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Describe a foreign country you have planned to visit. v.1

Describe a foreign country you have planned to visit. v. 1
Describe a foreign country you have planned to visit. You should say: where the country is when you are planning to visit there why you have planned to go there and give details of your plan to visit the country. Follow-up questions: Say something about tourism development in your country, facility, services and the effect on the environment. What is the importance of the travel and tourism industry? What do you think about the function of tourist guides? What steps should the government take to make tourism more attractive to foreigners?   Model Answer 1: I am glad that I have got some opportunity to visit a few foreign countries already in my life, but I plan to visit another foreign country soon. So, I must thank you for offering me this great opportunity to share this plan for my forthcoming visit. The country, I want to visit, is called “Nepal”. Famously known as “the daughter of the mountain” or “the daughter of Himalayas”, this small South Asian country is landlocked between India and China. Being home to eight of the world’s tallest mountains, including the Mount Everest, Nepal attracts hundreds of thousands of tourists every year from around the world. I am planning to visit this beautiful country the next summer, when I will get some time off from my job, because of its stunning natural beauties. Nepal is also a land of friendly and engaging people, where deities mingle with mortals and magnificent temples, and where monasteries and historical monuments can be found at almost every turn. After arriving in Nepal, first, I want to travel around the beautiful capital city of “Kathmandu” in order to mingle with them and learn about their lifestyles, cultures and spiritual life. After that, I want to view the beautiful and giant mountain range of the Himalayas by visiting “Dhulikhel”, which is about two hours drive from Kathmandu. Then I plan to visit Pokhara, where Nepal’s startling beauty is at its best, which has been the subject of many travel writers. In fact, its pristine air, the spectacular backdrop of the snowy peaks of the Annapurna Range and the serene Phewa, Begnas and Rupa Lakes, makes this destination ‘the Jewel of the Himalaya’. I also want to explore the fascinating Kathmandu Valley which is comprised of the three ancient cities, including Kathmandu, Patan and Bhaktapur.   The valley houses seven UNESCO World Heritage Sites and is also home to a myriad of monuments, sculptures, artistic temples and magnificent artworks. Finally, I am planning to spend about 7 days in Nepal while also trying some of their most delicious local food.
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Describe
a foreign
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country
you have planned to
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visit
. You should say: where the
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country
is when you are planning to
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visit
there why you have planned to go there and give
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details
of your
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plan
to
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visit
the country.

Follow-up questions: Say something about tourism development in your
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country
, facility, services and the effect on the environment. What is the importance of the travel and tourism industry? What do you
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think
about the function of tourist guides?
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What
steps should the
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government
take to
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make
tourism more attractive to foreigners?
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Model Answer 1:

I am glad that I have
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got
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some
opportunity to
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visit
a few foreign
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countries
already in my life,
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but
I
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plan
to
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visit
another foreign
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country
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soon
.
So
, I
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must
thank you for offering me this great opportunity to share this
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plan
for my forthcoming visit.

The
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country
, I
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want
to
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visit
,
is called
“Nepal”.
Famously
known as “the daughter of the mountain” or “the daughter
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of Himalayas
”, this
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small
South Asian
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country
is landlocked
between India and China.

Being home to eight of the world’s tallest mountains, including the Mount Everest, Nepal attracts hundreds of thousands of tourists every year from around the world. I am planning to
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visit
this
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beautiful
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country
the
next
summer, when I will
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get
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some
time off from my job,
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because
of its stunning natural beauties. Nepal is
also
a land of friendly and engaging
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people
, where deities mingle with mortals and magnificent temples, and where monasteries and historical monuments can
be found
at almost every turn.

After arriving in Nepal,
first
, I
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want
to travel around the
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beautiful
capital city of “Kathmandu” in order to mingle with them and learn about their lifestyles, cultures and spiritual life. After that, I
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want
to view the
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beautiful
and giant mountain range of the Himalayas by visiting “
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Dhulikhel
”, which is about two hours drive from Kathmandu. Then I
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plan
to
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visit
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Pokhara
, where Nepal’s startling beauty is at its best, which has been the subject of
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many
travel writers. In fact, its pristine air, the spectacular backdrop of the snowy peaks of the Annapurna Range and the serene
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Phewa
,
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Begnas
and
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Rupa
Lakes,
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makes
this destination ‘the Jewel of the Himalaya’.

I
also
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want
to explore the fascinating Kathmandu Valley which
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is comprised of
the three ancient cities, including Kathmandu,
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Patan
and
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Bhaktapur
.
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The valley
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houses
seven UNESCO World Heritage Sites and is
also
home to a myriad of monuments, sculptures, artistic temples and magnificent artworks.
Finally
, I am planning to spend about 7 days in Nepal while
also
trying
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some
of their most delicious local food.
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12Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a foreign country you have planned to visit. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
438 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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