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Describe a story that people in your country know well. v.1

Describe a story that people in your country know well. v. 1
Describe a story that people in your country know well. You should say: what the story is who told you the story why you remember that story and explain why this is a well-known story in your country.   Model Answer 1: If I remember it correctly, I heard many, many stories, which were/are well-known in my country for a long period of time, from my grandparents and the other elderly people around me.   Needless to say, I liked all those stories because virtually all of them had the elements of surprise, drama and suspense one way or another. Here is just one such story which was shared with me by my maternal grandmother, when I was a little child. The story is entitled as “Mansamangal” (the virtue of Mansa, a Hindu Goddess) which was written to attribute glory and honour to Manasa, a Hindu goddess of snakes. However, it has become renowned for the love story between Behula (the wife) and Lakhindar (her husband). The epic story goes on to tell how the father of Lakhindar upsets the goddess Manasa by refusing to worship her. She then becomes very angry and bites Lakhindar on his wedding night in order to exact her revenge. Because of the deadly bite, Lakhindar dies, but Behula (the wife) just refuses to give up on her husband and takes his lifeless body on a boat and sails off. After appeasing the goddess of snakes and asking for forgiveness from her, Lakhindar is eventually brought back to life again. Behula is often said to represent the essence of Bengali women from the Indian subcontinent, who never fail to demonstrate their extreme courage and love for their husbands. By the way, I remember the story because every time, I used to behave like an unruly boy or didn’t want to go to bed, my grandmother used to remind me about the bad snakes to force me to go to bed. Anyway, this story is well-known in my country, mainly because it carries some religious connotation. It is also well-known because a very significant number of people in our part of the world still believe in all sorts of superstitions. Finally, this has remained a very well-known story in my country because such stories tell us a lot about inhabitants of the past such as their principles, customs and reasoning on matters.   Model Answer 2: Some of the Aesop's Fables are very well-known in our country and many people tell these stories without even knowing the origin of those stories. Some of the stories have been a little bit modified with the context and people of our country and some of them remain intact. We have even read some of Aesop’ stories in our textbook and almost all of the citizens of our country know those stories.   One such well-known story from Aesop is the story of ‘The Hare & the Tortoise’ that people often tell others as a piece of advice and to the child to entertain and advise them. I heard this story from my grandfather for the first time and it was almost 20 years ago. Later on, I read this story in my textbook in grade 4.   That was an interesting story that has a good moral and lesson. The storytelling of my grandfather was amazing and he made this story much more appealing and as I have read it in my textbook, I still remember this story. The story starts with a hare and a tortoise. The hare often made fun of the tortoise for being very slow and mocked him all the time. The hare mocked the tortoise if he ever reaches to any place at all with this unbelievably slow speed. A competition was arranged they both started their race when all other animals of the jungle were present to witness this. The hare started to run and soon was out of sight while the tortoise started walking very slowly. After a while, the hare felt it ridiculous to run with a tortoise and decided to take a nap until the tortoise could be seen nearby. The tortoise meanwhile kept going with a slow by the steady pace and after a while passed the place where the hare was in deep sleep. The hare slept peacefully and when he woke up, the tortoise had almost reached the finish line. The hare then ran very swiftly with his best effort but could not overtake the tortoise in time. Thus the tortoise won the race with his steadiness and determination even after being slow.   The story was a great example of teaching children the importance of steadiness and determination and thus has become a very popular story in our country. We often use this story to teach others that do not boast on your ability, the race is not always to the swift, do not make fun of others even if you are superior to him, so not underestimate the ability of others, be persistent on something you do and do not waste time idly when you have a task to finish. Thus this story has become a popular story that bears many morals and lessons.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a story you know well. Describe a bedtime story you have heard. Describe a real story that inspired you. Describe a story you heard from one of your relatives. Describe a story you read in your childhood. Describe a popular story in your country.
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know
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. You should say: what the
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is who
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why you
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that
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and
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well-known
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story
in your
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.
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Model Answer 1:

If I
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correctly
, I heard
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many
,
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stories
, which were/are
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in my
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country
for a long period of
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, from my grandparents and the
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other
elderly
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people
around me.
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Needless to say
, I liked all those
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stories
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because
virtually
all of them had the elements of surprise, drama and suspense one way or another. Here is
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just
one such
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which
was shared
with me by my maternal grandmother, when I was a
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little
child.

The
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story
is entitled
as “
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Mansamangal
” (the virtue of
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Mansa
, a Hindu Goddess) which
was written
to attribute glory and
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honour
to
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Manasa
, a Hindu goddess of snakes.
However
, it has
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become
renowned for the
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love
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story
between
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Behula
(the wife) and
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Lakhindar
(her husband).

The epic
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goes on to
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tell
how the father of
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Lakhindar
upsets the goddess
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Manasa
by refusing to worship her. She then
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becomes
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very
angry and bites
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Lakhindar
on his wedding night in order to exact her revenge.
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of the deadly bite,
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Lakhindar
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dies
,
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but
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Behula
(the wife)
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just
refuses to give up on her husband and takes his lifeless body on a boat and sails off. After appeasing the goddess of snakes and asking for forgiveness from her,
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Lakhindar
is
eventually
brought back to life again.
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Behula
is
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often
said to represent the essence of Bengali women from the Indian subcontinent, who never fail to demonstrate their extreme courage and
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love
for their husbands.

By the way, I
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remember
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story
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because
every
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time
, I
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used
to behave like an
unruly
boy or didn’t want to go to bed, my grandmother
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used
to remind me about the
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bad
snakes to force me to go to bed.

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, this
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is
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well-known
in my
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,
mainly
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it carries
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some
religious connotation. It is
also
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a
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significant number of
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people
in our part of the world
still
believe in all sorts of superstitions.
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, this has remained a
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such
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tell
us a lot about inhabitants of the past such as their principles, customs and reasoning on matters.
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Model Answer 2:

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in our
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country
and
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many
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people
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these
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without even knowing the origin of those
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.
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have been a
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little bit
modified with the context and
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of our
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and
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some
of them remain intact. We have even
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read
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some
of Aesop’
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stories
in our textbook and almost
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all of the
citizens of our
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know those
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.
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One such
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from Aesop is the
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of ‘The Hare
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&amp
; the Tortoise’ that
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people
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others as a piece of advice and to the child to entertain and advise them. I heard this
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story
from my grandfather for the
first
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time
and it was almost 20 years ago. Later on, I
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read
this
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story
in my textbook in grade 4.
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story
that has a
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moral and lesson. The storytelling of my grandfather was
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amazing and
he made this
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much more appealing and as I have
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it in my textbook, I
still
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this
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. The
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starts
with a hare and a tortoise.
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hare
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made fun of the tortoise for being
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and mocked him all the
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time
.
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hare mocked the tortoise if he ever reaches to any place at all with this
unbelievably
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slow
speed. A competition
was arranged
they both
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started
their race when all
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animals of the jungle were present to witness this. The hare
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started
to run and
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was out of sight while the tortoise
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walking
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very
slowly
. After a while, the hare felt it ridiculous to run with a tortoise and decided to take a nap until the tortoise could be
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seen
nearby. The tortoise meanwhile
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kept
going with a
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slow
by the steady pace and after a while passed the place where the hare was in deep sleep. The hare slept
peacefully
and when he woke up, the tortoise had almost reached the finish line.
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hare then ran
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very
swiftly
with his best effort
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but
could not overtake the tortoise in
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.
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the tortoise won the race with his steadiness and determination even after being
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.
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The
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story
was a great example of teaching children the importance of steadiness and determination and
thus
has
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become
a
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very
popular
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story
in our
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country
. We
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often
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this
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story
to teach others that do not boast on your ability, the race is not always to the swift, do not
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make
fun of others even if you are superior to him,
so
not underestimate the ability of others, be persistent on something you do and do not waste
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time
idly
when you have a task to finish.
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this
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story
has
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become
a popular
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story
that bears
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many
morals and lessons.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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story
you know
well
.
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Describe
a bedtime
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story
you have heard.
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Describe
a real
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story
that inspired you.
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Describe
a
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story
you heard from one of your relatives.
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Describe
a
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story
you
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read
in your childhood.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a popular
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story
in your
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country
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
101Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a story that people in your country know well. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
941 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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