerable period of time. I even felt really depressed at times after that shocking news. So, I decided to head to my elder uncle, hoping that he would provide me some intelligent conversation and comfort in order to help me get out of this Jinx. The conversation had continued for about 30 minutes which provided a lot of important insights to me about life, as well as how the definition of “success” and “failure” changes in the life of people, as time progresses. Anyway, I felt much better about my life after having that conversation with my uncle, as it provided me with the much-needed direction for my life. In fact, the conversation helped me realize the fact that we should always explore other avenues of success, when we fail to achieve a certain dream, instead of feeling down and depressed. Besides, it was after this conversation, I learned to work even harder instead of complaining about the system and situation.
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Describe
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conversation
that has brought a
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positive
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change
in your
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life
. You should say: whom you had this
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conversation
with how long this
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was why you had this
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and
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how this
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conversation
has brought a
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positive
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change
in your
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life
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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Model Answer:

I have a habit of having
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conversations
and taking advice on
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different
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important
issues from
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people
around me.
Needless to say
, this practice has
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often
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helped
me in making decisions at crunch
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times
.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such
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conversation
, that I had, after passing my junior college.

It was about 10 years ago when I failed to
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get
admission at the
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medical
college.
Actually
, not being able to pass the
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medical
college entrance examination was one of the most shocking experiences of my
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life
.
Of course
, it was not an easy admission
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test
at all
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because
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only
the most brilliant students with great academic results
usually
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take part
in these
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tests
in order to study
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medical
science at the
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medical
colleges of my country.
However
, while I don’t exactly
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think
that I fall in the category of the most brilliant students of my country, I
still
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thought
that I would be able to pull off a miracle since I studied
really
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hard
throughout my previous years for this purpose.

Anyway
, after failing to secure a place at a
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medical
college, I remained confused and clueless for a considerable period of
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time
. I even felt
really
depressed at
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times
after that shocking news.
So
, I decided to head to my elder uncle, hoping that he would provide me
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some
intelligent
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conversation
and comfort in order to
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help
me
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get
out of this Jinx. The
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conversation
had continued for about 30 minutes which provided
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a lot of
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important
insights to me about
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life
, as
well
as how the definition of “success” and “failure”
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changes
in the
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life
of
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people
, as
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time
progresses.

Anyway
, I felt much better about my
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life
after having that
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conversation
with my uncle, as it provided me with the much-needed direction for my
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life
. In fact, the
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conversation
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helped
me realize the fact that we should always explore other avenues of success, when we fail to achieve a certain dream,
instead
of feeling down and depressed.
Besides
, it was after this
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conversation
, I learned to work even harder
instead
of complaining about the system and situation.
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2Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an important conversation that has brought a positive change in your life. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
438 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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