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Describe any public event (e. g. carnival, sports event, religious event, etc. ) that you attended. v.1

Describe any public event (e. g. carnival, sports event, religious event, etc. ) that you attended. v. 1
Describe any public event (e. g. carnival, sports event, religious event, etc. ) that you attended. You should say: what the event was when you attended it with whom you went there and describe what you did at the event.   Model Answer 1: This is an interesting topic for me because I have attended several public events before, and I must say that I have enjoyed almost all of them. So, today, I would like to talk about an event, which I attended about 6 years ago, in order to raise some funds for the flood victims of my country. As I just mentioned earlier, it was a fundraising event, and I really felt very passionate about it as I also wanted to become a part of the noble effort. In fact, a significant part of my country was flooded in that year because of heavy monsoon rain as well as for some other man-made factors. Anyway, so when some of my friends asked me to attend the fundraising event, I immediately agreed. Initially, I didn’t think that so many people would be attending the event because of significant damage in the road and transportation system of that part of my country, where I lived, but I was proved to be wrong because thousands of people attended the event with all kinds of material helps and support. By the way, the organizers of the event held a public concert, which included some of the famous bands and singers of my country, and theatrical display of the sufferings and miseries of the people who were badly affected by the flood. At the event, a keynote speaker, who also happened to be a prominent social worker and member of parliament of my country, gave us an account of damage and destruction in my country, caused by one of the devastating floods in the history of my country. Anyway, as for what I did at the event, I already collected some dry food and clothes, before coming to the event, so that the people, in charge of collecting the relief funds there, could distribute them among the affected people. Besides, since there were not enough volunteer there to take care of such a large gathering, I helped the event organizers to clean up the mess, like trash and food wastes, after it was over.     Sample Answer 2: 2-3 years ago, I attended a sports event which was open to the public and I would like to talk about it. It was probably the month of January and I was a student at the university at that time. I heard that the Argentina Football team would come to our country and would play a football match against our football team. I was a fan of this football team (. . . mention any other team name which you like. . . ) and wanted to enjoy the football match. This was one of the most enjoyable football tournament I have seen live. Though I liked the Argentine team, I supported our team from the very beginning. I had to collect the ticket 30 days prior to the game day and on the day I went to the national stadium with some of my friends. The game started in the 3. 30 pm and I noticed there were more than 20 thousand spectators in the stadium. I attended the game with 4 of my friends plus roommates who were very close to me. We sat in the front row of the north gallery and we enjoyed the whole game. We shouted when our team did well, we showed our dismay when they performed badly. One of our friends took the national flag and he bore it during the game. We left the stadium in the evening and even though our team was defeated by the powerful Argentine team, we were happy that our team competed them well and performed quite good.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a festival you attended. Describe one of the major festivals in your country. Describe a sports event you have participated in. Describe a game or sports event you have watched. Describe a religious festival in your country. Describe a public event you recently enjoyed.
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Describe
any
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public
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event
(
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e. g.
carnival,
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sports
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event
, religious
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event
, etc.
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)
that you
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attended
. You should say: what the
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event
was when you
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attended
it with whom you went there and
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describe
what you did at the
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.
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Model Answer 1:

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because
I have
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attended
several
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public
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events
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before
, and I
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must
say that I have enjoyed almost all of them.
So
,
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today
, I would like to
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talk
about an
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event
, which I
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attended
about 6 years ago, in order to raise
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some
funds for the flood victims of my country.

As I
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just
mentioned earlier, it was a fundraising
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event
, and I
really
felt
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very
passionate about it as I
also
wanted to become a part of the noble effort. In fact, a significant part of my
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country
was flooded
in that year
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because
of heavy monsoon rain as
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well
as for
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some
other
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man
-made factors.
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,
so
when
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some
of my
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friends
asked me to attend the fundraising
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event
, I immediately
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agreed
.

Initially
, I didn’t
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think
that
so
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many
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people
would be attending the
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event
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because
of significant damage in the road and transportation system of that part of my
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country
, where I
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lived
,
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but
I
was proved
to be
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wrong
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because
thousands of
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people
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attended
the
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event
with all kinds of material
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helps
and support. By the way, the organizers of the
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event
held a
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public
concert, which included
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some of the
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famous
bands and singers of my
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country
, and theatrical display of the sufferings and miseries of the
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people
who were
badly
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affected
by the flood. At the
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event
, a keynote speaker, who
also
happened to be a prominent social worker and member of parliament of my
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country
, gave us an account of damage and destruction in my
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country
, caused by one of the devastating floods in the history of my country.

Anyway
, as for what I did at the
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event
, I already collected
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some
dry food and clothes,
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before
coming to the
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event
,
so
that the
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people
, in charge of collecting the relief funds there, could distribute them among the
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affected
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people
.
Besides
, since there were not
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enough
volunteer there to take care of such a large gathering, I
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helped
the
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event
organizers to clean up the mess, like trash and food wastes, after it was over.
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Sample Answer 2:

2-3 years ago, I
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attended
a
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sports
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event
which was open to the
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public
and I would like to
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talk
about it. It was
probably
the month of
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January and
I was a student at the university at that time. I heard that the Argentina
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Football
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team
would
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come
to our
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country
and would play a
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football
match against our
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football
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team
. I was a fan of this
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football
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team
(.
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.
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.
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mention
any other
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team
name which you like.
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.
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.
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)
and wanted to enjoy the
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football
match. This was one of the most enjoyable
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football
tournament I have
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seen
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live
. Though I liked the Argentine
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team
, I supported our
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team
from the
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very
beginning. I had to collect the ticket 30 days prior to the game day and on the day I went to the national stadium with
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some
of my
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friends
. The game
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started
in the 3. 30 pm and I noticed there were more than 20 thousand spectators in the stadium. I
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attended
the game with 4 of my
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friends
plus roommates who were
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very
close to me. We sat in the front row of the north
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gallery and
we enjoyed the whole game. We shouted when our
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team
did
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well
, we
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showed
our dismay when they performed
badly
. One of our
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friends
took the national
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flag and
he bore it during the game. We
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left
the stadium in the evening and
even though
our
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team
was defeated
by the powerful Argentine
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team
, we were happy that our
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team
competed them
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well
and performed quite
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good
.
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about this Cue Card would enable you to
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about the following Cue Cards as
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:
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Describe
a festival you
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attended
.
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Describe
one of the major festivals in your
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country
.
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a
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sports
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event
you have participated in.
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Describe
a game or
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sports
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you have
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watched
.
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a religious festival in your
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country
.
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a
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you recently enjoyed.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
86Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe any public event (e. g. carnival, sports event, religious event, etc. ) that you attended. v. 1

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