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Describe a birthday celebration you have attended recently. v.1

Describe a birthday celebration you have attended recently. v. 1
Describe a birthday celebration you have attended recently. You should say: whose birthday it was who attended the party where it took place and explain how much you enjoyed this birthday celebration.   Model Answer 1: In this busy life, we don’t really get enough time to enjoy much social and family life, despite our best efforts and intention. Still, whatever spare time we manage, we try to make the best use of it, just like I did recently by attending a birthday party. It was the birthday of one of my close friends who lives in a different city.   I would have almost forgotten about this birthday if I hadn’t tried to organize the desk of my living room. In fact, it was on that desk that I found the little note, I wrote about a couple of weeks ago, about the special occasion and its date. Luckily it fell on a weekend, so it was really a great opportunity for me, after all, to enjoy a little social life. Anyway, the "birthday" party took place at the residence of my good friend who lives in a rather large house with his entire family, including his parents, wife and a couple of his siblings. The birthday party was also attended by a number of our common friends and a number of close relatives of my friend. I think that there were about 50 people altogether, who attended the birthday party, and all of them were enjoying their time in a very friendly atmosphere while enjoying some snacks and soft drinks also at the same time. Finally, the time for the cake cutting ceremony arrived, and we all sang the “happy birthday” song to wish a very happy and long life for my friend. After spending about a couple of happy and fun hours at the party, we ended it on a good note with a light dinner meal to satisfy our appetite. Anyway, I really enjoyed the birthday party of my friend as it allowed me to forget about the worries of my life for a while. Besides, at the party, I felt free to laugh with my heart’s content and crack any jokes with my friends after a long time. All in all, it was a great birthday celebration which made everybody happy.
Describe
a birthday celebration you have
attended
recently. You should say: whose birthday it was
who
attended
the
party
where it took place and
explain
how much you enjoyed this birthday celebration.
 
Model Answer 1: In this busy
life
, we don’t
really
get
enough
time
to enjoy much social and family
life
, despite our best efforts and intention.
Still
, whatever spare
time
we manage, we try to
make
the best
use
of it,
just
like I did recently by attending a birthday party.

It was the birthday of one of my close
friends
who
lives
in a
different
city.
 
I would have almost forgotten about this birthday if I hadn’t tried to organize the desk of my living room. In fact, it was on that desk that I found the
little
note, I wrote about a couple of weeks ago, about the special occasion and its date. Luckily it fell on a weekend,
so
it was
really
a great opportunity for me,
after all
, to enjoy a
little
social life.

Anyway
, the
"
birthday
"
party
took place at the residence of my
good
friend
who
lives
in a
rather
large
house
with his entire family, including his parents, wife and a couple of his siblings. The birthday
party
was
also
attended
by a number of our common
friends
and a number of close relatives of my
friend
. I
think
that there were about 50
people
altogether,
who
attended
the birthday
party
, and all of them were enjoying their
time
in a
very
friendly atmosphere while enjoying
some
snacks and soft drinks
also
at the same
time
.
Finally
, the
time
for the cake cutting ceremony arrived, and we all sang the
“happy
birthday” song to wish a
very
happy
and long
life
for my
friend
. After spending about a couple of
happy
and fun hours at the
party
, we ended it on a
good
note with a light dinner meal to satisfy our appetite.

Anyway
, I
really
enjoyed the birthday
party
of my
friend
as it
allowed
me to forget about the worries of my
life
for a while.
Besides
, at the
party
, I felt free to laugh with my heart’s content and crack any jokes with my
friends
after a long
time
. All in all, it was a great birthday celebration which made everybody
happy
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a birthday celebration you have attended recently. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
386 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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