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Describe a family celebration you once attended. v.1

Describe a family celebration you once attended. v. 1
Describe a family celebration you once attended. You should say: where it took place why it was held how you felt about it and explain why it was important to you and your family. Follow-up Questions: Q. What types of family celebrations are common in your country? Q. Why these types of celebrations are important in your country?   Model Answer 1: Time flies really fast, and the event, that took place a year ago, seems like happened only a week ago or so. In fact, I can still vividly remember the day when I celebrated a happy new year with all of my family members about a few years ago. However, before that day though, I and my family had wanted to celebrate a happy reunion of the entire family for quite some time, but it just didn’t happen because both my elder brother and sister were not able to make them available because they both used to live quite far away from me and my parents due to their professions. But, we saw a great window of opportunity to have a family celebration as soon as a new year was about to arrive as both of my elder brother and younger sister confirmed that they would visit us on the eve of New Year and spend a few days with us. Anyway, since it was a rare opportunity, we all wanted to make our family reunion a memorable one by celebrating a happy new year together at a nearby restaurant. So, on the eve of New Year, we all went to the restaurant and ordered our favourite foods, that I and my other siblings used to like in our childhood, and desserts. By the way, the idea of our favourite foods from our childhood came from my loving mother, and we all liked it so much. Once, our food fests were over, we decided to head to our home and watch some of our old family videos in order to revisit our lovely and happy past as children. At the end of our reunion, I felt like the celebration was long overdue as we all enjoyed our time to the fullest. Anyway, it was really important for me and my family to attend this celebration because it helped us understand the value of my family like never before. Besides, it also gave us an opportunity to relax and have some fun with the entire family after a tiring and long work year.
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Describe
a
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family
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celebration
you once attended. You should say: where it took place why it
was held
how you felt about it and
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explain
why it was
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important
to you and your
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family
. Follow-up Questions:

Q. What types of
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family
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celebrations
are common in your country?

Q. Why these types of
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celebrations
are
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important
in your country?
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Model Answer 1: Time flies
really
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fast
, and the
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event
, that took place a
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year
ago, seems like happened
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only
a week ago or
so
. In fact, I can
still
vividly
remember the day when I celebrated a
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happy
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new
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year
with all of my
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family
members about a few years ago.

However
,
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before
that day though, I and my
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family
had wanted to celebrate a
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happy
reunion of the entire
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family
for quite
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some
time,
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but
it
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just
didn’t happen
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because
both my elder brother and sister were not able to
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make
them available
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because
they both
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used
to
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live
quite far away from me and my parents due to their professions.
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But
, we
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saw
a great window of opportunity to have a
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family
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celebration
as
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soon
as a
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new
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year
was about to arrive as both of my elder brother and younger sister confirmed that they would visit us on the eve of
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New
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Year
and spend a few days with us.

Anyway
, since it was a rare opportunity, we all wanted to
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make
our
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family
reunion a memorable one by celebrating a
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happy
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new
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year
together at a nearby restaurant.
So
, on the eve of
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New
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Year
, we all went to the restaurant and ordered our
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favourite
foods, that I and my other siblings
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used
to like in our childhood, and desserts. By the way, the
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idea
of our
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favourite
foods from our childhood came from my loving mother, and we all liked it
so
much. Once, our food fests were over, we decided to head to our home and
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watch
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some
of our
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old
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family
videos in order to revisit our lovely and
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happy
past as children. At the
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end
of our reunion, I felt like the
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celebration
was long overdue as we all enjoyed our time to the fullest.

Anyway
, it was
really
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important
for me and my
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family
to attend this
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celebration
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because
it
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helped
us understand the value of my
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family
like never
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before
.
Besides
, it
also
gave us an opportunity to relax and have
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some
fun with the entire
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family
after a tiring and long work
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year
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a family celebration you once attended. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
414 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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