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Describe a sporting event you attended. v.1

Describe a sporting event you attended. v. 1
Describe a sporting event you attended. You should say: what kind of sporting event it was give details of this event how often it takes place and explain why you consider this event to be interesting. Follow-up Questions: What is the most popular sporting event in your country? Why are sporting events important? What sort of games and sports do you take part?   Model Answer 1: I like football, whether it is played between two international teams or local teams, as long as the teams give their best in the field. The sporting event, I would like to talk about, was a national club football tournament of my country that takes place every year. Anyway, the sporting event took place about 5 years ago, when two of the best football clubs of my country clashed against each other in a final match of the national football tournament. The two arch-rival teams had already clashed against each other in the past, and their number of wins was pretty much the same throughout the history of their clash, especially, in this tournament. So, essentially, nobody really knew which team was favourite to win the final. But, when the game actually started, all the supporters of both the teams were screaming and encouraging their respective team as if they were bound to win. As a supporter, I also wanted my team to win at all costs.   Anyway, both teams were playing very “rough and tough” football that led to some unwanted “fouls” and some unfortunate “fistfight”. The game continued scoreless up until the half time interval, but as the second half of the game started, the intensity of the game increased.   In the meanwhile, I was getting nervous in the stadium because my team wasn’t exactly playing up to our expectation. In fact, my team was lucky to survive a few scoring chances from the opponent team.   Then, suddenly, the ball was passed to the main “striker” of my favourite team from nowhere, and a goal was scored by my team, leaving the supporters of my team completely ecstatic and crazy with the feeling of a possible victory. And, in the end, we were indeed the victorious team. Anyway, I consider this sporting event to be interesting because we never know which team is going to win. Besides, I consider this sporting event exciting also because it attracts supporters from all over my country. Finally, it is interesting also because no other sporting event makes us as emotional as this one.
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Describe
a sporting
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event
you attended. You should say: what kind of sporting
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event
it was give
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details
of this
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event
how
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often
it takes place and
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explain
why you consider this
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event
to be interesting. Follow-up Questions: What is the most popular sporting
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event
in your
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country
? Why are sporting
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events
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important
? What sort of
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games
and sports do you
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take part
?
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Model Answer 1:

I like
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football
, whether it
is played
between two international
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teams
or local
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teams
, as long as the
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teams
give their best in the field. The sporting
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event
, I would like to talk about, was a national club
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football
tournament of my
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country
that takes place every year.

Anyway
, the sporting
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event
took place about 5 years ago, when two of the best
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football
clubs of my
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country
clashed against each other in a final match of the national
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football
tournament. The two arch-rival
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teams
had already clashed against each other in the past, and their number of wins was pretty much the same throughout the history of their clash,
especially
, in this tournament.
So
,
essentially
, nobody
really
knew which
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team
was
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favourite
to
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win
the final.

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But
, when the game
actually
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started
, all the supporters of both the
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teams
were screaming and encouraging their respective
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team
as if they
were bound
to
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win
. As a
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supporter
, I
also
wanted my
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team
to
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win
at all costs.
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Anyway
, both
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teams
were playing
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very
“rough and tough”
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football
that led to
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some
unwanted “fouls” and
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some
unfortunate “fistfight”.

The game continued scoreless up until the half time interval,
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but
as the second half of the game
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started
, the intensity of the game increased.
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In the meanwhile, I was getting nervous in the stadium
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because
my
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team
wasn’t exactly playing up to our expectation. In fact, my
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team
was lucky to survive a few scoring chances from the opponent
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team
.
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Then,
suddenly
, the ball
was passed
to the main “striker” of my
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favourite
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team
from nowhere, and a goal
was scored
by my
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team
, leaving the supporters of my
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team
completely ecstatic and crazy with the feeling of a possible victory. And, in the
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end
, we were
indeed
the victorious team.

Anyway
, I consider this sporting
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event
to be interesting
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because
we never know which
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team
is going to
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win
.
Besides
, I consider this sporting
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event
exciting
also
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because
it attracts supporters from all over my
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country
.
Finally
, it is interesting
also
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because
no other sporting
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event
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makes
us as emotional as this one.
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42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a sporting event you attended. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
422 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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