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Describe a leader or a politician whom you admire. v.1

Describe a leader or a politician whom you admire. v. 1
Describe a leader or a politician whom you admire. You should say: who he/she is/was what so appealing is about him/her what type of leader or politician he/she is/was and explain why do you admire him /her.   Model Answer 1: If we ask ourselves as to how many leaders or politicians in this world have managed to become prime minister of a country at the age of 91 again after serving in the same capacity as a prime minister for about 22 years in the past? Well, the answer is, probably only one. His name is Dr. Mahathir Mohammad, the sitting prime minister of Malaysia, who has made it almost a habit to defeat his political opponent at ease. Otherwise, how possibly an old person of his age can make such a strong comeback in politics after remaining politically inactive, apart from criticizing his successor every once in a while, for almost 15 years! What’s the secret behind such an enviable accomplishment? Well, there could be many reasons, one could possibly guess for that, but one thing, for sure, is certain that he is from a completely different breed of politicians who is able to show his guts and grits in the face of extreme adversity unlike anybody else. In fact, very few leaders in this world have managed to remain calm and lead on to transform a third world country into a role model of economic success for all the countries around the world. Besides, as a politician of simple nature, who always likes to put the interest of his people ahead of everything else, one of the most appealing things about this great political leader is that he is never afraid to voice out his opposition to all kinds of oppression. Anyway, I admire this person because of his visionary leadership and statesmanship who completely changed the face of Malaysia from a third world country to a regional economic powerhouse within just 22 years. Some people may passionately call him a “benevolent dictator”, but his intention to listen to his people carefully certainly makes a very admirable person, not only among his own people but also to people from the rest of the world. Finally, I admire him also because he never likes to give up in achieving his dream for his nation.   Sample Answer 2: The leader I really like and admire is (…say the name of a politician or a leader you know about…) who had great contributions to make our country a better place. He was a mainstream politician for a long and was involved in active politics from his school life. He had a great contribution to our freedom fighting as well as in several other activities for the betterment of our nation. He lived from 1940 till 2000 and his death was a great loss for the nation.   He was an honest and brave politician which has become rare in present days. He never compromised with the evil power of politics and foreign powers. He had risked his life several times and with his bravery, he had bought some advantageous changes in the country. He was an idol for the nations and for his honesty and bravery he is a well-known figure in the world.   He was an active member of the (. . . say a political party name…) and never longed for power or fame. He could have easily gained a powerful position in the country but he had always led a simple and yet exemplary life.   I admire him for his unmatched contribution to the country and for the nation. We need many leaders like him and I regret the fact that we have only very few leaders like him in our country. He was an ideal leader who has put his personal benefits away while he thought for the benefits of the country and the nation.
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whom you
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. You should say:
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who
he/she is/was what
so
appealing is about him/her what type of
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or
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he/she is/was and
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why do you
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Model Answer 1:

If we ask ourselves as to how
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many
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or
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in this
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have managed to become prime minister of a
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country
at the age of 91 again after serving in the same capacity as a prime minister for about 22 years in the past?
Well
, the answer is,
probably
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only
one.

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Mahathir
Mohammad, the sitting prime minister of Malaysia,
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who
has made it almost a habit to defeat his political opponent at
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ease
.
Otherwise
, how
possibly
an
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old
person of his age can
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such a strong comeback in politics after remaining
politically
inactive, apart from criticizing his successor every once in a while, for almost 15 years! What’s the secret behind such an enviable accomplishment?

Well
, there could be
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reasons, one could
possibly
guess for that,
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one thing, for sure, is certain that he is from a completely
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different
breed of
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politicians
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who
is able to
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show
his guts and grits in the face of extreme adversity unlike anybody else. In fact,
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very
few
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leaders
in this
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world
have managed to remain calm and lead on to transform a third
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world
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country
into a role model of economic success for all the
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countries
around the
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world
.
Besides
, as a
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of simple nature,
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who
always
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likes
to put the interest of his
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people
ahead of everything else, one of the most appealing things about this
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great
political
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leader
is that he is never afraid to voice out his opposition to all kinds of oppression.

Anyway
, I
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admire
this person
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because
of his visionary leadership and statesmanship
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who
completely
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changed
the face of Malaysia from a third
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world
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country
to a regional economic powerhouse within
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just
22 years.
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Some
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people
may
passionately
call him a “benevolent dictator”,
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but
his intention to listen to his
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people
carefully
certainly
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makes
a
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very
admirable person, not
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only
among his
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own
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people
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but
also
to
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people
from the rest of the
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world
.
Finally
, I
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admire
him
also
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because
he never
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likes
to give up in achieving his dream for his
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nation
.
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Sample Answer 2:

The
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I
really
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like
and
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is (…say the name of a
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politician
or a
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leader
you know
about…)
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who
had
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great
contributions to
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make
our
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a better place. He was a mainstream
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politician
for a long and
was involved
in active politics from his school life. He had a
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great
contribution to our freedom fighting as
well
as in several other activities for the betterment of our
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nation
.
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He
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lived
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from 1940 till 2000
and his death was a
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great
loss for the
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nation
.
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He
was an honest and brave
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which has become rare in present days.
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He
never compromised with the evil power of politics and foreign powers.
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He
had risked his life several times and with his bravery, he had
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bought
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some
advantageous
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changes
in the
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country
.
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He
was an idol for the
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nations
and for his honesty and bravery he is a
well
-known figure in the
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world
.
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He
was an active member of the (.
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a political party name…) and never longed for power or fame. He could have
easily
gained a powerful position in the
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country
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but
he had always led a simple and
yet
exemplary life.
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I
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admire
him for his unmatched contribution to the
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country
and for the
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nation
. We need
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many
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leaders
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like
him and I regret the fact that we have
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few
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like
him in our
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. He was an ideal
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leader
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who
has put his personal benefits away while he
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thought
for the benefits of the
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country
and the
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nation
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a leader or a politician whom you admire. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
652 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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