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Describe a letter you wrote to someone. v.1

Describe a letter you wrote to someone. v. 1
Describe a letter you wrote to someone. You should say: who you wrote this letter to what you wrote about when it was and explain why writing this letter was important to you.   Model Answer 1: These days, the habit of writing a letter with pen and notepad is almost gone, courtesy of the invention of the computer, the internet technology and email, but there was a time when people actually considered letter-writing habit as some form of art by adopting different kinds of writing styles. In fact, I also took this letter-writing habit with pen and paper rather seriously as a high school student before more than 15 years when I didn’t have any access to computer or internet. Today, I would like to talk about one such letter which I wrote to my grandfather when I just got admitted to one of the prestigious high schools in my country. By the way, if I remember it correctly, by then, I had just started to like the idea of writing a letter to people, I knew. So, quite naturally, I was yet to fully capture the art of organizing my thoughts and express them in a coherent manner. But that didn’t prevent me to write a letter to my grandfather to tell him how I liked my new school, and how I was struggling to make new friends at a new school. The letter also included subjects like which teachers were nice to me, and which teachers were tough. I also didn’t forget to mention about the great "tiffin", provided by the school, which I really enjoyed eating, as well as the large playing ground where my senior brothers from school used to play football. However, the story of this letter writing thing wouldn’t be complete if I didn’t mention that I had actually wasted almost half of my notepad, which contained about 30 pages, to write that precious letter. Anyway, writing this letter was important to me, mainly because I was missing my grandfather, who loved me so much, after moving to a place boarding school. Besides, it also offered me an opportunity for the first time to learn how to express my thoughts properly in writing unlike the childish way of writing in the past.   Sample Answer 2: With the convenient of internet and email facility, we hardly write hand-written letters but I did not have the internet facility until I become 14 years old. I was admitted to a renowned school when I was 10 years old and had to stay at the school boarding during my study there. I was sad to leave my parents and siblings but had no other choice other than staying at the boarding as the school did not accept stay-home students. After I left my home and start my life in school boarding, I missed my family very much. I would like to describe a letter that I wrote to my mother while my staying at the boarding.   I wrote the letter to my mother and I wrote to let her know that I was fine and not to worry about me. I also wrote how much I was missing them and how things were going on in my school life. I also asked how my father was doing, if he had mentioned me, what my brother and sister are doing these days and if they are missing me. I remember asking a lot of questions in my letter and told all the positive things about my new life so that my mother does not worry too much. I wrote about my teachers, new classmates and how welcoming they are. I mentioned that I like the foods they are serving and I am doing my study attentively. That was a letter written by a little boy (. . mention girl if you are a girl…) to his (…her. . ) mother to let her know that he (. . she…) was fine and asked if they were missing him (…her. . ) or not.   To me, this was an important letter as this was the first time I wrote to my mother. I wrote to let her know that I love them very much and was missing them. I was a bit lonely at that time and the letter was a form of conversation and to keep in touch with my dearest mother and other family members.     Part 3 – Two-way discussion: Q. What is the difference between letter and e-mail? Q. Do you often keep diaries? Q. What is the difference between diary and letter? Q. What is the difference in the past and at the present as regards communications? Q. What is the role of letter 10 years ago and at present? Q. Would post office disappear 20 years later? Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a letter or email you sent to someone recently. Describe a news item you gave to someone recently. Describe a piece of good news you gave to someone.
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Describe
a
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letter
you
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wrote
to
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someone
. You should say: who you
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wrote
this
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letter
to what you
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wrote
about when it was and
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explain
why
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writing
this
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letter
was
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important
to you.
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Model Answer 1:

These days, the habit of
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writing
a
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letter
with pen and notepad is almost gone, courtesy of the invention of the computer, the internet technology and email,
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but
there was a
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time
when
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people
actually
considered letter-writing habit as
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some
form of art by adopting
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different
kinds of
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writing
styles. In fact, I
also
took this letter-writing habit with pen and paper
rather
seriously
as a high
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school
student
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before
more than 15 years when I didn’t have any access to computer or internet.

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Today
, I would like to talk about one such
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letter
which I
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wrote
to my grandfather when I
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just
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got
admitted to one of the prestigious high
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schools
in my country. By the way, if I remember it
correctly
, by then, I had
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just
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started
to like the
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idea
of
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writing
a
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letter
to
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people
, I knew.
So
, quite
naturally
, I was
yet
to
fully
capture the art of organizing my thoughts and express them
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in a coherent manner
.

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But
that didn’t
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prevent
me to write a
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letter
to my grandfather to
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tell
him how I liked my
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new
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school
, and how I was struggling to
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make
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new
friends at a
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new
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school
. The
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letter
also
included subjects like which teachers were nice to me, and which teachers were tough. I
also
didn’t forget to
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mention about the
great
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"
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tiffin
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"
, provided by the
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school
, which I
really
enjoyed eating, as
well
as the large playing ground where my senior brothers from
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school
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used
to play football.
However
, the story of this
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letter
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writing
thing wouldn’t be complete if I didn’t mention that I had
actually
wasted almost half of my notepad, which contained about 30 pages, to write that precious letter.

Anyway
,
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writing
this
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letter
was
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important
to me,
mainly
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because
I was
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missing
my grandfather, who
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loved
me
so
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much
, after moving to a place
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boarding
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school
.
Besides
, it
also
offered me an opportunity for the
first
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time
to learn how to express my thoughts
properly
in
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writing
unlike the childish way of
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writing
in the past.
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Sample Answer 2:

With
The phrase 'the convenient of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the convenient of
internet and email facility, we hardly write hand-written
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letters
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but
I did not have the internet facility until I become 14 years
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old
. I
was admitted
to a renowned
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school
when I was 10 years
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old
and had to stay at the
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school
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boarding
during my study there. I was sad to
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leave
my parents and siblings
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but
had no other choice other than staying at the
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boarding
as the
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school
did not accept stay-home students. After I
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left
my home and
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start
my life in
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school
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boarding
, I missed my family
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very
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much
. I would like to
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describe
a
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letter
that I
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wrote
to my
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mother
while my staying at the
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boarding
.
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I
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wrote
the
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letter
to my
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mother
and I
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wrote
to
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let
her know that I was fine and not to worry about me.
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I
also
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wrote
how
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much
I was
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missing
them and how things were going on in my
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school
life.
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I
also
asked how my father was doing, if he had mentioned me, what my brother and sister are doing these days and if they are
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missing
me.
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I
remember asking
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a lot of
questions in my
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letter
and
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told
all the
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positive
things about my
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new
life
so
that my
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mother
does not worry too much.

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I
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wrote
about my teachers,
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new
classmates and how welcoming they are.
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I
mentioned that I like the foods they are
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
serving and
I am doing my study
attentively
. That was a
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letter
written by a
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little
boy (.
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.
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mention
girl if you are a girl…) to his (…her.
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.
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)
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mother
to
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let
her know that he (.
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.
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she
…) was fine and asked if they were
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missing
him (…her.
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.
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)
or not.
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To me, this was an
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important
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letter
as this was the
first
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time
I
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wrote
to my
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mother
. I
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wrote
to
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let
her know that I
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love
them
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very
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much
and was
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missing
them. I was a bit lonely at that
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time
and the
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letter
was a form of conversation and to
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keep
in touch with my dearest
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mother
and other family members.
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Part 3
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–
Two-way discussion: Q. What is the difference between
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letter
and e-mail? Q. Do you
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often
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keep
diaries? Q. What is the difference between diary and
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letter
?
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Q
. What is the difference in the past and at the present as regards communications?
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Q
. What is the role of
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letter
10 years ago and at present?
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Q
. Would post office disappear 20 years later?

Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
letter
or email you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to
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someone
recently.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
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news
item you gave to
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someone
recently.
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Describe
a piece of
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good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
you gave to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
someone
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
92Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29Mistakes
One who speaks only one language is one person, but one who speaks two languages is two people.
Turkish proverb

IELTS speaking Describe a letter you wrote to someone. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
863 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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