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Describe a thing that you possess and which is important to you. v.1

Describe a thing that you possess and which is important to you. v. 1
Describe a thing that you possess and which is important to you. You should say: what is it and who gave it to you what is the speciality of it would you ever give it to someone else and explain why it is important to you. Model Answer 1: I don’t really have that many important things, which I possess, except for my wristwatch, smartphone, laptop and camera. While all of those things are important to me in one way or another, I would choose my camera to talk about here today. It is a digital camera. One of my elder cousins gave it to me as a gift about 5 years ago, when he visited abroad.   It is a compact, 8 Mega Pixel Camera which is about 6 inches in length and 4 inches in width. Having a beautiful silver colour, this camera has a picture resolution of 3264 x 2448. It also has a Full Frame (36 x 24 mm) sensor. Unlike old-style film cameras, my digital camera can capture and record images of any kinds of objects around us, using digital technology. In other words, they store photographs not as patterns of darkness and light, but as long strings of numbers. This camera has a perfect size zoom lens and carries a memory card as well as batteries in it. This is a light-weight camera which also happens to be water-proof and rather strong. Anyway, I love my camera because I can carry it anywhere I go, so I guess that I wouldn’t really be too much interested to hand it over to somebody else unless there is a very valid reason to do so. After all, I take care of my camera as a little brother, and I don’t think that others would do the same. Anyway, this camera is an important thing for me because I have a habit of taking a lot of pictures of wherever I go.   And, since this camera has many advantages, like it gives me instant photographs, allows me to edit them at will, and makes it easier for me to share photographs using cell phones (mobile phones), emails, and web sites, it has become like an “automatic” partner for me wherever I travel. Besides, its “video recording” option allows me to record any kind of happy and fun event, like wedding, birthday parties or hanging out with friends.
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Describe
a thing that you possess and which is
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important
to you. You should say: what is it and who gave it to you what is the
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speciality
of it would you ever give it to someone else and
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explain
why it is
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important
to you.

Model Answer 1:

I don’t
really
have that
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many
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important
things, which I possess,
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except for
my wristwatch, smartphone, laptop and
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camera
. While all of those things are
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important
to me in one way or another, I would choose my
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camera
to talk about here
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today
.

It is a digital
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camera
. One of my elder cousins gave it to me as a gift about 5 years ago, when he visited abroad.
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It is a compact, 8 Mega Pixel
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Camera
which is about
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6 inches
in length and
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4 inches
in width. Having a
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beautiful
silver
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colour
, this
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camera
has a picture resolution of 3264
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x
2448. It
also
has a Full Frame (36
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x
24 mm) sensor. Unlike
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old
-style film
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cameras
, my digital
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camera
can capture and record images of any kinds of objects around us, using digital technology.
In other words
, they store photographs not as patterns of darkness and light,
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but
as long strings of numbers.

This
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camera
has a perfect size zoom lens and carries a memory card as
well
as batteries in it. This is a light-weight
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camera
which
also
happens to be water-proof and
rather
strong.
Anyway
, I
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love
my
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camera
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because
I can carry it anywhere I go,
so
I guess
that I wouldn’t
really
be too much interested to hand it over to somebody else unless there is a
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very
valid reason to do
so
.
After all
, I take care of my
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camera
as a
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little
brother, and I don’t
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think
that others would do the same.

Anyway
, this
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camera
is an
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important
thing for me
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because
I have a habit of taking
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a lot of
pictures of wherever I go.
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And, since this
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camera
has
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many
advantages, like it gives me instant photographs,
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allows
me to edit them at will, and
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makes
it easier for me to share photographs using cell phones (mobile phones), emails, and
Did you mean "websites"?
web sites
, it has become like an “automatic” partner for me wherever I travel.
Besides
, its “video recording” option
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
me to record any kind of happy and fun
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event
, like wedding, birthday parties or hanging out with friends.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a thing that you possess and which is important to you. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
401 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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