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Describe a historical period/time you want to know more about. v.1

Describe a historical period/time you want to know more about. v. 1
Describe a historical period/time you want to know more about. You should say: which period it is how you know about this period of history what its importance is in history and explain what you want to know more about this period. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: History has always fascinated me. In fact, it is the honest and objective studies of history that teach us to understand how our world was in the past, how it is now, and how our world will look in the future in the greater scheme of things. But, does that mean that we don’t get to become little biased toward a certain part of the history because how it has changed our entire world for good? No, it sure doesn’t. In fact, the world will probably never witness such a period of time that started with the assassination of Archduke Franz Ferdinand of Austro-Hungarian Empire on 28th June 1914, and ended with the creation of a world body of an intergovernmental organization called “The UN” on October 24, 1945. There is no doubt that this particular period of time is of paramount importance in human history since it was after this turbulent period of time, full of wars and destruction, a “shadow” force, in my opinion, started to “manage” the affairs of the world from “behind the scene” by completely changing the world upside down. Anyway, history is a “tricky” subject, and learning it in “bits and pieces” here and there, without developing a comprehensive understanding of the whole picture, may prove out to be “counter-productive”. True that the world would never be the same after the World War II, but I have always wanted to know if the two world wars were the works of some “perfect planning so that a “new world order” would eventually come into force. I have also always wondered why the Europeans, after watching the devastating effects of the World War I, couldn’t manage to prevent the 2nd world war! Also, what possibly might have caused Germany to attack Russia after signing a non-aggression pact with Russia just shortly before the start of the 2nd world war! I have many more questions as to what really transpired during this particular period of time, but, perhaps I will never find the answers as it may lead to some really “uncomfortable and inconvenient truths”.
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Describe
a historical period/time you want to
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know
more about. You should say: which
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period
it is how you
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know
about this
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period
of
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history
what its importance is in
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history
and
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explain
what you want to
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know
more about this
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period
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:
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History
has always fascinated me. In fact, it is the honest and objective studies of
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history
that teach us to understand how our
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world
was in the past, how it is
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now
, and how our
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world
will look in the future in the greater scheme of things.
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But
, does that mean that we don’t
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get
to become
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little
biased toward a certain part of the
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history
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because
how it has
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changed
our entire
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world
for
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good
? No, it sure doesn’t.

In fact, the
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world
will
probably
never witness such a
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period
of
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time
that
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started
with the assassination of Archduke Franz Ferdinand of
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Austro-Hungarian
Empire on 28th June 1914, and ended with the creation of a
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world
body of an intergovernmental organization called “The UN” on October 24, 1945. There is no doubt that this particular
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period
of
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time
is of paramount importance in human
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history
since it was after this turbulent
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period
of
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time
, full of
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wars
and destruction, a “shadow” force, in my opinion,
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started
to “manage” the affairs of the
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world
from “behind the scene” by completely changing the
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world
upside down.

Anyway
,
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history
is a “tricky” subject, and learning it in “bits and pieces” here and there, without developing a comprehensive understanding of the whole picture, may prove out to be “counter-productive”. True that the
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world
would never be the same after the
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World
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War
II,
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but
I have always wanted to
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know
if the two
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world
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wars
were the works of
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some
“perfect planning
so
that a “new
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world
order” would
eventually
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come
into force. I have
also
always wondered why the Europeans, after watching the devastating effects of the
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World
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War
I, couldn’t manage to
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prevent
the 2nd
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world
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war
!
Also
, what
possibly
might have caused Germany to attack Russia after signing a non-aggression pact with Russia
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just
shortly
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before
the
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start
of the 2nd
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world
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war
! I have
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many
more questions as to what
really
transpired during this particular
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period
of
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time
,
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, perhaps I will never find the answers as it may lead to
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some
really
“uncomfortable and inconvenient truths”.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a historical period/time you want to know more about. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
431 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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