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Describe a library that you visited. v.1

Describe a library that you visited. v. 1
Describe a library that you visited. You should say: where it was what it looked like what facilities it had and explain what influence it had on you and how you felt about it. Follow-up Questions: Why are the libraries important for us? What facilities do you expect from a library? What type of book do you like to read? Why do you like them?   Model Answer 1: I haven’t really visited many libraries in my life, perhaps, because I didn’t have very many libraries, closed to where I lived. However, when I was studying at a university, I needed to visit its library once in a while for study purpose. So, today, I will just go ahead and describe that particular library as best as I can. As I just mentioned earlier, it was a university library, which stood tall in the heart our rather large university campus, with many other administrative and faculty buildings around it. It was a four-storey building with enough space for reading for nearly all of its students. One of the great features of this library was that it could be accessed from all directions. Even though the library was old, it had a nice architecture as it would receive enough natural light and air as long as they were available. Each floor of the library had two parts, with one part providing the space and facilities for regular library activities, while the other part in the front remained empty like a long and spacious balcony. Anyway, the top three floors of the library contained all the books and research materials, many of which were as old as two hundred years, in order to help students gain knowledge, while the bottom floor contained only newspapers, magazines, journals and other kinds of periodicals. All the floors had a separate and large section for receptions in the middle of them which would provide different kinds of educational videos to students. Finally, each floor of the library had a separate section to sit and relax for the visitors while watching some TV programmes. Anyway, this library had a great influence on me, primarily because I could learn about a lot of new and interesting things, every time I had visited it. Besides, after visiting this library, I met some really genuine and brilliant minds, who could provide me with important insights on different issues.   Finally, I felt that the library could actually also provide me with a great escape from the stress of my daily life sometimes.
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Describe
a library that you visited. You should say: where it was what it looked like what facilities it had and
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explain
what influence it had on you and how you felt about it. Follow-up Questions: Why are the libraries
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important
for us? What facilities do you
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expect
from a library? What type of book do you like to read? Why do you like them?
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Model Answer 1:

I haven’t
really
visited
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many
libraries in my life, perhaps,
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because
I didn’t have
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very
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many
libraries, closed to where I
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lived
.
However
, when I was studying at a university, I needed to visit its library once in a while for study purpose.
So
,
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today
, I will
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just
go ahead and
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describe
that particular library as
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best
as I can.

As I
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just
mentioned earlier, it was a university library, which stood tall in the heart our
rather
large university campus, with
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many
other administrative and faculty buildings around it. It was a
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four-storey
building with
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enough
space for reading for
nearly
all of its students. One of the great features of this library was that it could
be accessed
from all directions.
Even though
the library was
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old
, it had a nice architecture as it would receive
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enough
natural light and air as long as they were available.

Each
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floor
of the library had two parts, with one part providing the space and facilities for regular library activities, while the other part in the front remained empty like a long and spacious balcony.
Anyway
, the top three
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floors
of the library contained all the books and research materials,
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many
of which were as
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old
as two hundred years, in order to
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help
students gain knowledge, while the bottom
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floor
contained
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only
newspapers, magazines, journals and other kinds of periodicals. All the
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floors
had a separate and large section for receptions in the middle of them which would provide
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different
kinds of educational videos to students.
Finally
, each
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floor
of the library had a separate section to sit and relax for the visitors while watching
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some
TV
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programmes
.

Anyway
, this library had a great influence on me,
primarily
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because
I could learn about
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a lot of
new and interesting things, every time I had visited it.
Besides
, after visiting this library, I met
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some
really
genuine and brilliant minds, who could provide me with
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important
insights on
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different
issues.
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Finally
, I felt that the library could
actually
also
provide me with a great escape from the
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stress
of my daily life
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sometimes
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a library that you visited. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
422 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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