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Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. v.1

Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. v. 1
Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. You should say: who the person was what the situation was what decision he/she/they made and explain why you think it was such a wrong decision.   Model Answer 1: Life is full of decisions and choices. While some of those decisions turn out to be great, the others turn out to be wrong. Of course, people will argue that it all depends on the situations and perspectives of a person. However, having full respect for this perspective issue, I still think that people have the liberty to judge whether a decision is right or wrong. Anyway, I would like to talk about a 'wrong decision' of one of my close friends, who moved to a different location about a few months ago. Of course, there is nothing wrong with moving to a new place if there are some valid reasons for it. But, as far as my friend was concerned, he was already living in a nice and spacious flat in a rather open area, which was adjacent to a beautiful lake and lots of greeneries. And, if I remember correctly, I never found him to be complaining anything about the residence or place he was living in except some occasional and mild complain that he needed to travel a long distance to arrive his office and come back to home from there. In fact, according to him, spending one hour on the road every day was a bit too much for him, so it was important for him to move close to his work, which, by the way, would be a crowded city and full of pollution. Of course, I tried to convince him not to move because I knew how much he enjoyed nature at his old place. But, he seemed determined on his decision to move close to his job. I think that moving out of his old place was a wrong decision, primarily because, in my opinion, he always had found the extra energy there to do more things and become more productive there. After all, he was living in a place which was surrounded by some beautiful nature. Besides, moving to a busy city was always going to be more expensive than living in a suburb. But, after all, it was his decision to make whether it was right or wrong.   Sample Answer 2: My friend Robin made a 'wrong decision' that I still do not support and feel sorry for. Robin is one of my close friends whom I met in my elementary school. After that time, he has become one of my very good friends. He has a natural talent for art and his arts and sketches have been highly praised in different art competitions. I remember he won the first prize in an art competition when he was only 12 years old and in this competition, there were many matured competitors from university level. I was a great admirer of his arts and I always knew he would become a great artist someday. But to my wildest surprise, after he passed the board exam, he got admitted in B. B. A. instead of art school. That was indeed shocking news for me and I could not believe the news after I heard it. I thought that he was destined to be a famous artist. Maybe he was pressurised by his relatives and parents to take such a wrong decision. To me, that was a fatal error he has ever made. It was a wrong decision because he has chosen a major for study which would not be interesting and attractive to him. He has not taken this decision wisely and has considered about getting a better job instead of nurturing of a natural talent he has. In the long run, he would regret his decision and I still find no reason for his taking such a wrong decision about his life.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a wrong decision you made in your life. Describe a decision you regret about. Describe a negative experience you have in your life. Describe a piece of advice you gave to someone. Describe a decision you made that took you a long time.
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he/she/they made and
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Model Answer
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1: Life
is full of
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decisions
and choices. While
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some
of those
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decisions
turn out to be great, the others turn out to be
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wrong
.
Of course
,
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people
will argue that it all depends on the situations and perspectives of a person.
However
, having full respect for this perspective issue, I
still
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think
that
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people
have the liberty to judge whether a
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decision
is
right
or
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wrong
.

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, I would like to talk about a '
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wrong
decision' of one of my
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close
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friends
, who
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moved
to a
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different
location about a few months ago.
Of course
, there is nothing
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wrong
with moving to a new
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place
if there are
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some
valid reasons for it.

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But
, as far as my
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friend
was concerned
, he was already
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living
in a nice and spacious flat in a
rather
open area, which was adjacent to a
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beautiful
lake and lots of
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greeneries
. And, if I remember
correctly
, I never found him to be complaining anything about the residence or
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place
he was
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living
in except
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some
occasional and mild complain that he needed to travel a long distance to arrive his office and
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come
back to home from there. In fact, according to him, spending one hour on the road every day was a bit too much for him,
so
it was
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important
for him to
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move
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close
to his work, which, by the way, would be a crowded city and full of pollution.
Of course
, I tried to convince him not to
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move
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because
I knew how much he enjoyed nature at his
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old
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place
.
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But
, he seemed determined on his
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decision
to
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move
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close
to his job.

I
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think
that moving out of his
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old
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place
was a
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wrong
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decision
,
primarily
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because
, in my opinion, he always had found the extra energy there to do more things and become more productive there.
After all
, he was
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living
in a
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place
which
was surrounded
by
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some
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beautiful
nature.
Besides
, moving to a busy city was always going to be more expensive than
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living
in a suburb.
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But
,
after all
, it was his
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decision
to
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make
whether it was
right
or
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wrong
.
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Sample Answer 2:

My
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friend
Robin made a '
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wrong
decision' that I
still
do not support and feel sorry for. Robin is one of my
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close
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friends
whom I met in my elementary school. After that time, he has become one of my
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very
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good
friends.

He has a natural talent for
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art
and his
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arts
and sketches have been
highly
praised in
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different
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art
competitions. I remember he won the
first
prize in an
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art
competition when he was
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only
12 years
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old
and in this competition, there were
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many
matured competitors from university level. I was a great admirer of his
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arts
and I always knew he would become a great artist someday.

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But
to my wildest surprise, after he passed the board exam, he
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got
admitted in B. B. A.
instead
of
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art
school. That was
indeed
shocking news for me and I could not believe the news after I heard it. I
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thought
that he
was destined
to be a
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famous
artist. Maybe he was
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pressurised
by his relatives and parents to take such a
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wrong
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decision
. To me, that was a fatal error he has ever made.

It was a
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wrong
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decision
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because
he has chosen a major for study which would not be interesting and attractive to him. He has not taken this
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decision
wisely
and has
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considered about getting
a better job
instead
of nurturing of a natural talent he has. In the long run, he would regret his
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decision
and I
still
find no reason for his taking such a
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wrong
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decision
about his
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life
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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wrong
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decision
you made in your
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life
.
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Describe
a
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decision
you regret about.
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Describe
a
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negative
experience you have in your
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life
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a piece of advice you gave to someone.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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decision
you made that took you a long time.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
731 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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