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Describe a time when you found something that someone lost. v.1

Describe a time when you found something that someone lost. v. 1
Describe a time when you found something that someone lost. You should say: what it was who lost it how  you found it and explain what you did about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I am not exactly one of those persons who find the “lost” things of other people randomly, simply because I never really like to pick up anything from any place under the sky unless, of course, it is laying at my own place. And, I had been practising this important “rule” of mine like a religion for as long as I could remember. I even loved “preaching” about my rule to others, only to have it “broken” by myself suddenly, one day. Even to this date, sometimes I just wish that I didn’t pick up that shopping bag, with a very expensive watch inside it, which was left by a lady sitting just next to me at a restaurant, eating her saucy spaghetti with macaroni and cheese on top. Of course, I could have just called her from behind when she was “leaving” the food place, but I chose not to, because, I assumed that she was only going to a “washroom” and that she would be soon back to pick her bag. But, she didn’t come back as long as I was present there, eating my food. I could have simply left it as it was, but I informed the restaurant manager. The manager told me that he wouldn’t to be any part of it and that I should have kept the bag with me since I was the first person to see her leaving the bag. I tried to convince the manager otherwise, but it was just a waste of my time and energy as he just wouldn’t “budge” even for a second. So, anyway, I took the expensive watch in my possession and waited at the restaurant as long as I could, but the lady just never came back. I felt like it was my fault that the lady left her shopping bag since I could have stopped her, but assumed wrongly that she would be back, instead. However, after waiting for a little longer just before the closing of the restaurant, I decided to leave the food place after leaving my phone number and contact address to the manager. The following day, the first thing I did was to inform the police about the incident, and the police gladly accepted the watch after handing over me a written document. The police assured me that he would call me if he needed any other information. Then I went back to the restaurant from where I picked up the bag to know if she ever contacted them or not. But the response was “no”.   Finally, I just told the manager that I had left the watch at the local police station to be picked up by its rightful owner. After that, I promised to myself that I would never pick up anything from anywhere unless it was mine and only mine.
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Describe
a time when you found something that someone lost. You should say: what it was who lost it how
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you found it and
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explain
what you did about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer: I am not exactly one of those persons who find the “lost” things of other
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people
randomly
,
simply
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because
I never
really
like to
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pick
up anything from any
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place
under the sky unless,
of course
, it is laying at my
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own
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place
. And, I had been
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practising
this
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important
“
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rule
” of mine like a religion for as long as I could remember. I even
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loved
“preaching” about my
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rule
to others,
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only
to have it “broken” by myself
suddenly
, one day. Even to this date,
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sometimes
I
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just
wish that I didn’t
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pick
up that shopping
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bag
, with a
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very
expensive
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watch
inside it, which was
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left
by a lady sitting
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just
next
to me at a
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restaurant
, eating her saucy spaghetti with macaroni and cheese on top.

Of course
, I could have
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just
called her from behind when she was “leaving” the food
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place
,
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but
I chose not to,
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because
, I assumed that she was
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only
going to a “washroom” and that she would be
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soon
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back
to
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pick
her
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bag
.
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But
, she didn’t
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come
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back
as long as I was present there, eating my food. I could have
simply
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left
it as it was,
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but
I informed the
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restaurant
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manager
. The
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manager
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told
me that he wouldn’t to be any part of it and that I should have
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kept
the
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bag
with me since I was the
first
person to
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see
her leaving the
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bag
. I tried to convince the
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manager
otherwise
,
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but
it was
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just
a waste of my time and energy as he
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just
wouldn’t “budge” even for a second.

So
,
anyway
, I took the expensive
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watch
in my possession and waited at the
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restaurant
as long as I could,
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but
the lady
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just
never came
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back
. I felt like it was my fault that the lady
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left
her shopping
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bag
since I could have
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stopped
her,
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but
assumed
wrongly
that she would be
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back
,
instead
.
However
, after waiting for a
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little
longer
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just
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before
the closing of the
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restaurant
, I decided to
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leave
the food
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place
after leaving my phone number and contact address to the manager.

The following day, the
first
thing I did
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was
to inform the
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police
about the incident, and the
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police
gladly
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accepted
the
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watch
after handing over me a written document. The
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police
assured me that he would call me if he needed any other information. Then I went
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back
to the
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restaurant
from where I picked up the
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bag
to know if she ever contacted them or not.
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But
the response was “no”.
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Finally
, I
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just
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told
the
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manager
that I had
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left
the
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watch
at the local
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police
station to
be picked
up by its rightful owner. After that, I promised to myself that I would never
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pick
up anything from anywhere unless it was mine and
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only
mine.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you found something that someone lost. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
545 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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