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Describe a river or a sea you have visited. v.1

Describe a river or a sea you have visited. v. 1
Describe a river or a sea you have visited. You should say: where the river/sea was what things you did there who was with you, and why you would recommend the place. and explain why you liked this particular place. Follow-up Questions: What are the differences between a road trip and a boat trip? What is the importance of rivers in your country?   Model Answer 1: Visiting a river site is one of my most favourite things to do during the summertime, and if I am visiting a calm river, as opposed to the “violent” ones, that’s even better. Today, I would like to talk about one such calm river that I visited about a couple of years ago. The river, I visited, was located about 50 kilometres away from my hometown in the countryside. It was a public place, so anybody could visit the beautiful river site. In fact, I would say that it is one of the most beautiful and scenic river sites, as well as one of the longest rivers in my country. Originally, starting its journey from one of our neighbouring countries, the river has left its traces of sediments on both sides of the sandy river while passing through a number of cities and regions of my country. Anyway, the side, which I was visiting with a few of my friends during the summertime couple of years ago, was protected by brick-built embankments. There were a number of restaurants and café on the riverside in order to provide refreshment facilities for its visitors. There were also many beautiful trees on the riverside which offered enough sitting arrangement for a significant number of visitors. Anyway, after arriving at the riverside, we first rented a large machine-operated boat to ride along the river water. After that, we also walked on the sandy bank of the river before resting at a café and enjoying some delicious snacks. By the way, I would recommend this place for others to visit because this could offer them a great escape from the busy city life. Anyway, I liked this particular river site because it had all the ingredients to make me feel very closed to Mother Nature. I also liked this place because I didn’t have to spend a fortune in order to enjoy the beautiful nature. Finally, I liked it also because it allowed me an opportunity to spend some quality time with some of my best friends.
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Describe
a
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river
or a sea you have visited. You should say: where the river/sea was what things you did there who was with you, and why you would recommend the
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place
.
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and
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explain
why you liked this particular
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place
. Follow-up Questions: What are the differences between a road trip and a boat trip? What is the importance of
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rivers
in your country?
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Model Answer 1:

Visiting a
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river
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site
is one of my most
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favourite
things to do during the
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summertime
, and if I am visiting a calm
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river
, as opposed to the “violent” ones, that’s even better.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such calm
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river
that I visited about a couple of years ago.

The
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river
, I visited,
was located
about 50
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kilometres
away from my hometown in the countryside. It was a public
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place
,
so
anybody could visit the
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beautiful
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river
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site
. In fact, I would say that it is one of the most
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beautiful
and scenic
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river
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sites
, as
well
as one of the longest
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rivers
in my country.
Originally
, starting its journey from one of our
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neighbouring
countries, the
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river
has
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left
its traces of sediments on both sides of the sandy
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river
while passing through a number of cities and regions of my country.

Anyway
, the side, which I was visiting with a few of my friends during the
Consider using "summer".
summertime
couple of years ago,
was protected
by brick-built embankments. There were a number of restaurants and café on the riverside in order to provide refreshment facilities for its visitors. There were
also
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many
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beautiful
trees on the riverside which offered
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enough
sitting arrangement for a significant number of visitors.
Anyway
, after arriving at the riverside, we
first
rented a large machine-operated boat to ride along the
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river
water. After that, we
also
walked on the sandy bank of the
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river
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before
resting at a café and enjoying
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some
delicious snacks. By the way, I would recommend this
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place
for others to visit
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because
this could offer them a great escape from the busy city life.

Anyway
, I liked this particular
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river
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site
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because
it had all the ingredients to
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make
me feel
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very
closed to Mother Nature. I
also
liked this
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place
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because
I didn’t
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have to
spend a fortune in order to enjoy the
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beautiful
nature.
Finally
, I liked it
also
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because
it
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allowed
me an opportunity to spend
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some
quality time with
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some
of my best friends.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a river or a sea you have visited. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
409 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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