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Describe a significant historical event in your country you know about. v.1

Describe a significant historical event in your country you know about. v. 1
Describe a significant historical event in your country you know about. You should say: what it is when it happened what happened and say why it is a significant historical event for your country. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: Australia is a great country which has gone through a number of significant events in its history in order to become the country which it is today. However, no other events are probably as significant in this country’s historical passage as the one, that I am about to describe very shortly, as this very event actually helped in creating Australia. This particular significant event took place on 26th of January in the year of 1788 when the first fleet of British ships arrived at Port Jackson of the New South Wales. Besides, the raising of the flag of Great Britain at Sydney Cove by the then Sydney governor, Arthur Phillip, also took place on this same day, which essentially paved the way for the creation of a country called “Australia”. Later on, after a century or so, of course, this day was declared as the “national day” of Australia even though the Aboriginal Australians think otherwise about this particular historic event. In fact, the Aboriginal Australians consider this day, when this historic event took place, as a “national day of mourning” or “invasion day”. Of course, other European traders and explorers had started to make contact with the indigenous Australian people before 250 years earlier, but they didn’t claim any land until after Captain James cook formally had claimed New South Wales for British. This Aboriginal land was taken over by British colonists, on the premise that the land belonged to no-one (‘terra nullius’), either by using “force” against the indigenous people or purchasing their lands from them. Anyway, it is a significant historic event for my country because in the aftermath of this event, On New Year's Day 1901, the British colonies of Australia eventually were able to form a federation, marking the birth of modern Australia. Besides, this is a significant historical event also because it allows us to reflect on our past history and mistakes as a nation and then rectifying them by calling for national unity among the people of a very diverse Australian society.   Sample Answer 2: The assassination of Abraham Lincoln is one of the most significant events in the history of the USA. Lincoln was assassinated by John Wilkes, a renowned actor of that time. Wilkes was a sympathizer of the Confederate and it was an act of vengeance for him to kill Lincoln - according to his testimony. Interestingly, a couple of weeks ago, Lincoln had dreamt of an assassination event and shared it with some of his security officials. But he could not survive the day finally. This is an interesting cue card task and here are the remaining answers in brief. The assassination took place on April 14, 1865. It was a gloomy evening when John Wilkes killed the president. It was a kind of revenge from the belief that Lincoln was the root cause for damaging the South while the assassinator thought that Lincoln dishonoured people and the institutions of South America. So, he planned to kill Lincoln. The president was delivering a speech before audiences when he was shot. It was one of the worst moments for the nation when Abraham Lincoln was murdered. He was a great man and loved the countrymen. He underwent 'unwanted situations’ but handled most of them successfully. His assassination was a great loss for the country. Abraham Lincoln was shot in the back of his head and he went into a coma for around nine hours. He did not wake up from the coma and finally died. This is an important historical event for the USA. Abraham Lincoln tried to make the country united, played an important role to abolish slavery and took many other great initiatives. In line with the assassination, some other events also took place to destroy the administration of Abraham Lincoln. Sadly, it was a great loss for us. Later, a manhunt was conducted to search out the assassinator, John Wilkes.     More Ideas to talk about this Cue Card topic: Cue Card Topic: Describe a significant historical event in your country you know about. 1. Bombing in Nagasaki was a dark chapter in Japanese history. In 1945, during the Second World War, a bomb stormed the city and claimed around 40, 000 lives. It was a nuclear attack on the country and people went through unbearable sufferings on that day and many years to come. 2. The demolition of Babri Masjid in India was a sad historical event. In fact, this was a great assault on the Muslim community of the country. A few corrupt political leaders tried to gain their own interest from the event and the riot killed and injured many people. 3.  First television transmission began in Australia in 1929. Though it was an experimental transmission, it became a part of our history. Initially, the television broadcast was launched from Melbourne and then the TV stations spread in some other areas but the mainstream television was launched later. Considering the impacts televisions have on our lives, this was an important historical event for Australia. 4. In 2000, both primary and secondary education was made compulsory for every child in Singapore. Earlier, it was not mandatory for children and the Compulsory Education Act has made it so. This has been enacted in 2003 and many people in our country consider it a great historical day for Singapore. 5. The discovery of oil in Dammam Dome was a historical event for Saudi Arabia. In fact, oil drilling was running in the region for the past couple of years, and geologists had lost their hopes about oil in this region. As our economy largely depends on this natural resource, the discovery of Damman Dome is a significant event in our national history.    6. The history of Malaysia is enriched with numerous events but I think the birth of the state as an independent nation is the most significant one. It became independent in 1957 as Federation of Malaya from British domination. 7. In 1990, the German football team defeated the Argentine football team and it is a part of our proud history. It was the final match to decide the winner of the FIFA World Cup 1990, and German became the world champion on that day. The match took place in Rome, Italy and Germany scored the only goal in the match. 8. The civil unrest in 2016 was a historical event for Hong Kong and it resulted in a crackdown on unlicensed street hawkers. It had several negative impacts and there was severe violence between protestors and the police. 9. A major earthquake took place on June 1 in 1990 in Iran. The earthquake had some serious consequences on the lives and properties of the local people. It killed nearly 40, 000 people and the destruction of properties was also severe. We sadly remember this historical event and the relatives still mourn for the departed ones. If you can talk about this cue card topic, you should be able to answer the following topics as well: 1. Describe a historical event which is important for your country. 2. Describe something everyone in your country knows about. 3. Describe a famous event in your country.
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you know
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. [You will
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Answer
1:

Australia is a
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great
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country
which has gone through a number of
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significant
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events
in its
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history
in order to become the
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country
which it is
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today
.
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, no
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events
are
probably
as
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in this
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country’s
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passage as the one, that I am about to
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shortly, as this
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actually
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helped
in creating Australia.

This particular
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place
on 26th of January in the
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year
of 1788 when the
first
fleet of British ships arrived at Port Jackson of the New South Wales.
Besides
, the raising of the flag of
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Great
Britain at Sydney Cove by the then Sydney governor, Arthur Phillip,
also
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took
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place
on this same day, which
essentially
paved the way for the creation of a
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country
called “Australia”.

Later on, after a century or
so
,
of course
, this day
was declared
as the
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“national
day” of Australia
even though
the Aboriginal Australians
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think
otherwise
about this particular historic
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. In fact, the Aboriginal Australians consider this day, when this historic
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, as a
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“national
day of mourning” or “invasion day”.
Of course
,
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other
European traders and explorers had
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started
to
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make
contact with the indigenous Australian
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before
250 years earlier,
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but
they didn’t claim any
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land
until after Captain
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James cook
formally
had claimed New South Wales for British. This Aboriginal
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land
was taken
over by British colonists, on the premise that the
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land
belonged to no-one (‘terra nullius’), either by using “force” against the indigenous
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people
or purchasing their
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lands
from them.

Anyway
, it is a
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historic
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event
for my
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in the aftermath of this
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, On New Year's Day 1901, the British colonies of Australia
eventually
were able to form a federation, marking the birth of modern Australia.
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, this is a
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historical
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also
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because
it
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allows
us to reflect on our past
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history
and mistakes as a nation and then rectifying them by calling for
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national
unity among the
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people
of a
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very
diverse Australian society.
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Sample
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Answer
2:

The
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assassination
of Abraham Lincoln is one of the most
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significant
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events
in the
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history
of the USA. Lincoln
was assassinated
by John Wilkes, a renowned actor of that time. Wilkes was a sympathizer of the Confederate and it was an act of vengeance for him to kill Lincoln
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-
according to his testimony.
Interestingly
, a couple of weeks ago, Lincoln had dreamt of an
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assassination
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event
and shared it with
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some
of his security officials.
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But
he could not survive the day
finally
. This is an interesting
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task and here are the remaining
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answers
in brief
. The
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place
on April 14, 1865. It was a gloomy evening when John Wilkes killed the president. It was a kind of revenge from the belief that Lincoln was the root cause for damaging the South while the
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assassinator
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thought
that Lincoln
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dishonoured
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people
and the institutions of South America.
So
, he planned to kill Lincoln. The president was delivering a speech
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before
audiences when he
was shot
. It was one of the worst moments for the nation when Abraham Lincoln
was murdered
. He was a
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great
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man
and
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loved
the countrymen. He underwent 'unwanted situations’
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but
handled most of them
successfully
. His
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assassination
was a
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great
loss for the
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country
. Abraham Lincoln
was shot
in the back of his
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head and
he went into a coma for around nine hours. He did not wake up from the coma and
finally
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died
. This is an
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historical
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for the USA. Abraham Lincoln tried to
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the
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united, played an
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important
role to abolish slavery and
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initiatives. In line with the
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,
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also
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to
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the administration of Abraham Lincoln.
Sadly
, it was a
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great
loss for us. Later, a manhunt
was conducted
to search out the
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assassinator
, John Wilkes.
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Ideas
to talk about this
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:
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:
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significant
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event
in your
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country
you know
about. 1. Bombing in Nagasaki was a dark chapter in Japanese
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history
. In 1945, during the Second World War, a bomb stormed the city and claimed around 40, 000
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lives
. It was a nuclear attack on the
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country
and
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people
went through unbearable sufferings on that day and
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many
years to
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come
. 2. The demolition of
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Babri
Masjid in India was a sad
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historical
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event
. In fact, this was a
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great
assault on the Muslim community of the
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country
. A few corrupt political leaders tried to gain their
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own
interest from the
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event
and the riot killed and injured
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many
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people
. 3.  
First
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television
transmission began in Australia in 1929. Though it was an experimental transmission, it became a part of our
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history
.
Initially
, the
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television
broadcast
was launched
from Melbourne and then the TV stations spread in
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some
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other
areas
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but
the mainstream
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television
was launched
later. Considering the impacts
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televisions
have on our
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lives
, this was an
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important
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historical
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event
for Australia. 4. In 2000, both primary and secondary education
was made
compulsory for every child in Singapore. Earlier, it was not mandatory for children and the Compulsory Education Act has made it
so
. This has
been enacted
in 2003 and
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people
in our
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country
consider it a
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great
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historical
day for Singapore.

5. The discovery of oil in
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Dome was a
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historical
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event
for Saudi Arabia. In fact, oil drilling was running in the region for the past couple of years, and geologists had lost their hopes about oil in this region. As our economy
largely
depends on this natural resource, the discovery of
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Damman
Dome is a
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significant
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event
in our
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national
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history
.
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6. The
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history
of Malaysia
is enriched
with numerous
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events
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but
I
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think
the birth of the state as an independent nation is the most
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significant
one. It became independent in 1957 as Federation of Malaya from British domination.

7. In 1990, the German football team defeated the Argentine football team and it is a part of our proud
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history
. It was the final match to decide the winner of the FIFA World Cup 1990, and German became the world champion on that day. The match
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took
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place
in Rome, Italy and Germany scored the
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only
goal in the match.

8. The civil unrest in 2016 was a
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historical
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event
for Hong Kong and it resulted in a crackdown on unlicensed street hawkers. It had several
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negative
impacts and there was severe violence between protestors and the police.

9. A major earthquake
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took
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place
on June 1 in 1990 in Iran. The earthquake had
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some
serious consequences on the
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lives
and properties of the local
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people
. It killed
nearly
40, 000
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people
and the destruction of properties was
also
severe. We
sadly
remember this
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historical
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event
and the relatives
still
mourn for the departed ones.

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, you should be able to
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the following
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as
well
:

1.
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a
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historical
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event
which is
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important
for your
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country. 2
.
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something everyone in your
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country
knows about.

3.
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a
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famous
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event
in your
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country
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
156Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a significant historical event in your country you know about. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
14 paragraphs
1277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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