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Describe one of your neighbours. v.1

Describe one of your neighbours. v. 1
Describe one of your neighbours. You should say:  when you two became neighbours  how often you meet him/her  whether your neighbour is a good person and explain why you like/ dislike this neighbour. Follow-up Questions:  What is the difference between neighbours and friends?  How do you think of the relationship in the city?  How to improve the neighbourhood?   Model Answer 1: I am not too sure that I would be able to describe a person, be him a neighbour or some distant relatives, in an objective manner, mostly because we are “born” to be biased one way or another. However, since this cue card topic is asking me to do just that, I will go ahead and stick to the task as best as I can. His name is “Lenin Gafur”. We became neighbours when he moved to my neighbourhood about a few years ago from another city for professional reason. Incidentally, I met him on the same day when he was moving his furniture and belonging to his new flat. He seemed like an easy-going fellow, who didn’t like to talk too much, even though he talked to me with a smile as long as the conversation had continued. Lenin Gafur is about the same age as me, but he looks a bit too old for a 32 years old person.   He wears looking glasses and likes to wear traditional dresses always. My neighbour is single and lives in a 2 bedroom flat which is about a couple of blocks from my own residence. He seems to be like a very busy person with his works as he returns to his residence pretty late almost every night, even though I manage to meet him every week at a commonplace of worship. Being a “Senior Nurse” by profession, Lenin has a habit of asking all people, people he meets, about their detail health situation. I have even seen him providing necessary health tips to people around him whenever he gets an opportunity. I think that he is a good person for the most part except that he can get cranky if he hears any noise around his residence. Anyway, I think that I like my neighbour, mostly because he doesn’t poke his nose into the business of other people unnecessarily. I like him also because he seems to be a very hard-working person. Finally, I also like him because he is mild-mannered and always speaks with a smiley face.
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Describe
one of your
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neighbours
. You should say:
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when you two became
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neighbours
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how
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often
you
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meet
him/her
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whether your
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neighbour
is a
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good
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person
and
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explain
why you like/ dislike this
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neighbour
.

Follow-up Questions:
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What is the difference between
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neighbours
and friends?  How do you
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think
of the relationship in the city?  How to
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improve
the
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neighbourhood
?
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Model Answer 1:

I am not
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too sure
that I would be able to
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describe
a
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person
, be him a
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neighbour
or
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some
distant relatives,
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in an objective manner
,
mostly
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because
we are “born” to
be biased
one way or another.
However
, since this cue card topic is asking me to do
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just
that, I will go ahead and stick to the task as
Did you mean "good"?
best
as I can.

His name is “Lenin
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Gafur
”. We became
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neighbours
when he
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moved
to my
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neighbourhood
about a few years ago from another city for professional reason.
Incidentally
, I met him on the same day when he was moving his furniture and belonging to his new flat. He seemed like an easy-going fellow, who didn’t like to talk too much,
even though
he talked to me with a smile as long as the conversation had continued.

Lenin
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Gafur
is about the same age as me,
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but
he looks a bit too
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old
for a 32 years
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old
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person
.
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He wears looking glasses and likes to wear traditional dresses always. My
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neighbour
is single and
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lives
in a
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2 bedroom
flat which is about a couple of blocks from my
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own
residence. He seems to be like a
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very
busy
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person
with his works as he returns to his residence pretty late almost every night,
even though
I manage to
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meet
him every week at a commonplace of worship.

Being a “Senior Nurse” by profession, Lenin has a habit of asking all
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people
,
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people
he meets, about their detail health situation. I have even
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seen
him providing necessary health tips to
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people
around him whenever he
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gets
an opportunity. I
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think
that he is a
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good
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person
for the most part
except that he can
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get
cranky if he hears any noise around his residence.

Anyway
, I
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think
that I like my
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neighbour
,
mostly
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because
he doesn’t poke his nose into the business of other
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people
unnecessarily
. I like him
also
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because
he seems to be a
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very
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hard
-working
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person
.
Finally
, I
also
like him
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because
he is mild-mannered and always speaks with a smiley face.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe one of your neighbours. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
411 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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