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Describe a common bird in your country. v.1

Describe a common bird in your country. v. 1
Describe a common bird in your country. You should say: What is it How it looks like Where can you see it And explain some common characteristics of this bird. Sample answer 1: I live in England, and we are lucky in that we have many birds that visit our gardens as lots of people like to put out food to feed them, especially in the winter months. I’m going to tell you about one such common but distinctive bird. I will explain what it is, describe its appearance as best I can, let you know where you can see it and share with you some of its most common characteristics. The bird I’m thinking of is the Robin, sometimes it’s referred to as robin redbreast, and it often features on wintry scenes on Christmas Cards. These birds are very distinctive and enormously popular, in fact, earlier in 2015 it was voted Britain’s favourite native bird, and I’m not at all surprised. They are easy to identify, and very confident around people, so everyone knows a robin near to where they live. Size wise I think they are about five to five and a half inches in length. They have a distinctly rounded appearance, when they fluff up their feathers for warmth in winter they can appear almost spherical, it makes you wonder how they can fly! The male and female are similar in colouration. Despite their name ‘redbreast’ in fact, they have an orange breast and face lined with grey, then brown upperparts and a whitish belly. It is the orange which is the most distinctive though, I don’t think a robin has ever been wrongly identified! I have been told the reason they are called ‘redbreast’ even though their colour is clearly orange, is because years ago there wasn’t a word for ‘orange’ in the English language, and red was the nearest approximation, I don’t know if that’s true, but it’s possible. You can see robins in gardens everywhere. They are noisy and territorial so you will often only have one, or a pair in any patch of property. Although they are thought of as friendly because of how domesticated they appear with people, they can be pretty vicious with each other. It is not uncommon to see a robin furiously hurling itself at its own reflection in a window pane, attacking the glass with its wings and beak, thinking it is seeing off a rival. They are unconcerned by humans, not necessarily tame, but habituated to people they have learned that they can benefit from some human behaviours. For example, they will be attracted by the smell of newly turned earth, so if you are gardening, or sweeping leaves it is a very common experience for a robin to come and join you. They will come really close, standing on the handle of a garden fork to watch for worms or insects which they will then fly down and eat. It is very satisfying if you are digging to turn up a worm and see a hungry robin seize it – less satisfying for the worm I suppose! If you are living in the UK or even parts of Europe, I’m sure you’ll know this bird already, but even if you don’t I’d be surprised if you hadn’t seen one on a Christmas card or in a Christmas film at some point – they get everywhere. [ Written by - Lucy Marris | Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Model Answer 2: The kingfisher is a common bird in our country and it is really a beautiful bird. This bird probably got its name from its habit of catching fishes from the ponds and lakes. In a single word, this, in my opinion, is the most beautiful bird I have ever seen. This bird has got red, blue, greyish, yellow and many other colour combinations on its father and the tail is usually longer than other birds. The keen eyes, the speedy movement and its ability to catch fishes in the blink of eyes make it a very distinguishable bird. In our country, the bird is very common in urban and village area where lots of ponds, lakes and rivers are available. Since it catches fishes, it can be seen near the water mostly. This bird is a fine hunter. The way it flies and catches fishes is simply amazing. I have never seen any other birds that can catch fishes or other insects so fast. The gorgeous colour combination, the thin and long tail makes this bird exceptional from other birds. This bird can be seen mostly in the morning and in the evening as fishes come to the upper side of the water at that time. I really like this bird and definitely, it is a bird of beauty and skill.   Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a bird you know about. Describe an animal or a bird in your country. Describe a beautiful creature you know about. Describe a distinguishable animal you know about.
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a
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common
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bird
in your
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country
. You should say: What is it How it looks like Where can you
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see
it And
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explain
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some
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common
characteristics of this
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bird
. Sample answer 1:

I
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live
in England, and we are lucky in that we have
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many
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birds
that visit our gardens as lots of
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people
like to put out food to feed them,
especially
in the winter months. I’m going to
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tell
you about one such
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common
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but
distinctive
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bird
.
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I
will
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explain
what it is,
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describe
its appearance as best I can,
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let
you
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know
where you can
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see
it and share with you
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some
of its most
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common
characteristics. The
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bird
I’m thinking of is the Robin,
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sometimes
it’s referred to as robin redbreast, and it
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often
features on wintry scenes on Christmas
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Cards
. These
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birds
are
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very
distinctive and
enormously
popular, in fact, earlier in 2015 it
was voted
Britain’s
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favourite
native
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bird
, and I’m not at all surprised. They are easy to identify, and
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very
confident around
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people
,
so
everyone
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knows
a robin near to where they
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live
. Size wise I
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think
they are about five to five and a half inches in length. They have a
distinctly
rounded appearance, when they fluff up their feathers for warmth in winter they can appear almost spherical, it
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makes
you wonder how they can
fly
! The male and female are similar in
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colouration
. Despite their name ‘redbreast’ in fact, they have an orange breast and face lined with
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grey
, then brown
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upperparts
and a whitish belly. It is the orange which is the most distinctive though, I don’t
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think
a robin has ever been
wrongly
identified! I have been
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told
the reason they
are called
‘redbreast’
even though
their
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colour
is
clearly
orange, is
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because
years ago there wasn’t a word for ‘orange’ in the English language, and red was the nearest approximation, I don’t
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know
if that’s true,
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but
it’s possible. You can
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see
robins in gardens everywhere. They are noisy and territorial
so
you will
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often
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only
have one, or a pair in any patch of property. Although they are
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thought
of as friendly
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because
of how domesticated they appear with
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people
, they can be pretty vicious with each
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other
. It is not uncommon to
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see
a robin
furiously
hurling itself at its
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own
reflection in a window pane, attacking the glass with its wings and beak, thinking it is seeing off a rival. They
are unconcerned
by humans, not
necessarily
tame,
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but
habituated to
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people
they have learned that they can benefit from
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some
human
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behaviours
.
For example
, they will
be attracted
by the smell of
newly
turned earth,
so
if you are gardening, or sweeping
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leaves
it is a
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very
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common
experience for a robin to
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come
and
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join
you. They will
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come
really
close, standing on the handle of a garden fork to
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watch
for worms or insects which they will then
fly
down and eat. It is
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very
satisfying if you are digging to turn up a worm and
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see
a hungry robin seize it
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–
less satisfying for the worm I suppose! If you are living in the UK or even parts of Europe, I’m sure you’ll
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know
this
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bird
already,
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but
even if you don’t I’d
be surprised
if you hadn’t
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seen
one on a Christmas
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card
or in a Christmas film at
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some
point
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–
they
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get
everywhere.
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[
Written by
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-
Lucy
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Marris
| Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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]
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Model Answer 2:

The kingfisher is a
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common
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bird
in our
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country
and it is
really
a
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beautiful
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bird
. This
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bird
probably
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got
its name from its habit of catching fishes from the ponds and lakes. In a single word, this, in my opinion, is the most
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beautiful
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bird
I have ever
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seen
. This
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bird
has
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got
red, blue,
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greyish
, yellow and
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many
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other
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colour
combinations on its father and the tail is
usually
longer than
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other
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birds
. The keen eyes, the speedy movement and its ability to
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catch
fishes in the blink of eyes
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make
it a
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very
distinguishable
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bird
. In our
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country
, the
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bird
is
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very
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common
in urban and village area where lots of ponds, lakes and rivers are available. Since it
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catches
fishes, it can be
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seen
near the water
mostly
. This
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bird
is a fine hunter. The way it flies and
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catches
fishes is
simply
amazing. I have never
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seen
any
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other
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birds
that can
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catch
fishes or
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other
insects
so
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fast
. The gorgeous
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colour
combination, the thin and long tail
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makes
this
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bird
exceptional from
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other
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birds
. This
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bird
can be
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seen
mostly
in the morning and in the evening as fishes
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come
to the upper side of the water at that time. I
really
like this
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bird
and definitely, it is a
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bird
of beauty and
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skill
.
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Your ability to talk about this Cue
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Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue
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Topics as
well
:
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Describe
a
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bird
you
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know
about.
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Describe
an animal or a
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bird
in your
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country
.
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Describe
a
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beautiful
creature you
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know
about.
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Describe
a distinguishable animal you
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know
about.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
72Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a common bird in your country. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
860 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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