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Describe an importation occasion or event (such as a wedding or a celebration) you have attended. v.1

Describe an importation occasion or event (such as a wedding or a celebration) you have attended. v. 1
Describe an importation occasion or event (such as a wedding or a celebration) you have attended. You should say: when and where you attended this occasion. who else attended what you did and explain how much you enjoyed it. Sample Answer 1: Isn’t it interesting, that thinking of an important occasion or event, the examples given for this cue card are ‘a wedding or celebration’ yet when I thought of the most recent ‘important occasion’ I have attended, it wasn’t really either of these…. I’ll try and explain. I’ll talk about when and where I attended this event, who else was there and what my role was. I don’t know if ‘enjoy’ is quite the right word to use to describe how I felt about going, but I will tell you why I was pleased to be present for it and why it was so important I was. So the occasion was just last month. I had to go to the funeral of an elderly relative of mine, who early in the New Year had died at the age of ninety. The funeral was held about a five-hour drive away from where I live, so it was a long way to go to be there to say goodbye, but it was very important to me to be there. I was very close to her. We were relatives, but only very distant ones. I’d got to know her as an adult, and we had exchanged letters with each other on a regular basis for over 25 years – that’s a quarter of a century. Our letters covered a multitude of topics from politics to travel and work. She herself had lived a full and interesting life, travelling all over the world and publishing many eminent papers on a range of topics from scientific enquiry to classical art - but in her last few years was in great pain. The last time I saw her was to join her for a celebratory lunch for her ninetieth birthday. She was mentally strong, but physically frail, and it was clear she was treating this occasion as a farewell meal. It wasn’t a surprise to me that she died a few weeks later. Of course, I wanted to be at her funeral, it was really important to be there to ‘send her off’ with affection, and share memories of her life with others who knew her and cared for her too. This relative had never married, and didn’t have children. Even so, there were many people there. She would have been really pleased to see friends and neighbours, as well as family members, join the goodbyes. She did have some nieces and nephews, as well as me, a cousin, who were all at her last birthday meal. Together we came up with memories of her to include in the Eulogy about her life that was read at the ceremony. I suggested a range of readings that I thought were appropriate to her interests in the natural world and enthusiasm for literature. The funeral itself was poignant of course, but it was also a joyful celebration and recognition of a full and unique life. She had lived life to the full as the saying goes, and frankly was ready to go at the end. Her passing will leave a huge gap in the world, but although it may sound strange the funeral was joyful too. My role was to contribute ideas for the Eulogy, but also to start the service with a reading. I chose one from The Tempest, one of Shakespeare’s plays. It is quite a famous extract, and is probably used at funerals a lot as it is quite appropriate. It starts ‘our revels now are ended’ and I think she would have appreciated it as she loved Shakespeare very much. I don’t think I’d use the word ‘enjoy’ as such for a funeral, as it doesn’t seem entirely fitting. However, I found the ceremony and the gathering for tea and sandwiches that followed it incredibly comforting. It was lovely to hear stories of this relative that I’d not heard before from other people, and share happy memories. Someone had even found some old black and white film of her playing on a beach with her father and siblings when she was just a toddler. The footage was hilarious! She and her two brothers are running unevenly along in the sand, their father is playing with them with real joy. But it was a different time, so even though it is a hot day at the seaside, he is wearing a three-piece suit with a tie, a hat and smoking a pipe! It was impossible not to laugh at the picture, and be pleased she had enjoyed that carefree day so many decades ago that we were seeing for the first time all these years later. I think she would have loved it!   It brought this cousin back to life as we recalled with affection the adventures she’d had, the legacy she’d leave and the influence she’d had on all of us. Her life did make a difference, and that is all any of us might wish for. I believe as long as you talk about people and remember them they are still with you in a way. Although perhaps you weren’t expecting me to choose to talk about a funeral as a celebratory event, I still think it is appropriate. This funeral was indeed a celebration of the most remarkable life, and I was certainly an important occasion. I think it is only apt that both she and her funeral should be remembered with affection and with a smile. [ Written by - Lucy Marris: Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]
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Describe
an importation
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occasion
or
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event
(such as a wedding or a
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celebration)
you have
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attended
. You should say: when and where you
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attended
this
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occasion
.
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who
else
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attended
what you did and
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explain
how much you enjoyed it. Sample Answer 1:

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important
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occasion
or
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, the examples
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given
for this cue card are ‘a wedding or
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celebration’
yet
when I
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of the most recent ‘
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I have
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, it wasn’t
really
either of these…. I’ll
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. I’ll talk about when and where I
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else was there and what my role was.
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you why I was
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pleased
to be present for it and why it was
so
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I was.
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the
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was
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last month. I had to go to the
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of an elderly
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relative
of mine,
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who
early in the New
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had
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died
at the age of ninety. The
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was held
about a five-hour drive away from where I
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live
,
so
it was a long way to go to be there to say goodbye,
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it was
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very
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to me to be there. I was
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close to her. We were
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relatives
,
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distant ones. I’d
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to know her as an adult, and we had exchanged letters with each other on a regular basis for over 25 years
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that’s a quarter of a century. Our letters covered a multitude of topics from politics to travel and work. She herself had
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lived
a full and interesting
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life
, travelling all over the world and publishing
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many
eminent papers on a range of topics from scientific
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enquiry
to classical art
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in her last few years was in great pain. The last time I
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saw
her was to
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join
her for a celebratory lunch for her ninetieth birthday. She was mentally strong,
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but
physically
frail, and it was
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clear
she was treating this
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occasion
as a farewell meal. It wasn’t a surprise to me that she
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died
a few weeks later.
Of course
, I wanted to be at her
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funeral
, it was
really
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important
to be there to ‘
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send
her off’ with affection, and share memories of her
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life
with others
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who
knew her and cared for her too. This
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had never married, and didn’t have children. Even
so
, there were
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many
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there. She would have been
really
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to
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friends and
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, as
well
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the goodbyes. She did have
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nieces and nephews, as
well
as me, a cousin,
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who
were all at her last birthday meal. Together we came up with memories of her to include in the Eulogy about her
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life
that
was read
at the ceremony. I suggested a range of readings that I
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thought
were appropriate to her interests in the natural world and enthusiasm for literature. The
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itself was poignant
of course
,
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it was
also
a joyful
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celebration
and recognition of a full and unique
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life
. She had
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lived
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life
to the full as the saying goes, and
frankly
was ready to go at the
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end
. Her passing will
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a huge gap in the world,
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although it may sound strange the
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was joyful too. My role was to contribute
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ideas
for the Eulogy,
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also
to
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the service with a reading. I chose one from The Tempest, one of Shakespeare’s plays. It is quite a
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famous
extract, and is
probably
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at
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funerals
a lot as it is quite appropriate. It
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starts
‘our revels
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now
are ended
’ and I
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think
she would have appreciated it as she
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loved
Shakespeare
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much. I don’t
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I’d
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the word ‘enjoy’ as such for a
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funeral
, as it doesn’t seem
entirely
fitting.
However
, I found the ceremony and the gathering for tea and sandwiches that followed it
incredibly
comforting. It was lovely to hear stories of this
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relative
that I’d not heard
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before
from other
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people
, and share happy memories. Someone had even found
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old
black and white film of her playing on a beach with her father and siblings when she was
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a toddler. The footage was hilarious! She and her two brothers are running
unevenly
along in the sand, their father is playing with them with real joy.
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it was a
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different
time,
so
even though
it is a hot day at the seaside, he is wearing a three-piece suit with a tie, a hat and smoking a pipe! It was impossible not to laugh at the picture, and be
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pleased
she had enjoyed that carefree day
so
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many
decades ago that we were seeing for the
first
time all these years later. I
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she would have
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loved
it!
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It brought this cousin back to
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life
as we recalled with affection the adventures she’d had, the legacy she’d
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leave
and the influence she’d had on all of us. Her
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life
did
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make
a difference, and
that is
all any of us might wish for. I believe as long as you talk about
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people
and remember them they are
still
with you in a way. Although perhaps you weren’t expecting me to choose to talk about a
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funeral
as a celebratory
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event
, I
still
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think
it is appropriate. This
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was
indeed
a
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celebration
of the most remarkable
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life
, and I was
certainly
an
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occasion
. I
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think
it is
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only
apt that both she and her
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funeral
should
be remembered
with affection and with a smile.
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Written by
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-
Lucy
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: Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an importation occasion or event (such as a wedding or a celebration) you have attended. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
959 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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