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Describe a part of your city that is changing. v.1

Describe a part of your city that is changing. v. 1
Describe a part of your city that is changing. You should say: which part of the city it is how it is changing why it is changing and explain how you feel about the changes. Follow-up Questions: - Are the changes in the cities good or bad? - How do people react to them? - Which facilities should the government make available for people? - How do you and your friends spend time? - What are the differences between the way people were spending time in the past and now? - Should a government consider local people's opinion when deciding on changes in the city? - Should people know about everything the government is planning?   Model Answer 1: In today’s world, all cities go through some sort of changes and urbanization on a regular basis, primarily in order to accommodate the needs of the ever-increasing population who flock into the city. The city, in which I live, is no exception, as it also is going through some visible changes. These changes are visible more or less in all parts of the cities, but it is certainly more visible at the centre part of the city because this is where most of the financial and commercial activities take place. But the problem is, this centre part of the city has become so congested because of too many building, businesses and stores that getting through to it becomes very much like wrestling. The traffic situation becomes even worse during office hours. In order to deal with this rather unbearable and unpleasant situation at one of the major cities of my country, the local government has taken up projects to grow vertically instead of horizontally. In other words, some buildings, which are covering large areas, are being demolished in order to replace with high rise buildings. Apparently, this particular action would leave more empty space in the area for the city dwellers to move more freely and easily. Another change, that is being visible at the city centre, is that new but wider roads are being paved with concrete to provide easy access to the people who visit it to meet their daily needs. Needless to say, more and more new businesses and shops with popular brand names are making their grand entrance into this place to meet the increasing demands of its residents. Anyway, I feel really good about these changes and activities because it will apparently give a new and better look to our city. Besides, all these changes and activities will create more employment opportunities for the residents of my city where the unemployment rate is comparatively higher than the rest of the country. Finally, I like these changes, because it will benefit us and the consumers in large, as there would be more healthy competitions among the businesses.   Sample Answer 2: I have been living in (. . say your city name. . . ) for the last 15 years and know almost every street of this city. The city I knew the first time I came here is far more different than the city has evolved now. The north part of the city has changed more than any part of the city and still changing. When I first visited this part of the city, it was mostly an open space that had lots of fields, trees and a very minimum number of dwellers. There were hardly any high rising building and mostly farmers and fishers lived there. The fields, lakes and people’s way of living used to give an impression of urban life. But this is no longer applicable for this part of the city. I went to that part of the city a few days back after a long time and was very surprised to notice the changes which occurred there and still happening. The need for industrialisation, to accommodate the increasing population and for the business expansion, the part has changed dramatically. The open spaces, fields, and lakes have reduced significantly and one can notice the overwhelming number of factories, industries and offices there. This place no longer gives the urban area impression rather it gives a neo-industrial area impression. The numbers of roads and cars have increased, the farmers and fishers have moved to the farther north side of the city and 2 new colleges and universities have been built there. I feel the necessity of the new industries and offices and their importance for a country, but the way this part of the city has been transformed is really shocking. There could have been an alternative place for industries and the city administrators and authorities could have saved the natural part of the city. Already the city is overpopulated and because of that we are facing lots of problems, the changes of this part of the city have caused to accommodate more people and have destroyed the natural habitat of wild lives. I feel sad to notice the changes happening in this part of the city.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a change you have witnessed in your city. Describe a problem about your city that bothers you. Describe a commercial or industrial area in your city. Describe a busy area of your hometown. Describe a part of your city which is getting crowded. Describe a part of your city where you once lived in.
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Describe
a
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part
of your city
that is
changing. You should say: which
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part
of the city it is how it is changing why it is changing and
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explain
how you
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feel
about the
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changes
. Follow-up Questions:

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Are the
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changes
in the
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cities
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good
or
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bad
?

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How do
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people
react to them?

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Which facilities should the
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government
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make
available for
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people
?

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How do you and your friends spend time?

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-
What are the differences between the way
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people
were spending
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time
in the past and
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now
?

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-
Should a
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government
consider local
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people
's opinion when deciding on
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changes
in the city?

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-
Should
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people
know about everything the
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government
is planning?
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Model Answer 1:

In
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today
’s world, all
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cities
go through
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some
sort of
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changes
and urbanization on a regular basis,
primarily
in order to accommodate the needs of the ever-increasing population who flock into the city. The city, in which I
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live
, is no exception, as it
also
is going through
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some
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visible
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changes
.

These
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changes
are
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visible
more or less in all
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parts
of the
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cities
,
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but
it is
certainly
more
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visible
at the
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centre
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part
of the city
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because
this is where most of the financial and commercial activities take
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place
.
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But
the problem is, this
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centre
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part
of the city has become
so
congested
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because
of too
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many
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building
,
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businesses
and stores that getting through to it becomes
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very
much like wrestling.

The traffic situation becomes even worse during office hours. In order to deal with this
rather
unbearable and unpleasant situation at one of the major
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cities
of my country, the local
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government
has taken up projects to grow
vertically
instead
of
horizontally
.
In other words
,
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some
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buildings
, which are covering large
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areas
, are
being demolished
in order to replace with high rise
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buildings
.
Apparently
, this particular action would
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leave
more empty space in the
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area
for the city dwellers to
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move
more
freely
and
easily
. Another
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change
,
that is
being
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visible
at the city
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centre
, is that
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new
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but
wider roads are
being paved
with concrete to provide easy access to the
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people
who visit it to
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meet
their daily needs.
Needless to say
, more and more
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new
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businesses
and shops with popular brand names are making their grand entrance into this
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place
to
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meet
the increasing demands of its residents.

Anyway
, I
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feel
really
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good
about these
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changes
and activities
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because
it will
apparently
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give
a
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new
and better look to our city.
Besides
, all these
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changes
and activities will create more employment opportunities for the residents of my city where the unemployment rate is
comparatively
higher than the rest of the country.
Finally
, I like these
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changes
,
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because
it will benefit us and the consumers in large, as there would be more healthy competitions among the
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businesses
.
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Sample Answer 2:

I have been living in (.
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.
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say
your city name.
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.
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.
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)
for the last 15 years and know almost every street of this city. The city I knew the
first
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time
I came here is far more
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different
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than
the city has evolved
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now
. The north
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part
of the city has
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changed
more than any
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part
of the city and
still
changing.

When I
first
visited this
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part
of the city, it was
mostly
an open space that had lots of fields, trees and a
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very
minimum number of dwellers. There were hardly any high rising
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building
and
mostly
farmers and fishers
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lived
there. The fields, lakes and
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people’s
way of living
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used
to
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give
an impression of urban life.
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But
this is no longer applicable for this
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part
of the city. I went to that
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part
of the city a few days back after a long
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time
and was
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very
surprised to notice the
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changes
which occurred there and
still
happening.

The need for
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industrialisation
, to accommodate the increasing population and for the
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business
expansion, the
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part
has
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changed
dramatically
. The open spaces, fields, and lakes have
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reduced
significantly
and one can notice the overwhelming number of factories, industries and offices there. This
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place
no longer
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gives
the urban
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area
impression
rather
it
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gives
a
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neo-industrial
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area
impression. The numbers of roads and cars have increased, the farmers and fishers have
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moved
to the farther north side of the city and 2
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new
colleges and universities have
been built
there.

I
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feel
the necessity of the
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new
industries and offices and their importance for a country,
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but
the way this
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part
of the city has
been transformed
is
really
shocking. There could have been an alternative
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place
for industries and the city administrators and authorities could have saved the natural
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part
of the city. Already the city
is overpopulated
and
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because
of that we are facing lots of problems, the
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changes
of this
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part
of the city have caused to accommodate more
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people
and have
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destroyed
the natural habitat of wild
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lives
. I
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feel
sad to notice the
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changes
happening in this
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part
of the city.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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change
you have witnessed in your city.
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Describe
a problem about your city that bothers you.
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Describe
a commercial or industrial
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area
in your city.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a busy
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area
of your hometown.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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part
of your city which is getting crowded.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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part
of your city where you once
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lived
in.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
91Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a part of your city that is changing. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
16 paragraphs
916 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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