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Describe your favourite animal. v.1

Describe your favourite animal. v. 1
Describe your favourite animal. You Should Say:     what kind of animal it is     describe it briefly     why you like this animal and describe why it is your favourite animal. Follow-up Questions:     What do you need to do to take care of it?     What’s the future trend of the animal?     How do you think of the poaching of some precious animals such as pandas?   Model Answer 1: Today I am going to tell you about my favourite animal, what it is, where it lives, when I first encountered it and why I like it so much. I like lots of animals, so it is difficult to choose just one. However, I think my favourite animal is the Warthog. Warthogs live in Africa, they are a sort of wild pig. They get their name because they have four fleshy bumps on their faces, which look a bit like warts. These are part of the defence mechanism for males when they fight. Some people think warthogs are ugly, but I think they are lovely, they have great character. I was lucky enough to spend some time volunteering at a property in South Africa. At the property, there were three young warthogs which had been orphaned after their mother was poached – killed for food. The baby warthogs were, therefore, hand-reared. When they were old enough, they were set free to run around in the wild. However, because they were so used to people they preferred to stay nearby.   These three warthogs were very friendly, intelligent and loved to play. They also like to follow their leader. In the wild, baby warthogs will run after their mothers, these three young hogs used to follow us. They would run after us even if we were in a vehicle or on a horse – once they even tried to follow the landowner when he took off in his helicopter! The pigs (as we started to call them) loved to be scratched and cuddled, they were very affectionate. They were also very nosy, whatever we did, they wanted to be with us! I love warthogs, they are energetic, loyal, and funny and I think they are beautiful too. Though I do understand the saying ‘beauty is in the eye of the beholder! ’ [ Written by - Lucy Marris | Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Model Answer 2: People love different kinds of animals for different reasons. Some love them because they look so “cute” and adorable while others love them because of their rather smart and loyal character. Anyway, like many others, I also have my favourite animal, about which, I will describe very shortly. The name of my favourite animal is “deer”, and they belong to the Cervidae family of mammals. Other members of the family include Elk, reindeer, chital, roe and etc. Depending on where we live, we can find over 90 species of deer around the world. Deer are lean and long-legged animals. Deer species range from very large to very small. The smallest deer is the Southern pudu which can weigh only about 20 lbs. (9 kilograms) and gets to be only about 14 inches (36 centimetres) tall when fully grown. On the other hands, the largest deer is the moose which can grow up to 6. 5 feet (2 meters) from hoof to shoulder and weigh around 1, 800 lbs. (820 kg). Their typical colouring ranges from reddish-brown to grey-brown with the cream-coloured underside. Deer live in lots of different places in the world including Asia, Europe, North America, and South America. They don’t live in other continents because of their extreme weather. They usually live in or close to forests in small groups, called herds, with other deer. Some Deer sometimes even make their own beds out of plants! Anyway, I like deer for a number of reasons, but the main reason, of course, is their sheer speed. Anyway, deer are my favourite animal because they look so distinctly beautiful with some of their unique features. They are also my favourite animal because they are never violent around us human, or for that matter, with any other animals! In fact, they are very social, with one group of them watching over another, but shy and very wary creatures, features which make them look very “adorable”. Finally, deer are my favourite animal also because they are strictly “vegetarian”, eating grass and plants that are mostly redundant, and thus helping maintain some kind of ecological balance around us.
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Describe
your
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favourite
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animal
. You Should Say:
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what kind of
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animal
it is
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describe
it
briefly
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why you like this
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animal
and
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describe
why it is your
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favourite
animal.

Follow-up Questions:
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What do you need to do to take care of it?
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What’s the future trend of the
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animal
?
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How do you
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think
of the poaching of
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some
precious
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animals
such as pandas?
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Model Answer 1:

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Today
I am going to
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tell
you about my
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favourite
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animal
, what it is, where it
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lives
, when I
first
encountered it and why I like it
so
much. I like lots of
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animals
,
so
it is difficult to choose
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just
one.
However
, I
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think
my
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favourite
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animal
is the
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Warthog
.
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Warthogs
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live
in Africa, they are a sort of wild pig. They
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get
their name
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because
they have four fleshy bumps on their faces, which
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look
a bit like warts. These are part of the
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defence
mechanism for males when they fight.
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Some
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people
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think
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warthogs
are ugly,
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but
I
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think
they are lovely, they have great character. I was lucky
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enough
to spend
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some
time volunteering at a property in South Africa. At the property, there were three young
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warthogs
which had
been orphaned
after their mother
was poached
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–
killed for food. The baby
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warthogs
were,
therefore
, hand-reared. When they were
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old
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enough
, they
were set
free to run
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around
in the wild.
However
,
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because
they were
so
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used
to
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people
they preferred to stay nearby.
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These three
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warthogs
were
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very
friendly, intelligent and
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loved
to play. They
also
like to follow their leader. In the wild, baby
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warthogs
will run after their mothers, these three young hogs
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used
to follow us. They would run after us even if we were in a vehicle or on a horse
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–
once they even tried to follow the landowner when he took off in his helicopter! The pigs (as we
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started
to call them)
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loved
to
be scratched
and cuddled, they were
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very
affectionate. They were
also
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very
nosy, whatever we did, they wanted to be with us! I
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love
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warthogs
, they are energetic, loyal, and
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funny
and I
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think
they are
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beautiful
too. Though I do understand the saying ‘beauty is in the eye of the beholder! ’
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[
Written by
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-
Lucy
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Marris
| Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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]
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Model Answer 2:

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People
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love
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different
kinds of
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animals
for
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different
reasons.
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Some
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love
them
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because
they
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look
so
“cute” and adorable while others
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love
them
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because
of their
rather
smart and loyal character.
Anyway
, like
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many
others, I
also
have my
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favourite
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animal
, about which, I will
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describe
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very
shortly.

The name of my
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favourite
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animal
is “deer”, and they belong to the
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Cervidae
family of mammals.
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Other
members of the family include Elk, reindeer,
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chital
, roe
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and etc
. Depending on where we
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live
, we can find over 90 species of deer
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around
the world. Deer are lean and long-legged
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animals
. Deer species range from
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very
large to
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very
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small
. The smallest deer is the Southern
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pudu
which can weigh
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only
about 20 lbs. (9 kilograms) and
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gets
to be
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only
about
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14 inches (36 centimetres)
tall when
fully
grown. On the
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other
hands, the largest deer is the moose which can grow up to 6.
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5 feet (2 meters)
from hoof to shoulder and weigh
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around
1, 800 lbs. (820 kg). Their typical
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colouring
ranges from reddish-brown to
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grey-brown
with the
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cream-coloured
underside.

Deer
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live
in lots of
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different
places in the world including Asia, Europe, North America, and South America. They don’t
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live
in
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other
continents
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because
of their extreme weather. They
usually
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live
in or close to forests in
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small
groups, called herds, with
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other
deer.
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Some
Deer
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sometimes
even
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make
their
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own
beds out of plants!
Anyway
, I like deer for a number of reasons,
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but
the main reason,
of course
, is their sheer speed.

Anyway
, deer are my
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favourite
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animal
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because
they
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look
so
distinctly
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beautiful
with
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some
of their unique features. They are
also
my
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favourite
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animal
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because
they are never violent
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around
us human, or for that matter, with any
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other
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animals
! In fact, they are
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very
social, with one group of them watching over another,
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but
shy and
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very
wary creatures, features which
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make
them
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look
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very
“adorable”.
Finally
, deer are my
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favourite
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animal
also
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because
they are
strictly
“vegetarian”, eating grass and plants that are
mostly
redundant, and
thus
helping maintain
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some
kind of ecological balance
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around
us.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
35Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe your favourite animal. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
757 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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