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Describe a thing you possess which is important to you. v.1

Describe a thing you possess which is important to you. v. 1
Describe a thing you possess which is important to you. You should say: what it is what it can do how you use it and explain why it is important to you. Model Answer 1: Today I am going to tell you about an item I possess which is important to me.   I will tell you what it is, what it can do, how I use it and why it is important to me. The item that is important to me is my laptop!   I am not very knowledgeable about technology, so I can’t tell you anything about its specifications.   However, I can tell you that it is very light and easy to carry around.   It has both a keyboard and a touch-screen and since starting my travels it has become my best friend! My laptop has all the Microsoft office packages like Word and PowerPoint, it also has a big memory and can give me access to Skype and the Internet. I use my laptop every day for work.   It helps me professionally in my job as an English teacher because I can use it to devise lesson plans, carry out research on new topics, and keep up to date with news and issues of relevance to my area of work.   I also use my laptop every day for personal things.   I can contact my friends by email; chat to others using Skype – if there is a strong enough wi-fi connection – and I can save all my photos of this beautiful country that I am working in at the moment Vietnam, safely on my computer. I am from England, before I came to Vietnam my employer said it would be really helpful if I could bring a laptop with me.   I was worried - ‘what if it gets broken’ or ‘what if it gets stolen’ I thought.   Now I am here I am so happy I brought it with me.   It helps me professionally to do my job well, and it helps me personally as I can communicate with friends, family and colleagues all over the world. Did you know that when I was in my twenties computers and the internet did not even exist?   I would never have imagined that thirty years later this gadget ‘a laptop’ has become so important to me.   I wonder what gadgets will be invented in the next thirty years! [ Written by - Lucy Marris | Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Sample Answer 2: Everything has its own importance based on necessity or frequent usage. I also have a laptop of my own and I had bought with my expenses when I was a student. The laptop has been serving me for three consecutive years. And I hope it will last long. I bought the laptop in 2014. But it was hard for me to manage the entire amount for the laptop. Hence, I had to save money from my regular expense. Life in Australia is tough if you do not have the minimum support from your family. In fact, I had to go against my family and started earning to support my own expenses including the educational costs in Australia. I felt the necessity for a laptop and it was impossible to seek financial help from my family. So, I arranged to purchase the Dell XPS 13 Ultrabook for me. This is a great machine so far. This is a very speedy laptop and I am greatly happy with its performance. I can do a good number of tasks with this laptop. It comes with a Core 15 processor and has 128GB SSD. The integrated graphics of this device is also very effective for me. The laptop has an 8GB RAM. On the other side, the majority of the laptops of that age had only 4GB RAM. As a result, this is a very fast laptop I have ever used. But the most important thing to me was the completion of the basic necessary tasks for me. I need to prepare presentations on the laptop and present them before the class. Besides, completing the assignments with the word processor was the other important task I had to do. I enjoyed watching movies on this laptop. I was happy with the 1080p touch display. In fact, it was a new experience to me. I had to remain very cautious about the use of this machine. The price was comparatively more than my budget and I had to cut many of my costs to afford the laptop. So, it was not possible for me to use the laptop randomly. I only used it when I needed it most. In a day, I used it for three to four hours. And by this time, I completed all of my necessary tasks. I had some other mates and friends in the university. They also had laptops but the way they used was different than me. They took almost no care for their devices and hence the laptops suffered different damages. Besides, some of them kept the machine open for hours. In fact, they did not switch off the laptops even in a week. As a result, they did not get the optimum performance from the laptop. But my experience is the opposite. I am having a better performance even after passing a notable moment with the laptop. The laptop is important to me for various reasons. First of all, I needed it badly to complete my presentations at the university class. Besides, completing the assignments was the other important reason to have the laptop. This is not the age to submit assignments by hand writing. Often I had to download e-books for my academic studies and communicate with my university professors using e-mail. I was not addicted to social networking and still, I do escape from the time killing activities. But my academic and other needs were essential to me and thus the laptop is important. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a gadget you often use. Describe an important device you use daily. Describe something you own which is very important to you.
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Describe
a thing you possess which is
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important
to you. You should say: what it is what it can do how you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
why it is
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important
to you. Model Answer 1:

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Today
I am going to
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tell
you about an item I possess which is
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important
to me.
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I will
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tell
you what it is, what it can do, how I
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use
it and why it is
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important
to me. The item
that is
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important
to me is my
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laptop
!
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I am not
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very
knowledgeable about technology,
so
I can’t
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tell
you anything about its specifications.
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However
, I can
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tell
you that it is
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very
light and easy to carry around.
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It has both a keyboard and a touch-screen and since starting my travels it has become my best
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friend
! My
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laptop
has all the
Did you mean the proper noun "Microsoft Office" (= Microsoft product)?
Microsoft office
packages like Word and PowerPoint, it
also
has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
memory and can give me access to Skype and the Internet. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my
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laptop
every day for work.
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It
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helps
me
professionally
in my job as an English teacher
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because
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it to devise lesson plans, carry out research on new topics, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up to date with news and issues of relevance to my area of work.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my
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laptop
every day for personal things.
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I can contact my
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friends
by email; chat to others using Skype
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
if there is a strong
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
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wi-fi
connection
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–
and I can save all my photos of this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
country that I am working in at the moment Vietnam,
safely
on my computer.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am from England,
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before
I came to Vietnam my employer said it would be
really
helpful if I could bring a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
with me.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was worried
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-
‘what if it
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gets
broken’ or ‘what if it
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gets
stolen’ I
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thought
.
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Now
I am here I am
so
happy I brought it with me.
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It
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helps
me
professionally
to do my job
well
, and it
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helps
me
personally
as I can communicate with
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friends
,
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family
and colleagues all over the world. Did
you know
that when I was in my twenties computers and the internet did not even exist?
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
I would never have imagined that thirty years later this gadget ‘a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop’
has become
so
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
important
to me.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
I wonder what gadgets will
be invented
in the
next
thirty years!
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[
Written by
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
Lucy
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Marris
| Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
Don't put a space before the closing parenthesis
]
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Sample Answer 2:

Everything has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
importance based on necessity or frequent usage. I
also
have a
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laptop
of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
and I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
with my expenses when I was a student. The
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laptop
has been serving me for three consecutive years. And I hope it will last long.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
the
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laptop
in 2014.
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But
it was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me to manage the entire amount for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
.
Hence
, I had to save money from my regular expense. Life in Australia is tough if you do not have the minimum support from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
. In fact, I had to go against my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
earning to support my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
expenses including the educational costs in Australia. I felt the necessity for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
and it was impossible to seek financial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
from my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
.
So
, I arranged to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
the Dell XPS 13 Ultrabook for me. This is a great machine
so
far.

This is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
speedy
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
laptop and
I am
greatly
happy with its performance. I can do a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
number of
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tasks
with this
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laptop
. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with a Core 15 processor and has
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "128 GB"
128GB
SSD. The integrated graphics of this device is
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
effective for me. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
has an
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "8 GB"
8GB
RAM. On the
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other
side, the majority of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptops
of that age had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "4 GB"
4GB
RAM.
As a result
, this is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
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laptop
I have ever
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
.
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But
the most
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important
thing to me was the completion of the basic necessary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tasks
for me. I need to prepare presentations on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
and present them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.
Besides
, completing the assignments with the word processor was the
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other
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important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
task
I had to do. I enjoyed watching movies on this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
. I was happy with the 1080p touch display. In fact, it was a new experience to me.

I had to remain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
cautious about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of this machine. The price was
comparatively
more than my budget and I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
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many
of my costs to afford the
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laptop
.
So
, it was not possible for me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the
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laptop
randomly
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it when I needed it most. In a day, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it for three to four hours. And by this time, I completed all of my necessary
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tasks
. I had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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other
mates and
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friends
in the university. They
also
had
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laptops
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but
the way they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
was
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different
Did you mean 'different "from"? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
than
me. They took almost no care for their devices and
hence
the
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laptops
suffered
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
damages.
Besides
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
the machine open for hours. In fact, they did not switch off the
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laptops
even in a week.
As a result
, they did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the optimum performance from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
my experience is the opposite. I am having a better performance even after passing a notable moment with the laptop.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
is
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important
to me for various reasons.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I needed it
badly
to complete my presentations at the university
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.
Besides
, completing the assignments was the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
important
reason to have the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
. This is not the age to submit assignments by hand writing.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Often
I had to download e-books for my academic studies and communicate with my university professors using e-mail. I was not addicted to social networking and
still
, I do escape from the time killing activities.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
my academic and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
needs were essential to me and
thus
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
.

Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a gadget you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
important
device you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
daily.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
something you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
important
to you.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a thing you possess which is important to you. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
1055 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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